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Wretched Grief



The soft breeze soughs softly through the tall cypress trees.
I stare at the tomb of my son, so long now dead.
          How he loved to sail on gentle summer smooth seas,
          How oft I wished I perished and died in his stead.
                   Late summer brought so much change of ugly weather.
                   His small boat capsized, and he drowned, lost forever.
I stare at the cold slab, my head in prayer I bow.
I weep at the tomb of my son, gone so long now.

4 April 2019 

Writing Challenge 1- April, 2019 - Its All About 8 - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Dear Heart


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Date: 4/30/2019 2:27:00 PM
A wonderful written poem with emotions of sadness' and great imagery.
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Date: 4/25/2019 6:43:00 AM
I have read your creative winning work and came back to say congrats on your win ..Way to go.. Sara
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Date: 4/23/2019 10:56:00 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest with this deep and emotional write, so well written !
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/23/2019 12:25:00 PM
Thanks.
Date: 4/21/2019 8:53:00 PM
These emotions still tug at the heart so deeply. Congratulations Victor, on this win. ~ Brandy
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/21/2019 10:26:00 PM
Thank you, Brandy.
Date: 4/13/2019 9:38:00 AM
I can't imagine the pain and loss that you experienced in the death of your son. I know that it must be hard no matter the distance between the time it happened and the present. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 4/11/2019 7:02:00 PM
so glad to read its a fictional poem Victor but sadly many can relate to the passing of a child:-( many congrats on POTW:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/11/2019 5:00:00 AM
A very heart wrenching poem, grief well expressed! Congratulations on POTW!
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Date: 4/9/2019 6:08:00 PM
I hope this is fictional written for the contest Victor. It is very moving. Congratulations on having it honored for POTW! Truly deserving! : ) xxoo
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Date: 4/9/2019 4:27:00 PM
Way to go Victor, congrats on POTW.
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Date: 4/7/2019 8:39:00 PM
Dear Victor, your thoughts tug at my heart so deeply. The sadness within, the pain. The heartache. You have taken me there in the moment. I see these are thoughts from your muse. My heart can beat again. Congratulations on Poem of the Week. ~ Brandy
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Date: 4/7/2019 6:51:00 PM
Back again to congratulate you dear Victor. An amazing write like this deserves the honor of POTW. Good luck in the contest....Maria Hugs
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Date: 4/7/2019 1:03:00 PM
Sad potw vic but nicely written
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/7/2019 2:23:00 PM
Thanks for letting me know. I never really bother with these chosen poems unfortunately. But I appreciated you telling me.
Date: 4/7/2019 8:20:00 AM
This is really heart wrenching and I'm really sad fir those parents who go through such agony. Great write. Good luck , Sunita.
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Date: 4/6/2019 3:32:00 PM
Hi Victor, you had me crying and then I saw it was fiction. I in fact lost a son - I gave birth to him and he died 6 days later, after which I had a healthy bouncing baby boy 2 years later. This all happened many years, ago. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 4/6/2019 12:26:00 AM
Dear Victor, this is such an exquisite but sad poem but I am glad to learn it's just fiction. My son is building a sailboat and vows he will sail around the world which scares me so very much. I just hope I will never have a reason to write a poem like this.
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/6/2019 1:04:00 AM
The boat should be a big one which means he will need help to navigate it and he should chose the smallest sea divisions between one country and another. But like you I wish he would sail nearer home.
Date: 4/5/2019 11:32:00 PM
So sorry Victor
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Date: 4/5/2019 5:54:00 PM
Its every parents wish for their children to outlive them. The sad reality of Life is we don't often get that wish. This poem even though 8 lines captures the grief and wistfulness of a parent who would have rather given willing his life instead. Winning material here Victor, however good luck in the contest and as always a fave for me....Maria Hugs
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Date: 4/5/2019 8:51:00 AM
Perfect Rhyme and verse, Victor, It's nice to see you active again.. it's Friday a day for a night out so you have a nice weekend. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 4/5/2019 6:40:00 AM
Such a deep and sad poetry, Victor. Yet you penned it beautifully. Reads like a winner.
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Date: 4/5/2019 5:10:00 AM
Dear Victor, my heart could feel the pain, literally. I understand the feeling of staring at a cold slab. But not of a grown child. These are older folks. This is a wonderfully written poem. I am hoping you win in the Contest. Your imagery and your heart lputs me there with you. Thank you. Panagiota FAV for me! What a powerful poem.
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Date: 4/5/2019 4:18:00 AM
- A nightmare for all parents ... a grief that would never go away - A heartbreaking poem, Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/5/2019 3:21:00 AM
The nightmare of every parent: Living hell on earth. Fortunately for you is just a poem but for others a harsh reality. A Superb powerful poem that pierces the heart with grief's dagger ! A fav for me my friend, Victor.
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Date: 4/5/2019 3:11:00 AM
I would struggle if any of my kids went before me, thankfully from.your comment it's a fictional write. Good luck. Tom
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Date: 4/4/2019 6:52:00 PM
A loving dedication from a loving father... in 8 lines...I might try it...
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Date: 4/4/2019 4:28:00 PM
Victor, this has a ring of truth, and I want to know, and yet I fear knowing. I am sad for the truth, and yet this poem has such a ring of truth! Good luck in the contest, my friend, either way.
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 4/4/2019 11:10:00 PM
It is fiction and for the contest but it has happened to others.
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