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Cyndi MacMillan lives in a small town in Ontario that is home to North America’s largest working waterwheel. Her writing has appeared in notable Canadian literary journals and local newspapers. 

A Cruel Light is her debut gothic mystery (4/4/2023). She has been a Jill-of-all-trades, but for as long as she can remember, she has dreamt of being a novelist.  Hard work and the wonderful team at Crooked Lane Books have made that dream a reality.  Please note that her husband and daughter kindly keep her coffee mug filled when she is wrestling with a suspenseful chapter.   During a pandemic lockdown, the family adopted a rescue cat who chirps. 

When not writing, Cyndi enjoys reading Gothics, scrapbooking, and losing horribly at board games.  Works-in-progress include the second (and third) Annora Garde Mystery, a Canadian noir series, and a standalone horror mystery, so more often than not, Cyndi is writing.  She is a member of Crime Writers of Canada.

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READING POEMS LIKE A POET, INCLUDES AN ANALYSIS

Blog Posted:9/6/2014 6:23:00 PM

I came across a poem and was blown away by its beauty. I am seriously jealous of the talent behind this gem.

The poem is by Maureen Hynes, who has won the League of Canadian Poets’ Gerald Lampert Award for best first book of poetry by a Canadian. Her work has been widely published in Canadian journals and anthologies, included in Best Canadian Poems 2010 and longlisted for the CBC Canada Reads 2013 poetry award. Maureen is poetry editor for Our Times magazine.

Okay, I thought I’d do something different. THIS WAS INSPIRED BY ROY.

I keep hearing from some: teach me, I want to learn, show me, I don’t understand, I don’t see what the heck you’re talking about, I don’t get it, I want to get it, I don’t think I’ll ever get it, I can't possibly ever in a thousand years read a poem like that and get it.

SO... I am going to post the poem and then open its chest, pull out its heart and present it to you, still beating, on a platter.

 

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(poem posted for educational purposes only)

Overtime in the Scriptorium

by Maureen Hynes

layered and hooded she smoothes out

calfskin vellum    sets pots of verdigris

red and yellow ochre   in reach

 

lapis    gold powder    silver leaf   

outlines the first black letters

in a folio of tall script    turf fire smoking

 

the work    but her fingers never 

warm enough      a lifetime on a high stool

at a sloped table    outside the margins

 

of illumination and inside knots

of that hunger she writes     tower

blackbird     sand dune and fever

 

sleep she writes in an alphabet of trees

paints wings on men     snakes her letters

into saints and insects   lightning   magpie

 

coils her Latin into small animals

and open-mouthed fish    traces

a rusty path     out her winter window 

 

the empty stool beside her

 

Interpretation and study

This is a poem about scriptorium (works or a place of illustrated/illuminated text/calligraphy) and is written in the point of view of a nun (perhaps)

A nun’s work in the 14th and 15th century would seem to have no beginning nor end. She would have spent long hours illustrating letters as a act of piety; all is done as labour of love for God and for His son. It is work which was done alone, strained the eyes and hands and back.  It was also a dying art, even in the 15th century, as printing presses had been invented.

Here are two examples of what nuns and monks would have crafted:

 

 

 

 

Now, knowing this, let’s really dissect this work.

 

layered and hooded she smoothes out

calfskin vellum    sets pots of verdigris

red and yellow ochre   in reach

 

Note the lowercase ‘l’ in layered; its use signifies that this is truly NOT the beginning. The beginning of this poem will never be seen because this poem actually starts at the moment when the nun first picked up her tools, all those decades earlier. 

The poet has wisely chosen to start the poem as if we have missed something.

There are no uppercase letters in this poem. Not a one. This is brilliant IRONY, since the nun would have spent arduous hours illustrating UPPERCASE letters. Furthermore, the use of lowercase letters gives a sense of humbleness, of submissiveness.

Good use of spacing illustrates (lovely irony) how the nun kept her paints close     yet apart; one would think that a nun feels a special closeness to mankind, yet insulated from most of humanity, especially the cloistered nun.

