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Cyndi MacMillan's current projects include three children's book series. Her "life as a writer' blogs can be read at  https://cyndimacmillan.wordpress.com/  Three of her poems have been published in Room magazine, issue 49.4, This Body's Maps, https://roommagazine.com/issues/bodys-map  Two poems have been published in the Prairie Journal ( Issue 67)http://www.prairiejournal.org/subscribe.html   Other poems can be found in Fieldstone Review, Issue 2015 http://www.fieldstonereview.usask.ca/article.php?article=167, Grain Magazine, issue 42.4, Summer 2015, Passed Signs/New Fields http://www.grainmagazine.ca/424  , The Steel Chisel, April 2016, http://www.thesteelchisel.ca/april2016_07.html.  The Centrifugal Eye, Spring 2016, the Unformed issue  http://www.centrifugaleye.com/ . She participated in the 20 Poem Challenge at The Ekphrastic Review: Writing and Art on Art and Writing, and thirteen of her poems have been published by the journal.http://www.ekphrastic.net/apps/search?q=Cyndi+MacMillan.

Her fiction has appeared in local newspapers and has won contests. Her short story, Missed Steps, has been published by the Windsor Review  https://view.joomag.com/windsor-review/0830468001484586649 . She enjoys reading literary journals, and she is actively pursuing further publication within their glossy covers while writing chapter books and early middle readers.

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Cyndi lives in a small town in Ontario with her husband, young daughter and far too many books.

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WINNERS OF THE STEPHANIE DESHPANDE / CONTEMPORARY FREE RHYME


Blog Posted:2/10/2014 9:47:00 PM

Hello, my friends,

 

Lots going on here, at home, and I usually detail every winning poem, but I chose to spend more time on the top winner this time around and have highlighted its rhyme. Now, some of you are only aware of perfect rhyme, but there are many forms of rhyme.

 

To keep this as simple as possible, I will first showcase the first place winner, Dane Ann Smith Johnson... then show you a highlighted poem.

 

Okay, just read this through....

 

Myself in Urban Chaos

By Dane Ann Smith Johnson

 

Here I go again, focused on myself.

Remembering, analyzing,

Memorializing tragedy.

Thinking, endless thinking.

Suicides, death of grandmas, past poems/love'>loves.

Pining about passions and losses.

The condo I had to let go.

The jobs I left behind.

And the cemetery lots.

My mind wonders around in circles.

From darkness to darkness, city to city,

Job to job, decision to decision

My children, I embrace with love.

Those years riddled with joys and pains.

Trying, always trying,

Yet, still disappointed.

Clinging to religion, remembering God.

Accepting –

Then, the child in me curls up

Safe in my warm cocoon,

And I think of you in the next room.

Life made new, fear subdued.

The touch of your hand, my confidence renews.

That forever love so long wanted, found at last.

The pressures I once knew moved to the past.

To the outside world I say adieu.

I was lost in the hollow of myself.

Outside of myself, I found peace.

Memories blot out urban chaos

And focus on woodland happy days.

Struggles not so painful anymore.

Peace found its hope in you.

…And then, we spoon.

 

 

What a powerhouse of a poem. First, loved where and how it started. I and Myself in the first line echoes the poet’s sentiment that she feels too self-centered. The next three lines upt the amp of a mind racing by a list of “stress” verbs. Then into nouns... the further we go into the poem, the more personal we get, as should be, layer upon layer peeled until we get at the PURE heart of the matter. The static becomes less as well, line by line, as we move from chaos to peace. Besides the WONDERFUL rhyme, structure, devices,  and figurative language I had soooo craved, the last two lines are what won this poem its top spot. Congratuations, Dane Ann... FANTASTIC!

 

 

Now, sound out the highlighted areas.. check the following, assonance, consonance, euphony. Clever use of identical rhyme by repeating words.

 

Have you ever analyzed your own poem to see what you instinctively have created? You’d be surprised..  

 

Myself in Urban Chaos

By Dane Ann Smith Johnson

 

Here I go again, focused on myself.

Remembering, analyzing,

Memorializing tragedy.

Thinking, endless thinking.

Suicides, death of grandmas, past loves.

Pining about passions and losses.

The condo I had to let go.

The jobs I left behind.

And the cemetery lots.

My mind wonders around in circles.

From darkness to darkness, city to city,

Job to job, decision to decision

My children, I embrace with love.

Those years riddled with joys and pains.

Trying, always trying,

Yet, still disappointed.

Clinging to religion, remembering God.

Accepting –

Then, the child in me curls up

Safe in my warm cocoon,

And I think of you in the next room.

Life made new, fear subdued.

The touch of your hand, my confidence renews.

That forever love so long wanted, found at last.

The pressures I once knew moved to the past.

To the outside world I say adieu.

I was lost in the hollow of myself.

Outside of myself, I found peace.

Memories blot out urban chaos

And focus on woodland happy days.

Struggles not so painful anymore.

Peace found its hope in you.

…And then, we spoon.

 

 

 

 

Thank you to all poets. Way to go! You are all awesome and exhaustive to judges! LOL! So good and yes, I saw the work you all put in! Take a well-earned bow and congratulations!

 

YOU ROCK MY WORLD!

 

Also, I large apology to Mystic Rose.. I closed the contest 15 minutes early! I will NEVER do that again.

 

Here is her beautiful poem ... sorry, love. Gorgeous!

 

PUPPET BY MYSTIC ROSE

 

She watches the shadows fall away from the wall

Like ghostly finger puppets they scatter beneath an old squeaky mattress

She can hear two matron hands as they collapse the shutters from behind, slam goes the door.

