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When Fortune Turns

When fortune turns, and humans leave their home, 
the garden whoops, and sheds its choking suit
of mollycoddled squatters, while the loam
explodes with popping seeds and juicy roots.

Fresh dandelion and chickweed shake the grime
from eager heads, and creepers joyfully 
striate the sombre hedge with shots of lime
and emerald. Wild buttercup breaks free

to polka dot the life into a lawn
too long oppressed by chemicals and blades;
in haughty beds, the nettles rise, reborn.
The land can strut once more in splendid shades

of mint and pea, cheered on by sedge and brome...
when fortune turns, and humans leave their home.



17 May 2019
For Orphan Sonnet Contest 
Sponsored by Dale Gregory Cozart 
Orphan sonnet form: Abab cdcd efef aA / iambic pentameter 
Contest theme: a nature scene  
NB: British English (“lawn” rhymes with “born”!)

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Date: 5/26/2019 11:31:00 AM
I've decided oor should be a soup acronym that stands for out of room.
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Date: 5/26/2019 11:30:00 AM
You are making me think deep, ponder and reflect, and I've only had the half cup of coffee. Your theme is my deep; love it and feel layers are involved with your concept .. the land, house, once human free .. layers that have become my ponder. I've never carried lines in a sonnet to the next stanza thus my reflect as also enhanced by your eye-opening imagery. From the first word this poem impressed me in many ways, we won't even get into lawn and born which here rhyme with fawn and scorn. oor
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Date: 5/19/2019 1:55:00 PM
Nicely done, Nina-- I envy those who can spin a good sonnet!
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Date: 5/19/2019 8:47:00 AM
Perfect human free green splendid shades. Rephrasing Kim, a fave and hopefully a soon)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/19/2019 10:29:00 AM
What a happy world the world would be, if it were only human-free... Thank you Kurt :-)
Date: 5/18/2019 4:00:00 PM
You can feel the devotion and love for your garden in this, Nina, this is so gracefully phrased-
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/19/2019 10:29:00 AM
Thank you Michelle :-)
Date: 5/18/2019 12:25:00 PM
Beautiful, Nina. Very thought-provoking, actually.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/19/2019 10:28:00 AM
Thank you Sunlite!
Date: 5/17/2019 10:03:00 PM
Nina, your beautiful poem is a joyful celebration of Nature reclaiming the land and a fiesta for the human senses. Rousing imagery, a spectacular piece. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/18/2019 1:41:00 AM
Thank you very much Susan for your warm and kind comment.
Date: 5/17/2019 8:13:00 PM
Nina, this stanza alone should win contests winning bronze and gold ribbons. "Fresh dandelion and chickweed shake the grime from eager heads, and creepers joyfully striate the sombre hedge with shots of lime and emerald. Wild buttercup breaks free" Wonderfully done. I am thinking nettles are thorns, and not fond of them though, not eager for that part.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/18/2019 1:39:00 AM
Haha no I’m not fond of the nettles either but they are a bit of a symbol of nature reclaiming somewhere unfortunately! :-) Thank you Caren!
Date: 5/17/2019 7:11:00 PM
Such a wonder of imagery! A fave and hopefully a win!!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/18/2019 1:37:00 AM
Wow thank you Kim!
Date: 5/17/2019 3:34:00 PM
I loved the image of 'wild floral partying' once the owners had deserted the premises, Nina. I always feel it's a shame when daisies and buttercups are beheaded in the grass cutting process. Not so sure about the revival of the nettle brigade though!! Haughty beds was such a choice adjective! I really enjoyed your original approach to this challenge,Nina.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 5/18/2019 1:37:00 AM
Thank you Wendy! I’m always sad for the daisies too. (And big thanks for spotting my typo too - funny how you read what you expect to see when check your own stuff!)