Kudos For Catie
Blog Posted:11/7/2012 3:29:00 PM
The following haiku was written by Catie. Look at it carefully and learn what a real haiku looks like, feels like and tastes like. A work like this can not be by accident.
where no light plays
nor reflects upon my waters --
my heart is eclipsed
First of all she has immersed herself into the poem, so it is very subjective and modern sounding. It is also very abstract in the way it is presented and deals in concepts. It tells of her emotion when she is left out of the loop, so to speak, with no one wanting her opinions or good advice. It makes her feel unfulfilled as a person, and as a "want to be" friend.
"where no light plays" is a tremendous metaphor for - - - ignorance of circumstance, lack of sophistication, one way conversation, a place where there are no answers, aloneness, feeling of lonliness, little or no education, and depending on where your idividual interests lie, there are probably a couple more that each of you could name.
"nor reflects upon my waters" is a simple reaffirmation of the foregone conclusions above, with the added stipulation that : even if some of those things have been presented to her, for one reason or another, she has come up short.
"my heart is eclipsed"- - - - I am devastated, my goodness has been cut short, not accepted, belittled, muddied, tainted, I no longer feel a whole person as when circumstance was different.
Let your mind wander: take wings and stimulate your immagination. What else could this tremendous poem be saying. After all there are THREE WHOLE LINES OF INFORMATION, the longest being every bit of
7 syllables. And she makes it look so easy. How does this poem speak of you personally?
I salute you madam poet.