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SONNET FOR CHARMAINE - Cyndi MacMillan's Blog

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Cyndi MacMillan's current projects include three children's book series. Her "life as a writer' blogs can be read at  https://cyndimacmillan.wordpress.com/  Three of her poems have been published in Room magazine, issue 49.4, This Body's Maps, https://roommagazine.com/issues/bodys-map  Two poems have been published in the Prairie Journal ( Issue 67)http://www.prairiejournal.org/subscribe.html   Other poems can be found in Fieldstone Review, Issue 2015 http://www.fieldstonereview.usask.ca/article.php?article=167, Grain Magazine, issue 42.4, Summer 2015, Passed Signs/New Fields http://www.grainmagazine.ca/424  , The Steel Chisel, April 2016, http://www.thesteelchisel.ca/april2016_07.html.  The Centrifugal Eye, Spring 2016, the Unformed issue  http://www.centrifugaleye.com/ . She participated in the 20 Poem Challenge at The Ekphrastic Review: Writing and Art on Art and Writing, and thirteen of her poems have been published by the journal.http://www.ekphrastic.net/apps/search?q=Cyndi+MacMillan.

Her fiction has appeared in local newspapers and has won contests. Her short story, Missed Steps, has been published by the Windsor Review  https://view.joomag.com/windsor-review/0830468001484586649 . She enjoys reading literary journals, and she is actively pursuing further publication within their glossy covers while writing chapter books and early middle readers.

Poetry soup is a friendly forum which enables people from around the world to share their writing. It has some great resources and provides a nice space for people to connect.

Cyndi lives in a small town in Ontario with her husband, young daughter and far too many books.

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SONNET FOR CHARMAINE


Blog Posted:1/20/2014 11:07:00 PM

 

 

Delighted, I return to the stained glass

 

studio in a dream. A Maltese Seraph

 

is nigh, pleased by crafted canvasses.

 

Peace plays in her illuminated laugh

 

for she is moved by both the fired art

 

and wholesome scenes piously framed

 

in elongated windows. Pure light darts

 

between beauty forged by artistic fame

 

and the silvered coats of horses pulling carts

 

on the village street. St Jacobs, a plain land

 

praising simplicity: a message of heart

 

heard in her voice, seen in the lay of  hands.

 

But a wink teases as she lifts suncatchers,

 

seeing sweet figolli in each pastel patch.

 

 

 

 

 

 

*Above, a picture of Figolli,a Maltese cookie decorated with bright icing and enjoyed at Easter. Like two dimensional Easter Eggs ;)

 

This is to our friend, an angel of Soup, who is from Malta.

 

About the studio

 

Heartbreaking! The studio which I so poems/love'>loved has closed its doors. The shop lives on in my memory and dreams. Suspended on chains were countless stained glass ornamentations, strung in perfectly straight lines to create the illusion of walls. The Studio had too many windows to count and the light would stream through each grouping of glass, creating the effect of small, glowing rooms. I wish now I?d taken a picture. The pictures in this blog of stained glass are from a studio in Muskoka, which I may highlight on another sonnet.  

 

About St Jacobs

 

St Jacobs is a Mennonite Village. It is common to see people drive by in horse and buggy.Old order Mennonites wear clothes of another century. The women wear prayer caps and pinafores, calico dresses, no make up, no adornments. The men wear black suits, black hats, solid shoes. Some of the old order Mennonites even STILL work their land with a horse drawn plow, make solid wood furniture without a single tool that requires electricity and do not own phones.

 

About the Poem

 

I specifically chose to plop our Charmaine into this colour imbued shop with elaborate art, so unlike the village where it ?was? situated. The juxtaposition was important to me. Also, the Mennonite view to ?keep things simple? is shared by Charmaine, whose writes can have strong themes yet often choose, wisely, to refrain for overly elaborate words or hidden meanings. She likes things to be understood, to be clear, as do the Mennonites.

 

I think that our Charmaine is so filled with light, reflects what is good and INTENSIFIES it, like a suncatcher, so I chose words carefully to emphasize the comparison. Delighted and illuminated were intentionally used. Charmaine is a spiritual woman who shows such grace on the soup. I used faith inspired language: Seraph, peace, wholesome, piously. I wanted the euphony, the ... cadence?...of a hymn. I hope I captured this effect in MaltEse, pEace, ScEnes, piouslY, beautY, SimplicitY, StrEET, tEases, FigollI (which I imagine is pronounced Fig-ole-lee (yes, Charmaine?), ShE, SwEEt  ...  As a Christian, I associate hymns with this sound because of jEEEsus, the long E sound often stressed or held. Nigh, an old word, I use in a contemporary form with the theme of an olden art, timeless ways

 

I edited the word ?Sheen? and changed it to ?Silvered? but wonder if I should have

 

 

I?m a fan of alliteration and used it here Crafted/Canvasses, Peace/Play, Between/Beauty etc...

 

 

Now, the comparison between the cookie and the stained glass windows was to echo the aha moment of a haiku, a form which Charmaine enjoys ...

 

I usually do not use the nearly even a third of the amount of adjectives and adverbs which I use here, but I am happy with the finished piece

 

 

 

About Contemporary Sonnets

 

Contemporary sonnets are free to use whatever rhyme scheme they choose or the poets can invent their own. Rhyme are not necessarily ?perfect? rhyme but can use a wide variation of rhyme styles. Actually, rhyme is not even required. Also, there is no RIGID syllable count, but most counts do remain within the 9-11 range. A sentence may end mid line or even just one word into a line for effect and weight. Meter is not usually considered in contemporary sonnets..

