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On the Dusk


                 In the same horizon
                 sky turns desperately gray 
                 with fugitive streaks in purple and pink
                 Ungenerous sun of December 
                 falls behind the apprehensive silhouettes 
                 of a dark
                 The smell of near pine trees 
                 in a tired breeze that faints to my feet
                 brings a dim relief to this agonizing day
                 Somnolent weariness of a defeated existence
                 breathfeeding in penumbras the loneliness of the dusk
                 imperceptible and yet so obvious
                 Loaded with memories
                 the cigarette smoke into the eyes
                 as timid stars shiver at the sound of despair 
                 escaping from a deflating soul
                 Why the Moon hurts so much 
                 when it's not being shared?


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  1. Date: 3/26/2010 9:39:00 AM
    Amazing work! This poem paints so many pictures! You leave little to imagine yet so much to wonder about! That's what a great poet does. Beautiful! :)

  1. Date: 3/14/2010 10:49:00 AM
    Fantastic write, fantastic win, Ruben!!! You're among my favs. who do not disappoint!! Thanks for taking the time to read mine and leave your always, kind and encouraging comments! Peace, Audrey

  1. Date: 3/9/2010 6:06:00 PM
    congratulations Ruben, nice work....Margaret

  1. Date: 3/9/2010 8:12:00 AM
    Awesome Ruben, is all I can say. A I have come to expect from you , my friend. Agape(Christian Love) to your talent. Moses

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 2:02:00 PM
    Congratulations, Ruben! Me encantaba de leerlo! A mi tambien me gustaron tus fotos en facebook. Did you have a look at mine? Thank you also for your kind comments. I really appreciate them. Have a good time my friend...Gert

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 11:47:00 AM
    Many congratulations Ruben for this wonderful poem, and deserved of third place >> James

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 11:46:00 AM
    Congratulation on your win with this very descriptive piece which flows with such depth of the heart with images that drive both the heart and mind,,and Thank you for reading and commenting upon my words,,,Blessings..Cecil

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 9:21:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win in Laura's Beyond Nightfall! contest Ruben. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 7:45:00 AM
    We are so proud of you Ruben,Well deserved Win...Here is a Gold Star from Cuchi:)

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 7:31:00 AM
    Knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!! Looks who's in the winner's circle!! Knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!! Bravo....this is a deeply sad, yet wonderful poem my friend!! Bravo!!!

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 5:27:00 AM
    Monumentally sad...wishing to share the moon...awww continents away! "The somnolent weariness of a defeated existence breathfeeding in penumbras the loneliness of the dusk" Great win! Light & Love

  1. Date: 3/8/2010 12:37:00 AM
    Ruben, my congratulations to you on winning 3rd on this contest, well deserving. (^_^) Noel.

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 10:33:00 PM
    Congratulations, Rueben and you scored high with it too! LUv, Andrea

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 9:14:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win with this great poem. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 8:50:00 PM
    Congrats Ruben on your 3rd place win in the Beyond Nightfall contest.. a wonderful write and win for u to enjoy .. thankxxx for being so nice and concerned on my Easter poem this morning.. happy for another eye to view ... thankxxx ..luv.. "Sweetheart"

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 6:43:00 PM
    Congratulations Ruben, on your success in the Poetry Soup member contest: Beyond Nightfall! Sponsored by: Laura Mckenzie. I can see why you won 3rd place! Nice! Smiles, Dane Ann

  1. Date: 3/7/2010 6:13:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win...enjoyed..Marty

  1. Date: 3/6/2010 9:37:00 PM
    I love this kind of writing best, when poets are visual, Rueben. THis one is SOUPerb! Luv, Andrea

  1. Date: 3/6/2010 12:25:00 PM
    Very nice visual Ruben. My eyes sting from the cigarette smoke. I appreciate the comment on my poem. Would have caught the title sooner or later but definitely like sooner. Thanks for the heads up. Charles Henderson

  1. Date: 3/6/2010 12:04:00 PM
    Can fell the lonliness.Susan