The three line stanzas keep the poem’s flow. Each line (save for the last) is of equal importance. The purpose of keeping each stanza the same length is to force the reader to weigh EACH word. Internal spacing replaces free style line breaks.

 

lapis    gold powder    silver leaf   

outlines the first black letters

in a folio of tall script    turf fire smoking

 

the work    but her fingers never 

warm enough      a lifetime on a high stool

at a sloped table    outside the margins

 

of illumination and inside knots

of that hunger she writes     tower

blackbird     sand dune and fever

 

Love the juxtaposition of outline and outside versus inside. SHE is the tower blackbird, wearing her black habit, roosting in a small room with a desk and her nest of writing tools. Sand dunes ...  all those sand dunes found in a Holy land she will never see.

 

Again, note the careful use of spacing. All her equipment has been placed just so. There is space between script (holy work) and turf (earthly material) Work is hers, but not truly hers. What she does is for others. The space between the work    and her fingers is “divine!”

 

The spaces between writes   tower   sand  drives  home the distance between herself and others, as well as signifies a passing of time.

 

sleep she writes in an alphabet of trees

paints wings on men     snakes her letters

into saints and insects   lightning   magpie

 

coils her Latin into small animals

and open-mouthed fish    traces

a rusty path     out her winter window 

 

Oh, the contrast of this line “paints wings on men    snakes her letters” angels and serpents. Art, that! And the space between angels and serpent? SHAZAM! Magic!

We get a sense of complete seclusion, of longing, as she traces a path with paint. She is alone and quiet as she works, painting a fish with an open mouth. The fish was also one of the first symbols of Christianity. Interesting connation with open-mouthed...

Also, the spacing (in lieu of punctuation) is sophisticated, and shows poetic maturity. Seasoned poets tend to break their lines creatively, directing the reader, slowing and quickening the pace with technique and style.

The purpose of poetry is not only to communicate, I believe, but to startle and intrigue, to move the reader with language and to allow the reader to see something in a new light. Poetry (again, my opinion) should either disturb or tantalize, tickle the funny bone or torment the heart. It can make one nostalgic, sick to the stomach or lead to activism.

And the last line ...

 

the empty stool beside her

 

Okay, this is beautiful ambiguity. What a statement.   

Is it empty because fewer nuns have committed themselves to completing scriptorium? Does the empty stool represent one less woman who has chosen to be a nun? Does the empty stool represent Christ, who is there with her in Spirit, a physical reminder of her purpose and the sacred vow she took as one who illuminates copies of the Bible? We are not sure. The interpretation is left to us.

Okay, so now let’s take a closer look at some of the word choices.

The verse is rich in assonance, consonance and euphony.

Many poets (I include myself in those numbers), would classify this as a rhyming poem,  (I’ll discuss this more at a later date). There is a great deal of both internal and external rhyme used.

Okay, let’s take a close look at some of the rhyme. I’ve used colours and bold font to show alike sounds (the purple in li, fi, hi, wri and pie doesn't show very well, but is there)

layered and hooded she smoothes out

calfskin vellum    sets pots of verdigris

red and yellow ochre   in reach

 

lapis    gold powder    silver leaf   

outlines the first black letters

in a folio of tall script    turf fire smoking

 

the work    but her fingers never   

warm enough      a lifetime on a high stool

at a sloped table    outside the margins

 

of illumination and inside knots

of that hunger she writes     tower

blackbird     sand dune and fever

 

sleep she writes in an alphabet of trees

paints wings on men     snakes her letters

into saints and insects   lightning   magpie

 

coils her Latin into small animals

and open-mouthed fish    traces

a rusty path     out her winter window 

 

the empty stool beside her

 

 

I also have to say that a favourite line of mine is “snakes her letters/

into saints and insect    lightening   magpie.”

there is wonderful ‘mouth music’ here. (in ... SAINTS... in SECTS ... )soooooooooooo good!

So, please, let me know if I have missed anything.

What do you see?

PS... if you like this blog, I’d be happy to post others of this nature.

