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Debbie's Birthday-Were You There-----Hmmmmm

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Debbie's Birthday-Were You There-----Hmmmmm

There's a strange edge to the wind, not right...
I've an inkling that the fire will spread. .... Oh dread!
In the glow as the sky turns a cherry red
Twenty pounds on her hips, from the cake she fed

She threw caution to the wind while she danced tonight
Jumping up on the table, to the crowd's delight
Kicking shoes in the air, with a rose held tight
Smack between, minty fresh, pearly whites...
While the fizz from champagne caused her nose to itch
It pitched her forwards, pitched her backwards....
glass in hand, splashing left, splashing right, 
filled again and again...........was it fifth or the sixth?...

What's the diff when your stiff from the fifth of scotch
that was brought by the lot that came in just to watch?
while they cheered and they jeered, it's her right to get tight
It's her birthday, don't you know? can't a girl sow her oats? 
But the candles were more than the room could bear
Were you there???  I'll swear.............................................  
such a blast from the past........May the fun last and last!!
May she score many more, ...many more,...many more...............................


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  1. Date: 10/10/2012 4:00:00 PM
    hahaha, makes it sound like the room exploded from fire caused by the candles!! VERY good one. probably the best I've seen for debs!!!

  1. Date: 10/5/2012 6:50:00 PM
    Nice poetic way to wish Debbie a happy birthday.

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 8:41:00 PM
    a lovely tribute to Debbie for her birthday. Well done. Lee

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 5:18:00 PM
    You're so fun;

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 2:09:00 PM
    CARRIE, , Congratulations with your FUN LOVING POEM for Debbie's "It's MY Birthday " contest bash... had fun reading all her happy dandy winners. Always~ xox~ PD

  1. Date: 10/2/2012 7:42:00 AM
    Congrats Carrie on the win!Love this birthday card for debbie!

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 5:05:00 PM
    Hmmmm...I was there, I swear I was! One of her shoes hit me in the head and knocked me cold (Or maybe it was the scotch?)...For some reason I always thought of you as a very deep and SERIOUS poet which you are sometimes of course...Now I see you got a nice little funny bone! Congratulations my friend! - Tim

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 10:52:00 AM
    love the giddy mood, carrie.. super congrats on your win with huggs!..:)

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 7:04:00 AM
    Congratulations on your win Carrie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/1/2012 2:30:00 AM
    Many congratulations Carrie xx

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 11:04:00 PM
    Many congrats Carrie for this win.

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 10:48:00 PM

  1. Date: 9/30/2012 12:55:00 PM
    [I like Glenlivet ;)] Thank you from the bottom of me heart. Light & Love

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 9:26:00 PM
    I like it..Good Luck...pd

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 2:26:00 PM
    Hmmmmmmm ..... yes, enjoyable Carrie. Thumbs up for you in the contest!! Have a lovely weekend. - Love oxox Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 1:11:00 PM
    lol, love this witty write, Carrie - and I know Debs will too. Congrats on your wins : )

  1. Date: 9/29/2012 12:04:00 AM
    she certainly will love this nice work are awesome..great poet..enjoy reading your great share<3<3<3 oxoxox have a blessing weekend Carrie ...:) SK

  1. Date: 9/28/2012 11:43:00 PM
    Carrie, you take the cake with this write. I'm sure Debbie is going to love it.