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Below is the poem entitled DANCE which was written by poet Lyric Man. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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A young novice in a new town
where He didn't know a soul
His head was spinning so fast
he just wanted to do his role

Oh.. it's hard to be the rookie
where every single thing is new
Stepped outside the boundaries 
'cause he really didn't have a clue

He was living for the weekend
time to finally relax and unwind
Jumping off the conveyer belt
where he'd been running blind

Now he's off to the county dance
feels like the whole town is there
But on this turf he's comfortable
and pretty girls are everywhere

Not a shy bone is in his body
one by one he takes their hand
Feels like Heaven in this moment
he's loving this thumping band

You talk about total cluelessness
he thought the night was going well
One boy didn't like his girl chasing 
now his eye is starting to swell

He never thought about social politics
wow, was that a huge mistake
Be careful how you compliment
or next bones he might just break

Friend, when your new in the city
but careful who you romance
Those pretty girls might be taken
and not just by your dance!

*The Town is Poetry Soup.  The Dance is the exchange of comments.  The black eye was because the new writer didn't know all the politics going on here.  More details.. You'll have to read between the lines :)

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  1. Date: 5/31/2014 7:32:00 AM
    hey, I get it, yep every system has its below the surface interactions. I am a few months into this too, I am just thankful to be able to write and post and enjoy the community. I hope I'm not stepping on any toes as I am dancing. great write.

  1. Date: 5/26/2014 11:02:00 PM
    Dave This is such a clever and creative write. A very interesting way to write about our soup community. I hope that I am a good part of it and not bad. LOL thank you for the sweet comment on my Nature poem.

  1. Date: 4/18/2014 11:16:00 PM
    Wonderful Dave, dance is a favorite topic.

  1. Date: 4/14/2014 5:20:00 PM
    I have been on the Soup for eight months, and I was not aware that this kind of thing was happening here. It's good that you didn't let this push you away, Dave. We want people to stay on Poetry Soup, and enjoy their time here. Congratulations on your win with this great poem! :)

  1. Date: 4/11/2014 7:15:00 AM
    Well done Dave, very cleverly worded...Seren

  1. Date: 4/10/2014 10:42:00 AM
    Oh great ! Means we r a part of ur poem coz we feature in dance ! Wonderful write Dave ! Congrats on fine win !

  1. Date: 4/10/2014 7:22:00 AM
    Nice flow of words and expressions. Congrats on a fine win, dave

  1. Date: 4/9/2014 10:50:00 PM
    i am afraid I wa taking this literally until your explanation. Nice comparison. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

  1. Date: 4/9/2014 8:47:00 PM
    Hello Dave, THANK YOU VERY MUCH, CONGRATULATIONS.... :) This was a very tough one to judge... GEEES, enjoy my latest blog if you like.... always & forever... Linda

  1. Date: 3/31/2014 9:55:00 PM
    Town=The Soup Dance=The Comments and Replies

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 12:51:00 PM
    soup mail

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 12:18:00 PM
    Nice slice of life write my friend..

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 12:11:00 PM
    This fabulous Dave. It is tough being a rookie at anything

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 9:00:00 AM
    I love it! A most entertaining dance. I was enthralled from beginning to the end. One little suggestion last stanza second line change "but" to "be" it flows better.

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    Date: 3/29/2014 9:51:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    It was supposed to be "be" it was late and my eyes were crossing.. Thanks for calling it out.. Yeah, reads much better :). TY Richard
  1. Date: 3/29/2014 8:55:00 AM
    Lol, yes, be careful :) Enjoyed your write this morning. Have a great Saturday :))

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 5:45:00 AM
    Awesome! This is a tremendous write here my friend! I really loved reading this magnificent poem this morning! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!

  1. Date: 3/29/2014 3:02:00 AM
    Hi Dave, you wrote a poem, with a be careful sign.. I like it! A rookie, can't start from the top.... Enjoyed.. Goodnight.. Linda