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Below is the poem entitled PATTY-CAKE ANGELS which was written by poet Monterey Sirak. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Poet's Notes

I was privileged to know a beautiful girl named Beverly who was developmentally challenged. She giggled her way through storms because she thought it was just the angels bowling. After Beverly left to join the angels I imagined what her first night was like.

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When the sky begins to darken
and clouds churn round the moon
Thunder rolls in from the distance
and rumbles right on through
The rumble rising to a crescendo
as if clouds collided up on high

Then you know it is bowling night in Heaven
and the leagues are doing fine

The patty-cake angels look so sweet
in matching bowling gowns
as they rise to enter the meet
With their newest angel Beverly
they will shine on Heaven’s streets

Beverly’s eyes sparkle with moonlight 
reflected in their depths
She gives a little giggle of pure happiness
and picks up a stardust bowling ball

Feathery wings fluttering
she dances to the lane of solid gold
takes careful aim and lets the ball roll
straight into pins of finest harpsichord

All is still and silent
except for the rumbling of the ball
But when it reaches the pins
the sweetest music is heard by all

The angels are hopping
and high-five-ing all around
Kicking up their heels
in their shiny gossamer gowns

But one angel smiles the brightest
for Beverly got a strike

So when the sky begins to darken
and all is still and silent
listen for the rumble of stardust bowling balls
rolling down the lanes of solid god

And cheer for the patty-cake angels
whose pure souls and loving hearts
were wrapped in broken bodies 
during their earthbound life

(Look in About Poem for the inspiration)

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  1. Date: 11/9/2013 6:33:00 PM
    This is an imaginative and creative write. The reader feels like they are really there, cheering on this team of heavenly bowlers. Nice job Thanks for the nice comment on my Contagious poem. I appreciate it

  1. Date: 8/14/2013 2:28:00 PM
    I couldn't find a new poem from you but decided to read the "about poem" i never did the first time. How nice you got to know this girl.

  1. Date: 8/1/2013 3:54:00 AM
    Poet, Wow excellent poem. Thank you so much for sharing your beautiful poetry I'm thankful.

  1. Date: 7/4/2013 11:27:00 AM
    Bowling night in heaven and patty cake angels. I will be looking at thunder storms with a whole new optimism... fantastic imagery :)

  1. Date: 7/4/2013 6:57:00 AM
    Lovely words, woven together in this inspiring poem...ty4sharing monterey, really enjoyed reading congrats on your win and Thankyou for commenting on my poem, really appreciate it:0) cherie,,,,

  1. Date: 6/28/2013 7:29:00 PM
    Loved this one as well Monterey.....Seren

  1. Date: 6/27/2013 11:40:00 PM
    Your additional explanation made this poem a lot clearer to me. This is a very imaginative write.

  1. Date: 6/25/2013 10:10:00 AM
    So loved it......:):):)Adarsh

  1. Date: 6/25/2013 8:02:00 AM
    Thanks for your visit and positive comments. Have a great day.

  1. Date: 6/24/2013 1:26:00 AM
    You stroke it well my dear Monterey! I'm Stopping by to congratulate you on your winning beautiful poem and to thank you on your comments in my works. Well done.AO

  1. Date: 6/23/2013 2:45:00 PM
    Monterey. Many congratulations & much happiness on your winner. George

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 10:05:00 PM
    Monterey. Thank you very much :-) Congratulations on your wonderful win~ LOVE~ SKAT.

  1. Date: 6/22/2013 7:33:00 AM
    Good morning Monterey.

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 6:45:00 PM
    This is a sheer delight and has put a smile on my face. Also there is a twinge of sadness for her family. This I simply divine.

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 4:29:00 PM
    I loved reading your inspiration for this beautiful poem, and the wonderful story of Beverly. What a great dedication this is to her! So lovely!!

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 3:25:00 PM
    just read your "about poem" message. So sweet. (but I think I once heard someone speak of bowling having to do with thunder. Or maybe I am remembering something from Rip Van Winkle!!)

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 3:23:00 PM
    why, this is REALLY inventive. I think I heard of this before but you put it into poetry and made it so special. A wonderful angel poem entry.

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 3:22:00 PM
    so glad you got the dream boat idea after reading it. It came to me after I wrote it . To rhyme love note with dream boat. haha

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 1:44:00 PM
    lovely indeed, my friend

  1. Date: 6/21/2013 1:38:00 PM
    My this is precious beyond words Carissima, love it love it love it, if it is for the contest, it should be a winner for sure, love to you xxx