The sound of her breath is like a dry matchstick as she listens to a ticking clock on an old burlap stump.

Everything falls down behind the walls.  She has colonized every fear in the closet and gave each one a running brook, an underpass.

Anny is her only friend.  She has russet wool hair, and can make herself flat as a pizza carton.  She moves

Like a mote as her lips brush the fringe of her hair,   “Anny, are you awake? You better lay still, they are

Right underneath us, if we are not quiet, they’ll come for us “ Its the muttering of a child who’s perfected the art of ventriloquism.

Tied up in sweat knots they leave her no choice, but to press her ear to the floor and listen some more.

Her eyes are heavy dumbbells without raise, and her mind is caught in a fog horn far away.  The

Only stir comes from the puppets below, she’s falling deeper and deeper into a solid black hole.

Perhaps sleep will save her tonight, she thinks while losing her wake.  Slowly but surely she sinks

Low down below.

 

February 5, 2014

For Cyndi's Contest: Stephanie Deshphante Painting: The Falling


Contest Winner Medal1Myself in Urban ChaosDane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Contest Winner Medal2FLORAL TAPESTRYnette onclaud
Contest Winner Medal2My Sleeping Childcraig cornish
Contest Winner Medal3See This GirlAndrea Dietrich
Contest Winner Medal3Color of SunCarrie Richards
Contest Winner Medal3A Day in the Life ofCatie Lindsey
4Thursday AgainDavid Mohn
4Before the PartyDebbie Guzzi
4Linsey-WoolseyCharles Henderson
4PROTECTING HER TOYSAndrew Crisci
5CellarDARREN WATSON
5Waiting : Stephanie Deshpande painting contestSeren Roberts
6The DecisionGreg Stanley
6 Breath On Thy BreastAiyaH De Torres
Honorable Mentionsleeping childBarbara Gruner
Honorable MentionDevouring Carnal DesiresSusmita Das




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Date: 2/17/2014 7:24:00 AM
a big pride and honor to be part of your contest, Cyndi.. :) thank you for choosing me as one of your winners... congratulations to all winners in your contest!!!! ...this is amazing... THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!! >__<
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Date: 2/12/2014 1:03:00 PM
to be part of this is a delight, cyn.. sweet congrats to all who entered.. and thanks for the inspairation, soul sis.. huggs!
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Date: 2/11/2014 10:14:00 PM
Cyndi, can you find us a good link for her blogs or for anything? When I google anything related to her blogs , I get no response from google chrome.
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 2/11/2014 10:21:00 PM
http://www.stephaniedeshpande.com/sd/ LOL.. Andrea, give her some time. But here is her blog page. She will need time to really go through them and time to write the blog. But here is her blog page.
Date: 2/11/2014 1:49:00 PM
FOLKS, SOMETHING EPIC, SERIOUSLY EPIC, IS ABOUT TO HAPPEN. HOLD ON TO YOUR HATS (especially you Hatman!) YOUR POEMS ARE BEING READ BY STEPHANIE DESHPANDE. That's right, folks. The artiste extraordinaire found the contest on line and may drop by and let you know what she thinks of your work. I will be posting a blog, tonight after my girl goes to sleep, about this incredible journey. SHE WOULD LIKE TO FEATURE SOME OF THE WINNING POEMS ON HER BLOG ... how cool and wild can life get? I am floating! This is what I'm talking about people! LIVING POETS LIVING ARTISTS! Enjoy the classics but you can't shake hands with a dead poet or painter. This is a meeting of minds! I need tea. Head exploded!
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nette onclaud
Date: 2/12/2014 1:01:00 PM
i'm biting my nails, sis... so excited.. tell us more, more!.. huggs
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 2/11/2014 10:20:00 PM
http://www.stephaniedeshpande.com/sd/ LOL.. Andrea, give her some time. But here is her blog page. She will need time to really go through them and time to write the blog. But here is her blog page.
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 2/11/2014 5:38:00 PM
http://www.stephaniedeshpande.com/ She is still working on reading all the entries. Oh, she is so lovely, what a lovely person. I am, as the Brits would say, totally gobsmacked. She likes all the layers, the bright and the dark poems... Yes, ANDREA. BIG WOW! Art crossing mediums, far reaching... oh joy!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/11/2014 3:45:00 PM
wow!!! Give us the link to her blog!
Date: 2/11/2014 10:30:00 AM
Such an amazing poem from Dane Ann..........congratulations to her!!! And wow......some of the others I have read are some of the best ever!! Thank you for my placement, and I'm so pleased to be on your list in this great contest!
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Date: 2/11/2014 9:35:00 AM
Thanks Cyndi, even though we had three girls (and one boy)I was worried that I could pull this off sounding like a young girl wrote it, myself being an old man. Everyone really wrote well. Good contest.
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Date: 2/11/2014 7:44:00 AM
thanks, Cyndi. I was not going to do this one when I saw it was free verse, and then I went back and looked at that one picture, and it really inspired me to write easily. It was nice to see you spotlight the poem of Dane Ann's. WE just don't see her nearly enough over here and it's so good when she writes poetry like this for us. Also enjoyed seeing the one you posted of Mystic Rose (soupmail for ya about what you said on closing out contests). Congrats to all!
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Date: 2/11/2014 5:45:00 AM
I wish I'd also "highlighted" how crafty it was of Dane Ann to have Love/Losses and further down circles/cities ....decisions / pains.. another good use of rhyme ... sigh, soooooooo good.
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Date: 2/11/2014 2:46:00 AM
Congratulations to all winners...David
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