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Below is the poem entitled Januaries which was written by poet Roy Jerden. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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white wigwam winter
Gitche Gumee waters wash --
cerulean blue

dry Dreamtime summer
Uluru in distance dawns --
crepuscular red

May 9, 2014

*These haikus are about creation myths, January being a metaphor
for beginnings. Gitche Gumee is the Native American name for Lake Superior, the largest and coldest of the North American Great Lakes. 
It is a reference to the Song of Hiawatha, by Longfellow. 
Uluru is the Aboriginal name for Ayers Rock, the sandstone massif 
in the center of Australia. Dreamtime, in the Aboriginal creation myth, 
is a place beyond time and space in which the past, present, and 
future exist wholly as one. As these two places are in different hemispheres, it is Winter in one and Summer in the other.
The two haikus are intended to contrast opposites, hot/cold, wet/dry,
winter/summer, blue/red (opposite ends of visible spectrum)

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  1. Date: 6/27/2014 11:26:00 AM
    Very beautiful, creative write! Congratulations on a great win! Warmest regards.

  1. Date: 6/26/2014 8:45:00 PM
    WOW, not only are the haiku REALLY good ones, but the information is excellent and what you told us about these places. I always wondered where Gitche gumme was and now I know!!! Congrats. For me, this would have been one of the first place poems.

  1. Date: 6/26/2014 8:27:00 PM
    Beautiful Haikus from down under, Roy. Congrats for the win. Mohan

  1. Date: 6/26/2014 5:42:00 PM
    descriptive and enchanting haiku's Roy love the footnotes vivid poem congrats on 3rd place ty for taking part hugs

  1. Date: 6/8/2014 11:49:00 PM
    Congratulations :)

  1. Date: 6/8/2014 11:27:00 PM
    Wonderful haikus Roy but was tough for a poet like me to understand ,, but then luked down into comments n the elaboration to Richard helped,, congrats on great win ! Thanks for liking my bawdy limerick n placement ,, first of this form I hv ever written !

    A. Sharma Avatar Dr. Upma A. Sharma
    Date: 6/9/2014 9:48:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks Roy ! Much appreciate ! Once again congrats very thotful n wonderful haikus indeed !
    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 6/9/2014 7:00:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks! I have added some notes.
  1. Date: 6/8/2014 8:00:00 PM
    Congratulations on a well-deserved win!

  1. Date: 6/8/2014 5:42:00 PM
    Wonderful and xool haiku.....Linda

  1. Date: 6/8/2014 2:23:00 PM
    Like both haiku, Roy, especially the use of colours. Glad you explained to Richard; it helped. (a small footnote might have been useful.) Congrats on your win. // paul

    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 6/9/2014 7:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Paul. I did add some notes, after several comments like yours. I generally don't like to do this as I personally find it a bit patronizing when I read these kinds of notes in a poem, unless the references are personal. In this case the notes are several times longer than the two haiku.
  1. Date: 6/8/2014 10:43:00 AM
    MORE gorgeous ones as I go down the list. Like the one I saw right before this one, I'd have put this higher. It's very inventive, roy. Congrats . I was glad to see this set again.

    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 6/9/2014 7:09:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, I have since added some notes. I didn't think it would place highly without them, but I find it a bit patronizing to spoon feed the judge via an exegesis longer than the poem. That's what Google is for. My fault for casting pearls.
  1. Date: 6/8/2014 9:44:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the haiku contest on January, Roy

  1. Date: 6/8/2014 8:36:00 AM
    ROY, :) Congratulations, thank you for the support....... SKAT

  1. Date: 5/14/2014 1:36:00 PM
    Excellent metaphors using seasons and colors. Awesome Haiku Roy. Xx~Xx

    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 5/14/2014 3:28:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Kim. It's about beginnings, really, where January is a metaphor for the creation myth, but on different sides and hemispheres of the Earth, where the seasons are opposite each other.
  1. Date: 5/13/2014 7:57:00 PM
    wow, you are pretty good with your haku pen!!! I especially liked that first one with its reference to the wonderful poem from my childhood.

  1. Date: 5/13/2014 9:43:00 AM
    Being a Gordon Lightfoot fan. I am aware of the Gitche Gumee reference. The native name is so much better than Lake Superior. Thanks for explaining Uluru.

    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 5/13/2014 2:37:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks, Richard. In my poem both haikus refer to a mythological creation time. Gitche Gumee and wigwam is a reference to the Song of Hiawatha. Dreamtime is a reference to the Aboriginal myths. Uluru is sacred to them.
  1. Date: 5/13/2014 8:58:00 AM
    What is Uluru?

    Jerden Avatar Roy Jerden
    Date: 5/13/2014 9:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Uluru is the Aboriginal word for Ayers Rock in the middle of Australia. Gitche Gumee is the Native American word for Lake Superior.
  1. Date: 5/11/2014 4:41:00 AM
    Roy nice haiku's and Uluru is just a wonderful sight...David