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Comrades in Arms

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Comrades in Arms

In the refrigerated coldness of a courtroom sitting with my truest friend near me, boxed in by bureaucracy who cared not for the long, lingering years of marital decline. The unyielding forms of squares and rectangles, benched, tabled and chaired the end of a lifetime of intercourse. Only one friend had come to my Golgotha, my place of skulls.

a downcast woman
sat before a solemn judge--
the gravel fell

Sedated with mother’s little helpers, we sat, she and I attempting, through chemistry and kindness, to bar the pain of memory, no sour wine laced with myrrh for me. The Judge seeing no sense in the dissolution of a union three decades in the baking, washed his hands of us, my husband and I, like Pilate. As the crown of thorns had encircled the pate of HE, so had the bands of marriage encased us, frozen, dead, in the honey colored amber .. of we.

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  1. Date: 7/26/2013 9:10:00 AM
    Beautiful and so sad. I see what you mean about writing good haibun... Jack

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 7:25:00 PM
    Congratulations, this form is new to meand I really enjoyed it

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 2:18:00 PM
    Excellence................ ahh that last phrase, 'dead in the honey coldered amber of we'.......what a gift you have

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 12:24:00 PM
    Congratulations on your super win in Frank H's contest Debbie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 10:40:00 AM
    a fearless write, debbie.. one for the books!.. sweet congrats on your win and the recent ones as well!..:) huggs!

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 10:15:00 AM
    Debbie .....congrats on a masterpiece and top placement.......congrats.once again.......~sashi

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 10:05:00 AM
    Congratulations Debbie a fabulous win xx

  1. Date: 3/15/2012 9:48:00 AM
    congrats Debbie on a fabulous first place win for this tremendous write and expression luv.. great use of Haliburn form ..

  1. Date: 10/11/2011 10:57:00 AM
    Congratulations on your poetry placing in Nancy's contest Debbie. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 10/10/2011 10:45:00 PM
    Congrats Debbie on HM in the contest.. a creative and crafty entry .. enjoy speciall honor luv..

  1. Date: 10/10/2011 9:50:00 PM
    Yep. Pretty sucky. the feeling of being judges especially specially. Thanks for the deep write and for the support, Debbie. Namaste~N

  1. Date: 10/10/2011 9:44:00 PM
    It's quite original and exceptional,Debie.Congratulations on your win in the contest!

  1. Date: 9/8/2010 12:33:00 PM
    You amazes me more with each read, and I must yield to true perfection in the art ... hence highly favored I make you

  1. Date: 9/1/2010 10:37:00 AM
    Where is your tombstone?? I have not seen it.

  1. Date: 8/31/2010 6:51:00 AM
    A very intriguing and interesting form, I must try one like this, well done, dear heart~~

  1. Date: 8/29/2010 5:03:00 PM
    enjoyed and I like the form...sad thoughts though.

  1. Date: 8/28/2010 8:59:00 AM
    Very interesting story told in verse, Deborah. This form is new to me and you did really well working in it! Love, Carolyn

  1. Date: 8/28/2010 5:31:00 AM
    Interesting. This gem speaks life.

  1. Date: 8/27/2010 12:21:00 PM
    I can't tell if your truest friend was your husband or lawyer or sister. Did you all take Valium while the judge decoded your life? Who won? Don't get the crown of thorns reference to marriage bands ..

  1. Date: 8/26/2010 8:16:00 PM
    Very innovative and nice form - Haibun, Deb