 

Many contemporary sonneteers WORSHIP the classic sonnets (I know I do) so most prefer to KEEP the volta, though some may leave that magic spin for the last lines, as opposed to the traditional 9th line in an Shakespearian sonnet, per say. Contemporary sonnets SEEM to be liked by the editors of literary/academic journals. Many of today?s sonneteers are being lauded for releasing the sonnet from its captivity  in archives, libraries and musty tomes  and modernizing it enough that FRESH ones would appeal to the modern tastes of today?s readers.  

 

Some photos of St Jacobs

 

 

 

St. Jacobs

 

St. Jacobs Country Mill

 

 

 
Old barn silo have actually been turned into cool shops, inside floors seem to "wind" reminiscent of old spiral staircases

 

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Date: 1/22/2014 5:14:00 PM
rereading..I love the word silvered Cyndi..Sheen is nice..buy I looove silvered.Somehow makes me think of fairies and magic..Something I love B-) B-).Sorry now i saw the question whilst rereading dear : )
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Date: 1/22/2014 1:27:00 PM
You might not have seen this comment buried in the pile as I replied to myself instead of you, so I'll risk it again: One more suggestion. Tugging buggies instead of pulling carts? Just a thought, don't shoot me!
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Date: 1/22/2014 8:25:00 AM
Tnks again dear Cyndi and all my friends who commented below..I love you all.Wish I could come to thankyou earlier but hubby is home ..and in need of some tlc : ) Hugs to all
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Date: 1/21/2014 6:05:00 PM
wow Dee how refreshing! Keep um coming!
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Date: 1/21/2014 5:23:00 PM
i like this form, soul sis; it is not too restricted and yet holds a firm grip on the basic dynamics of a sonnet... what will the purists sya?.. lol... awesome tribute to our sweet charms!... bow!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/21/2014 6:06:00 PM
you stealing my sis LOL, if you want her you have to sis me too! and since I'm the elder you can call me BIG sis LOL
Date: 1/21/2014 10:14:00 AM
Yes........a beautiful tribute......to the most beautiful of souls. What a wonderful choice, to dedicate to our lovely Charmaine!!
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 1/21/2014 1:54:00 PM
Thanks, Gurl! And you'll be getting one, too! I'm sitting, almost meditating, finding the right place to take my friends on soup, figuratively, a place that mirrors their personality and writing style. Not so easy. LOL.. then it just pours out of me.
Date: 1/21/2014 8:42:00 AM
This captured her essence, Cyndi. Even the message was lucid and she is a lucid writer, so I appreciated that in your sonnet. Charma is such a sweetie!!
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 1/21/2014 1:56:00 PM
Exactly what I was trying to do! Thanks, chum. Don't think you're escaping my scrutiny and cyber hugging either... oh there is a sonnet 'stewing' for you, too. It is natural for me to write in a form I love, for those I love. CHEERS
Date: 1/21/2014 7:27:00 AM
Beautiful, Cyndi. And I think you captured Charma very well...she's a sweetheart. Those pics are too cool...the silos look like home..;)
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 1/21/2014 1:51:00 PM
Glad you liked, chum! Thanks.
Date: 1/21/2014 6:53:00 AM
I like it very much. Learned a new word, figolli. I find deconstruction very interesting. I might do a contest. In terms of "silvered coats", how about "burnished backs" instead. Renders the idea with a bit of alliteration. Cheers, Roy
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Roy Jerden
Date: 1/21/2014 4:15:00 PM
One more. Tugging buggies instead of pulling carts? Just a thought, don't shoot me!
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 1/21/2014 8:50:00 AM
I LOVE the suggestion and will use it...the Mennonites do put their BACKS into all they do, literally and figuratively. AND I like the echo... of BAAAck, SunCAAAthers, pAAAth... Thank you!
Date: 1/21/2014 1:24:00 AM
and tnks for the added info re contemporary sonnets ,dear : )
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Date: 1/21/2014 1:22:00 AM
I was speechless when I read this beauty in the poem area .Yes dear..So so beautiful is this sonnet.I love the explanation re the figolli and stained glass-Yes I can see that in a haiku..Aha!!!: ).You pronounced figolli correctly as well :.)..By the way ,they are yummy delicious: ).Re St.Jacob's land-I imagine me living there..It seems very beautiful,and blissed with tranquility.Yes I imagine me roaming freely ,with no make up on..or in a buggy driven by a horse far from the hussle and buzzle of cities.I do believe God should have an important role in our life,and could even feel a spirutual feeling in your sonnet.I love love this poem and I'm going to print it..It stays close to my heart <3
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 1/22/2014 9:02:00 AM
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Carrie Richards
Date: 1/21/2014 10:11:00 AM
Suncatcher is the most beautiful way to describe our lovely Charmaine. Truly, she is!! This lady brings her own color of the sun to our day!
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 1/21/2014 8:57:00 AM
SOOOO glad you enjoyed this! Now...lol... someone may end up calling you Soup's Suncatcher down the road... I'm just about to post Mystic Rose's sonnet... lol... she is very excited! Thank you for all you bring Soup! You're awesome!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/21/2014 8:42:00 AM
good to read your reaction here, charma!

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