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If All I Did Was Make You Feel

If all I did was break your heart, And paint your soul as black as night I hope you'd leave this love behind, And leave me in the dimming light If all I did was bring you tears, And cause you anger, hate, and pain I hope you'd find the nearby sun, And leave behind the pouring rain But if all I did was make you feel, Things such as love, and happiness I hope you'd hold me oh, so tight, And never leave this lovely bliss

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Honestly J.T.

Date: 6/26/2012 6:21:00 PM

Wow. beautifully written. I am actually in the mood of this title at the moment - JH

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/24/2011 11:13:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Paula's contest Dana'lynn. Love, Carol

Timmie Kreth

Date: 10/22/2011 11:34:00 PM

Very nice! And thank you so much for your support. I've always been to shy to share my writing with other people...but since I've been posting on here I've gotten a lot of good feedback and it's been wonderful. I'm posting another poem I wrote a while back, (on the dark side of my life)...hope you like it too. Again, thank you :) And keep posting, I really like your work!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/21/2011 1:45:00 PM

Congrats Dana'lynn on an excellent entry and wonderful win with awesome poetry luv.. so happy PS is rolling once again and we can all enjoy each others words again...

Bob Quigley

Date: 10/21/2011 11:34:00 AM

Well written Dana'lynn. Congratulations on your win.

Wanda Ridley

Date: 10/12/2011 11:32:00 AM

Nice piece. I really enjoyed reading it.

Carol Eastman

Date: 10/11/2011 11:25:00 AM

I felt a touch of your soul was added here. Very well felt. Well done. When you engage your heart the best poetry always comes out.

Margaret Foster

Date: 10/11/2011 5:20:00 AM

I really loved reading this, the flow and the content is the type of poetry I enjoy, nice rhythm and rhyme. well done....Margaret

Journey Mcknight

Date: 10/10/2011 10:41:00 PM

This is so meloncholy, so well written is true blisss but never will I speak to him again, too much, now I am happy and 3 years of the worst ever in my life, I cannot. I am terrifed of him, he is probably harmless and loving but many fishes in the sea, he is 1 of 7. thanks for sharing it, God must be in control tonight and leading me as I asked him to through the holy Spirit. Lucinda re: Journey

John Smith

Date: 10/10/2011 10:02:00 PM

If all you did was write this poem, you did alright. Well writ.