 

xoxox

Cyndi

If you have something to add

or you interpret the imagery differently, 

I encourage you

to share YOUR interpretation.

I would love to see things

from YOUR EYES!

Let's learn together!

 

_________________________

 

I wish to thank Maureen Hynes for her support of this blog and for encouraging my love of poetic exploration. I am in float mode, still, over her kindness.

I also wish to thank the curators of Canadian Poetries, Shawna Lemay and Kimmy Beach, who have been following this discussion, I have just learned. I found this poem at Canadian Poetries.

Canadian Poetries showcases the new and recent work of a wide range of established poetic voices.

Here is a link to their site and to two more of Maureen Hynes poems.

http://www.canadianpoetries.com/poetries/2014/9/2/maureen-hynes-three-poems



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Date: 9/8/2014 1:30:00 PM
Charlotte: yes, very cold... a fire is smoking THE PAPER, but she is NEVER WARM ENOUGH... and the winter window. I did more research and found a nun in the 12th century who was the first woman to ever illustrate an encyclopedia. One of her illustrations is JONAH AND THE WHALE... this enormous fish with an open mouth.... hmmmm!
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Date: 9/8/2014 11:41:00 AM
I have been traveling the past two days and so have missed a lot of the good discussion. Anyway, I like an analysis because it can show me wonderful bits I may have missed or also confirm that my interpretation of some references was correct. It bears mentioning that analysis has at least two components, a technical one relating to the form and poetic devices used (sort of like an analysis of the music in a song) and a semiotic one relating to its meaning (like an analysis of the lyrics in a song). Personally, it is the latter that I am more interested in, particularly in a poem which has layers of meaning, obscure references, metaphors, and the like.
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Date: 9/8/2014 1:34:00 PM
Roy, glad you liked it! It was inspired by your comment about how space can replace punctuation in contemporary poetry. I am smitten by the imagery in this poem, but also its bold, clean lines. Hey, I sent a link of this blog to the poet...and she liked what I said, but is short for time.
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Date: 9/8/2014 1:34:00 PM
I'm hoping to share "the inside scoop" of this poem-- such a rare chance to see through the eyes of an established poet.
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Date: 9/8/2014 11:44:00 AM
Continuing, I always get a kick out of the story of Ronald Reagan's enthusiasm for "Born in the USA" by Bruce Springsteen. A catchy tune, and an rousing chorus, but apparently old Ron didn't listen to all the words, never realizing that it was a Vietnam protest song. I think many read poems the same way, based on comments I see.
Date: 9/8/2014 7:24:00 AM
outside the margins OF ILLUMINATION and inside knots of THAT hunger she writes ... She writes inside the knot of a hunger to illuminate. Hunger to illuminate. No different to a poet who is hungry to find all those perfect words... why this resonated in me. More later, gators!
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Date: 9/8/2014 9:31:00 AM
:D We are different, and different is good. I find this VERY lucid, wonderfully crafted and a sumptuous read. And the great thing about soup is that we encourage differences and allow all those likes and dislikes to become comfortable, side by side.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/8/2014 9:06:00 AM
Cyndi, like Craig, I too applaud your passion for poetry. But I am just wired differently than you guys here that tried to interpret this poem. As I was reading it, I felt like I was reading gobledy goop!! Take those lines Robert LIndley has shown right below here. There is no way I will even waste my time interpreting something that is not clear cut for me. It's just how I am. So when I see this kind of poem at Soup, I usually avoid it or if it is a good friend who I want to try to say something nice to, I just pick out the one sentence I can understand clearly and comment to its beauty. sorry, it's just how I am. I don't like things unless they have lucidity.
Date: 9/7/2014 2:29:00 PM
On Stephen King and enjoyment - in his excellent book "on writing" he focuses on the story and how this should be the central part of writing. However, he is also an incredibly talented writer, and, through using the right words, and painting the right images, he has the ability to terrify and delight. Ever felt how reading a certain writer creates a desire in you to also write, or paint, or do something creative? For me that is how I "feel" talent. When reading a good book, a writer not only enjoys, but also dissects to try and understand just how the writer could get it right to move and to inspire. We are all students. That is the essence of life. We are like sharks. When we stop we die.
