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_ brown eyes wander in a loud crowded room a mouse scurries _ Contest Could this be regarding the mouse or is it a head executive bored with the chatter....I don't know....??? what do you see................. 4/6/4 Modern Traditional Haiku Poet-^Rick Parise

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Joann Grisetti

Date: 4/22/2012 4:32:00 PM

I picture a party with the mouse looking for food dropped. But the idea of a bored executive is delightful.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/16/2012 11:06:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Sidney~LeeAnn's "Haiku From The Heart" contest Rick. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/13/2012 10:48:00 PM

congrats on another beautiful win Rick ..luv..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/13/2012 10:12:00 PM

Rick, , a wonderful congratulations.. with this awesome poem * good night. :-) always~ PD

Deborah Burch

Date: 4/13/2012 6:16:00 PM

Excellent duallity!! Congratulations on your win...big hugs--love,deb

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/13/2012 5:50:00 PM

Good job....Enjoyed..Congrats on your winning work..Sara

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 4/1/2012 5:42:00 PM

Though I would put it this way, "a mouse scurries/ in a loud crowded room--/ brown eyes wandering". I believe this is about someone at the computer working in a large office space with others (therefore "loud crowded room) and the person working with the mouse has brown eyes. :) Am I right? I have learned in haiku, 2 lines are supposed to be gramatically connected, but the picture you make here is quite clear. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.