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Maid of brines

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Maid of brines

Maid of brines
The flag was waving on the stern;
she stared saluting and the mist
my face on forecastle, coldly kissed,
- she tried my figure to discern.

The Adriatic was that night
half covered by a cotton cloud,
- endowed the night's adorning shroud
and took our ship afar, forthright.

A ghostly ship, a ghostly log
- the maid of brines had left betimes
addressed us with the sounds of chimes
that rang accordant from the fog.

Harmonious her song had welled
from depths, unearthly was the verse
that lingered in our minds' rehearse,
bespoken words, beloved and held.

Her image standing on the bow,
in dark my solitude enacts,
while shooting stars on earthward tracks
induct to quell by ocean's draw.

Our recklessness, the route defines
and nautilus' endangered role,
I know it's wrongful to recall
our bicycling and coastline pines.

The ghostly ship transports us there
attending to the deepness' shrine,
how beautiful the dewdrops shine
and grandness of her seaward fair!

© 04-21-2013, G. Venetopoulos, All Rights Reserved
(Iambic tetrameter)

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  1. Date: 10/20/2013 4:53:00 PM
    I can definitely feel the deep sadness within this poem, and the longing for a lost love. Amazing work, Giorgio! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...This reminds me of my poem, "Her Heart Is The Sea". It was written for Poetess Darkly's recent contest, but unfortunately it did not place...Thank you so much for the great comments. And, thanks for being a good friend. :)

  1. Date: 10/8/2013 8:53:00 PM
    very deep..... enjoyed....SKAT

  1. Date: 10/7/2013 2:57:00 PM
    Congratulations Giorgio ...a definite feeling of longing while the words undulate and flow so beautifully. You have a wonderful talent. SuZ

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 6:06:00 PM
    There is always the feeling of longing, of deep blue sadness while looking at the seascape under a starry night. Another beautifully written poem from your amazing pen.

  1. Date: 10/6/2013 5:32:00 PM
    Giorgio, thank you for the wonderful entry in my LONGING contest... wonderful motion and imagery... congrats! xox~ Linda

  1. Date: 4/22/2013 7:48:00 AM
    Enjoyed reading your creative work this morn..Thanks for the explanation..Sara

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 4/25/2013 3:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Sara! :)
  1. Date: 4/21/2013 11:15:00 AM
    Giorgio, Your poem is beautifully written and thought out... love the raindrop shinny imagery.... xox~ Linda

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 4/25/2013 3:32:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Linda! :)