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Date: 9/8/2014 4:24:00 PM
:D Turns out, Craig and Daniel, that Maureen is an activist for feminism. Good observation, Daniel!
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Date: 9/8/2014 9:20:00 AM
Provocative, indeed. I think women who are poets search out our counterparts in other eras. It is (at times) impossible to ignore the temptation of writing of strong women who were ahead of their time. If interested... http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Herrad_of_Landsberg
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Date: 9/7/2014 2:34:00 PM
One provocative insight I would like to share in the analysis is this - only monks were allowed in the scriptorium, not nuns. Is this personification or a hint of something deeper?
Date: 9/7/2014 1:55:00 PM
Cyndi, yes, I do, like your blogs. They create discussion and open new vistas for me and, I am sure, others. I think this poem cannot be read only once...you just won't get it. Besides, the last line is far too important to the whole tone of the poem...it is foundational. I see in the empty stool the absence of someone who used to be there...a much loved someone...another nun, but what was she to the subject of the poem? A friend? A romantic love? Ah...so much left to the imagination. "Outside the margins of illumination and inside knots of hunger she writes." I read this as one continuous line. Was she denied the meaning of the texts she copied? Was it a spiritual hunger?
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Date: 9/8/2014 1:46:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed this, Faye. Stay tuned. The author of this poem may share its inspiration and open her poem for a behind-the-scenes view. Oh, I am so excited!
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Faye Gibson
Date: 9/7/2014 1:58:00 PM
So much here, Cyndi.... not enough time.
Date: 9/7/2014 12:57:00 PM
wish I Had time to say more but I am going out the door in five minutes. anyway, I teach ESL to adults who are very intelligent but there are just certain things they cannot grasp.It has to be learned step by step. If I were trying to teach slant rhyme and all that other stuff you mentioned, I would start with a nursery rhyme or a poem very easy to understand, so as not to overwhelm that person. I am bad with computers. When people try to teach me using their techno wizard speech, I get scared to death.Anyway, I hope you get me. Poetry courses that start with basics and build and build. THAT is what the people need!! They are all over the internet. IF someone wants it badly enough. . .
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Date: 9/8/2014 1:51:00 PM
I fell in love with THIS poem. Which is why I spent some time with it, lovin' it up, gettin' to know it, listenin' to it talk to me. Did you know you are only supposed to read ONE haiku a day? Yup. TO SAVOUR. It is cultural. Too many is like putting on six perfumes. Destroys the essence.
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Date: 9/8/2014 1:22:00 AM
I shouldn't have said nursery rhyme, but there are plenty of easy poems from which people could actually learn sophisticated poetic devices from!
Date: 9/7/2014 12:53:00 PM
Cyndi, it's been nagging at me what you said about people not having college education like me (I responded to that comment below and gave you my feelings on that) but now it has dawned on me what is irking me! People who want to learn better about poetry are not going to get this example here because it is like trying to teach Greek to them when they still don't grasp grammar rules of English. A person who cannot study these things on his own (there are plenty of places online that teach grammar, poetry rules, poetry devices, etc) What a person needs (if he is truly uneducated and having difficulties) is baby steps. I can understand many things, but this analysis scares ME. I am rushed now
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Date: 9/7/2014 12:05:00 PM
Well, right off it has a feeling of sexual repression to me [layered and hooded and calfskin] until we get to vellum. Starting the next line with [lapis] does not dissuade me from the feeling. She finds sexual pleasure in the act of painting. Outside the lines, she is cold and insecure yet inside the lines ;she is knotted UP, no release. She is cold in her extremities and warm in her core, she hungers. Men must have wings be angels, yet, she still is fascinated by ‘snaking’ objects , towers and open mouthed fish all can be seen as sexual imagery.
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Date: 9/8/2014 4:11:00 PM
ps- I'm guessing that you know that illustrations used knots? Especially Celtic. I know you have knowledge of the medieval, "Bet" :D I am still lost in all the double meanings of this piece. Gotta fly MWA!
