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Bacchus The God Who Loved His Grapes

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Bacchus The God Who Loved His Grapes

purple Concord grapes
ripen on a gnarly vine –
droppings dot the walk

purple concord grapes
ripen on a gnarly vine –
a jays summer feast

purple Concord grapes
ripen on a gnarly vine –
the arbor crumbles 

* the cut, the kireji, is the mental leap that occurs
between the two parts in a haiku, it enriches the scene
by adding an extra bit of sensory input

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  1. Date: 5/20/2013 11:28:00 PM
    Hello Debbie and congratulations on the H M... enjoyed reading and belive your entry well done Joe..)

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 6:59:00 PM
    I really loved the scenes in yours Debbie ...I could see them....congratulations

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 4:40:00 PM
    Debbie, there is no way I would ever even enter these Haiku contests without your prior and continuing guidance, you truly are an unselfish mentor and your Haikus are my guide!

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 2:43:00 PM
    Congratulations on your well deserve win. I can relate to the black birds and grapes. I used to grow grapes. Birds, bees got them before I did. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 1:22:00 PM
    congrats on your win

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 6:14:00 AM
    Wish you congratulation for win. It;s very nice poem enjoyed a lot. Thanks......,loved always, bl

  1. Date: 5/19/2013 2:30:00 AM
    This is really awesome! Big heartfelt congratulations on your win my dear friend Deb! love lots, Leonora

  1. Date: 5/18/2013 10:40:00 PM
    Excellently charming. Great haiku. Congrats to you on you win. AO

  1. Date: 5/18/2013 8:29:00 PM
    DG, congratulations with your way 2 xool winning poem in Alfred's "Bacchus The God Who Loved His Grapes" contest. always~ Linda

  1. Date: 5/12/2013 10:35:00 PM
    New info about the from - very nice! I like the title and the theme of this poem. I had a nice glass tonight and thank Bacchus for your work. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

  1. Date: 5/12/2013 1:43:00 PM
    The first one is my favorite, especially the third line, but the whole set is very gratifying to read. Have a wonderful evening. -Jeremy

  1. Date: 5/11/2013 1:45:00 PM
    oh.......and ps.........many thanks for honoring my poem in your last contest. In honor of earth day.....we all need to do our part....even if just acknowledging in a poem. :) Thank you!

  1. Date: 5/10/2013 3:52:00 PM
    Hi Debbie! You are the haiku queen. I read through the posts and am still hoping to get it right one day, and if not...well, then at least I tried! ;) Lovely work favorite? I'd have to say the middle one! Those jays have to eat! ;) Hugs

  1. Date: 5/10/2013 2:05:00 PM
    A very nice haiku. Hope to see it on the list.

  1. Date: 5/8/2013 7:40:00 PM
    Very kool haiku, mon cher!...Flawless picture painted here...I smell a winner! - Cordialment, Votre Ami, Timothee (Pronounced Teem-o-tay) That's French by the way...Impressed?

    Ryerson Avatar Tim Ryerson
    Date: 5/8/2013 7:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Okay!...Sincerely, your friend, Tim (Sounds a bit too formal, huh?)
  1. Date: 5/6/2013 8:30:00 AM
    Debbie excellent Haiku. I love the second one the best. Nature's feast. Warm Smiles, Connie

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 7:51:00 AM
    That's something about a good haiku.. when you read it, it tickles your senses, a door is opened...Debbie they are very good, the first one I like most-- now I gotta desire to write some. love, gautami

  1. Date: 5/5/2013 7:41:00 AM
    Thanks for the explanation, dear Debbie! It enhances your presentation. Hugs, Jack xoxox

  1. Date: 5/4/2013 8:23:00 AM
    Good one.Gotta check the contest.

  1. Date: 5/4/2013 5:57:00 AM
    One of the BIG differences between the fragmented line & the other 2 lines is that it is ONLY...CONSEPTUALLY, related to the other lines NOT gramatically related...IT should stay IN the same snap-shot moment though, even when writing a DESK HAIKU it should seem real NOT opinion & not fantasy and not intellectual FACTUAL