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amid the rain and mist

amid the rain and mist

Amid the clouds I saw, the tears she shed,
aside her thoughts - the birds that fled in pairs,
the dusk descended 'pon our lost affairs,
the cotton fog was dense - my only wed.

It was September then; the first of rain,
the harvest ended and the maidens passed,
persistently the nimbus, dark, amassed,
- drops falling randomly to our refrain.

The maid was walking in the rain and mist
our glances blades to cut-and-thrust, beset
upon our souls' new sacrificial debt,
we felt the beckoning of rain and tryst.

She stood in the melancholy of Fall
pristine, accustomed to the old vendette;
the rain was falling on our courting duet
revolting to our burning blood and souls.

She wore black clothes, due to her lost affiance,
betrothal waging to the recent war
of nineteen hundred ten, an odd memoir
her mind was set to fight - she stared askance.

I walked that night the street below her louvres,
she watched; her velvet eyes, rare beauty braw
and feral attitude were bold and wraw
while she inhaled my scent and aural oeuvre.

The moon had risen large that night and round,
untamed she came, outlined in lunar light.
Against the wall her flesh became my rite,
to carnal prayer she turned upon the ground.

And then from molten skies, the rain began
with eyes reflecting flash, on earth she groped,
with me confessor of her sins eloped,
beneath the rain, her bitten lips impart.

© 07-27-2013, G. Venetopoulos, All rights reserved
(Iambic pentameter)

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  1. Date: 4/24/2014 7:27:00 AM
    Giorgio!!! This is like an art-- uninhibited,, very raw in form... Goodness! Parts of it, I just don't understand or may be I do, not very sure... But, it is a like a great composition by the master himself!,,, gautami

  1. Date: 1/8/2014 4:47:00 PM
    Just beautiful Giorgio!!!

  1. Date: 8/8/2013 9:58:00 AM
    Giorgio wow fantastic a worthy winner Shadow x smiles

  1. Date: 8/8/2013 7:00:00 AM
    It doesn't get better than this. Spectacular!

  1. Date: 8/7/2013 9:46:00 PM
    sweet congrats to you G... wow..:) huggs

  1. Date: 8/7/2013 3:27:00 PM
    - Congratulations on a wonderful first place! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

  1. Date: 8/7/2013 2:29:00 PM
    Congratulations on a brilliant win...Peter

  1. Date: 8/7/2013 9:37:00 AM
    Your way with words just blow me away! Unmatched by those of us who only wish we could write a poem such as this. One among many by you........again, I offer my congratulations, well deserved you are!!

  1. Date: 8/7/2013 9:15:00 AM
    Giorgio, a beautiful poem in every way. Congratulations! thank you for making my day a nice one... When you have time enjoy my beautiful blog * Called "Title That Reminds Me Of You" always & forever *LINDA

  1. Date: 7/30/2013 9:10:00 AM
    Hi Giorgio! I can only hope to be able to write in iambic pentameter -- It sure was so nice to read this aloud and I even encountered new words-- your title intrigued me and you painted such an interesting tale here, I am also enjoying the imagery you used here. Also, thank you for passing by my poem...Sorry, I don't live in New York, never been there even but it sure would be an awesome place to visit someday!

  1. Date: 7/30/2013 12:00:00 AM
    Just reading this one again. This is really great iambic pentameter and some of the words you used are so rare to see rhymed. wow. Hey , thanks for the nice win in your contest. I am glad you liked my poem!!

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 7/30/2013 3:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you Andrea. It was an honor and pleasure to have you in my contest. G
  1. Date: 7/28/2013 7:37:00 AM
    YOu chose an excellent venue for your poem, by entering in PD's "Beauty" contest.

  1. Date: 7/27/2013 12:45:00 AM
    my, a beauty full of emotional range and rhythmic assonance passionately swerving along each line.. a tremendous piece, G... :) huggs

    A. V. Avatar Giorgio A. V.
    Date: 7/30/2013 3:39:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you nette. You honor me! :) G.