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Date: 9/8/2014 2:27:00 PM
I see it as a passion for her art, just as we have a passion for poetry. Surely you and I have both felt "knotted up" when we are trying to get a poem "right?" That odd mad rabies bite to keep GOING until it is finished, but it is never finished!
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Date: 9/8/2014 2:25:00 PM
The word margins is a bridge (like that "of" which I am overly-fond "of" HA!) Then she speaks of the "actual" margins she works upon, her art. I think we are seeing a similar emotion: passion.
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Date: 9/8/2014 2:22:00 PM
I like what you see, even if I do not see it the same way. The placement of margins is intentional (Oh, hope she will tell us!) See how it connects both to the line above and below? She is outside "the margins" (not with all the people, isolated) a lifetime outside the margins...
Date: 9/7/2014 7:15:00 AM
Well, I went from smiling to crying in three minutes. I'm busy today with a family gathering... I'll drop by tonight. I hope to see a few look at the poem and see something I did not see and then SHARE their interpretation. Maybe open mouthed fish means something different to you. Gasping for breath? Feeling caught? Love you guys... I FEEL your poems. They enter my bloodstream and move between heart and brain. Poetry may be forgotten, but it still becomes a part of us... like one request on the prayer wall... xoxox ...
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Date: 9/7/2014 7:09:00 AM
some people may have misunderstood what I was saying: some dissection and analysis of a poem is absolutely fine and probably even necessary, but I think it is possible to over-analyse, over-think a poem...I have quite a few books on literary criticism, poetry analysis, etc., and nobody enjoys delving into a poet's thought processes more than I do, studying what they do and how they do it, but I am against total dissection...and I do find too much analysis can inhibit my creativity; I know when I'm beginning to over-think a poem - and it's not good
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/7/2014 11:34:00 AM
AWesome!!
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Date: 9/7/2014 7:17:00 AM
aaaaaaaah, yes, agreed. Like when we keep editing our own work until we lost what we were first attempting to convey. Suddenly, it is a bird, when it started as a butterfly. GOT IT.
Date: 9/7/2014 6:55:00 AM
well this needs a lot of thought but from a quick skim I would say no two people would interpret the verse the same way and it was meant to be able to be viewed through the ages - if there is no layering to the meaning & no meterics to be sung into our heads - most verses are forgotten ... layer, layer
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Date: 9/7/2014 7:02:00 AM
I am smiling... I just added something to the end of the blog and then you commented almost the same thing! Ha! What do YOU see... What do you see in the word magpie?
Date: 9/6/2014 10:45:00 PM
I find the comments below interesting, not in content but in philosophy. If we do not dissect and study, we cannot learn. I don't believe that the analysis of poetry can have an "inhibiting effect on creativity". On the contrary, poetry is about the economy of words and the use of them. If there is no analysis, how can we discern between a good poem and a poor one? The reference to "King" and "enjoyment" reflects the philosophy of a fast food culture, where the experiential is all there is to it. Poetry is both art and craft, which is why many hours of study gets you to master it. Although I do not agree with some of the analyses, I applaud Cyndi for being a scholar and sharing it.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/8/2014 7:53:00 AM
I agree (really my point here) that you do NOT need to go to college to learn about poetry. But those who had the privilege to go to college, basically got their education spoon fed to them. Yes, I do have taken several writing courses (including one day workshops and seminars), years past teen hood. This site allows for easy access to information. Why not provide it?
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/8/2014 7:47:00 AM
Andrea, it is only a blog. I will most likely write other blogs. Some may get something, even ONE line, out of the write. I will not dummy down and feel that what I wrote was clear, if read in its entirety. Many will not agree with what I wrote.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/7/2014 11:33:00 AM
Cyndi, one does not have to go to college to learn about poetry. I took a hundred dollar course in 2000 when I began writing poetry. it was a VERY good experience for me. But some people don't have that inclination for study. They do what they do and sometimes they do it well, but they are not "students" . If you tell them to read a certain website, they just won't do it. So then someone tries to explain it to them, and they still don't get it. And sometimes they do, but if they would have studied it online, they could have gotten it. My son was this way. He did not understand anything about grammar and he was going to be a lawyer!!! I tried to explain it to him and he would not listen to me. finally, realizing he HAD to do it in order to be successful, he made himself study it out ONLINE, and he conquered it!!! sElf study works if a person truly wants to do it. If a person is trying, and then still wants help, I will then give my time to that person!
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 7:05:00 AM
Charlotte, love, I am soooo sorry. (now I am crying) I saw that... felt it so intensely, the pain and love and the way you made that small perfect being eternal. This is why if we, as poets, can learn to appreciate each word in a poem, we can grow to see into a heart. HUGE CRUSHING HUG TO YOU. xox
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 9/7/2014 6:56:00 AM
and your interpretation of my poem was correct - no surprise there, as you have x-ray vision when it comes to interpreting and analysing poems!
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 9/7/2014 6:53:00 AM
cyndi, you took the words right out of my mouth, keyboard, whatever! was just gonna say that characterization is king's forte; he creates such believable characters
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 6:06:00 AM
King should be studied for his characters. His characters are well wrought and show good development. I enjoy King, too, and have his "On Writing" on my bookshelf. I read many genres.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 6:02:00 AM
Sigh. It kills me that I can't edit these dang little reply boxes... I have counted a least half a dozen typos! Grrrr
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 6:01:00 AM
We are not just an international group of poets, Andrea. We are also a group of poets from mixed economical backgrounds. Some were not able to go to college and are now- as adults- enjoying learning to 'deconstruct' literature. I hope to post a few analytical blogs and hope other poets do the same.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/6/2014 11:36:00 PM
and if King is fast food culture, count me in. Nobody does entertainment in a more descriptive way than Stephen King
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/6/2014 11:33:00 PM
Cyndi is a master at what she does, Daniel, I agree. It is totally a philosophical thing. There are actually things I enjoy analyzing but literature is not one of them even though I minored in English. Maybe it is because I did it a lot in college and I just want to relax and enjoy art at face value nowadays.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 11:00:00 PM
Thank you, Daniel. I was hoping that others would see something that differed with my analyses and share. Can you share you interpretations. I am no scholar; truly, I am still a student. Show me your "view" please.
Date: 9/6/2014 10:04:00 PM
this is just too much, Cyndi. but yes, the language is very beautiful here. I attended Utah Society of Poets one time and they were analyzing for 15 min.just a few lines of a free verse poem of someone at the meeting. It was so incredibly boring, and then another and then another. I never did return.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/6/2014 11:42:00 PM
yes, we can really agree here!! For me a well done limerick or short haiku is more interesting than any really long poem. But I do have respect for those who manipulate language to produce fabulous poetry in any form and on any topic. Even in the realm of figurative language, there are so many "types" and ways to use each aspect of figurative language. It's a wonderful world where we can all choose what we enjoy most.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 10:12:00 PM
Of course, I'm not of the norm. I love the show, "Victorian Farm" shown on TVO (like your PBS) I'd sooner swallow nails then sit through most slap stick comedies.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 10:10:00 PM
:D Different strokes for different folks. All's good, Andrea. I find limericks boring. Poetry is so BIG, you know? So there is room for all styles and tastes. And some want to learn.
Date: 9/6/2014 7:41:00 PM
what you're saying is interesting, but I could never dissect a poem to that degree, cyndi, it's tantamount to mutilation, in my eyes! lol I actually think that too much dissection and analysis can have an inhibiting effect on creativity - it does with me, anyway...stephen king once said "why can't people just let a story be a story?" well, that applies to poetry, too; it is possible to over-think, over-analyse, over-edit a poem...pick out a few things to study in a poem, by all means, but please don't hack it to pieces!! lol I'm one of those people for whom the mystery of a poem is part of its appeal...my opinion on the poem? I think it's good, if a little bordering on the arty/pretentious
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 5:56:00 AM
Now? I don't know how to write without enjambment. It would cramp me. I did a turn around in a year. I believe it was last year that I did an analysis on another poem in a blog, and ONE poet finally saw internal rhyme, how assonance can bring harmonize a theme. I was so happy for her. She didn't need to go looking too far. It was all there for her. One blog.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 5:52:00 AM
... and I learned it was enjambment. Then, I started to read about enjambment and saw it THERE in all the poems that I have loved for most of my life. I just didn't see it because of HOW they used enjambment. SEAMLESSLY.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/7/2014 5:50:00 AM
As a poet, I am allowed to say that many poets are bullheaded. (Ha! I'm in those numbers!) I remember being a dunce and saying to someone here, "I hate when lines continue to the next line. I WON'T do that." Me! YUP!!! So, I thought... hmm... what is THAT called. I should at least know what it is I'm never going to do...
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/6/2014 11:45:00 PM
Charlotte has major skills, as do you, Cyndi. That is why I marvel that you still get into all this deep analysis when you already have it down pat. Those who don't "get it" are likely never to get it unless they just study up for themselves!
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 10:08:00 PM
I understand and hear ya, gals. But some say they want to be show internal rhyme and have indicated they do not know how to glean a poem for content. Once learned, it does not need to go to this extent, yes?
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/6/2014 10:02:00 PM
Charlotte, are you my long lost sister? I so agree with you on this one. I just get turned off by analyzing poems and stories. and no wonder I love King with a quote like that.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 8:13:00 PM
And, frankly, I think I heard one too many times that poetry needs to be clear, needs to appeal to lazy readers who don't even want to try to use their imaginations, to think, to meet the poet halfway, so to speak. It is easy to allow the mind to be taken by a poet, to see SOMETHING. Anything!
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 8:09:00 PM
I will say that I kind of ripped the clothes off this poem, didn't I? Shamelessly, at that. It can make a poet uncomfortable to see someone attempt to peer into their thought process. I am ALMOST (haha!) thinking of inviting three poets to examine one of my poems, chop chop it up, see what they see.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 8:06:00 PM
I read a poem recently that contained TONS of internal and slant rhyme, but another poet was not able to see the rhyme. Literally. Could. Not. See. It. Not because they lack in-sight. But because they have never been shown internal and off-rhyme.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 8:04:00 PM
But I wanted to "do it to death," or "for the love of mike, gal, would you stop filleting the poor thing!" Haha! So yes, I understand and support your points, too!
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 9/6/2014 8:03:00 PM
:D I went for "over the top" analysis because some here have said they do not have any idea on WHERE to start when it comes to poem interpretation. I know. It is kind of like I put the poem on an autopsy table, isn't it?

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Ten Little Toes Rhymedaughter,lifeold,old,gran
Woodland Rhapsody Quatraininspirational,
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Surrender To Love Rhymeloveme,
A Totum Pole Ode Concretenative american,people,
More Dreams To Row Rhymeinspirational,life,
When the Tab Comes Due Free verseinspirational,introspecti
Lighting My Candle From Within Quintain (English)caregiving,introspection,
The Kirk By the Sea Coupletnostalgia,religion,love,
Moonlight on the Ward Chokahealth,life,
Nocturnal Poetry Rhymeimagination,life,poetry,
Slumber Epicdedication,slam,
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Our Thanksgiving Light Verseholiday,
My Country 'Tis of Thee Ethereepeace,
A New Star Shines Above Hawaii Rhymededication,music,
Monarch of Summer Haibunanimals,devotion,inspirat
Untouched Rhymeforgiveness,me,me,
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Paired Parings Balladchildhood,
Friend To Friend Haikupeople,philosophy,
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Cyndi Sonnetdedication,
Night Comes Rhymetime,
Without Hope's Gleam Terzanelleflower,hope,joy,paradise,
When Your Dead Your Dead Rhymefriendship,love,wife,
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Release Free verseencouraging,grief,hope,st
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