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This poem is awful. Its flow is ever so clumsy, and its rhyme is not to be endorsed, because it’s forced. Like a bomb factory, it is full of bad devices: average alliteration, similes like farts in an elevator, and badly executed and slightly unnecessary... enjambment. Plus it seems to be missing its Contest: You Be The Judge Sponsored by: Bobby May Date Created: 8th March 2019 Your Judgment Rating:  Last

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Date: 3/31/2019 8:38:00 PM
This had to be a fun, relaxed write. At least I think it would. Well it is fun to those reading it. I do think that I have written a few of these, unintentionally.
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Date: 3/30/2019 8:23:00 PM
I wish I could write funny. Thanks for this clever poem. Made me smile :-)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/31/2019 2:14:00 AM
Thank you Thresha! In this case all I had to do was write badly ;-)
Date: 3/18/2019 7:24:00 PM
I actually love this! Not because it's good poetry, but because it's a good teaching piece. It makes me want to examine my own work, to see whether I am doing anything similar. Like Dick Van Dyke, you have to be really good, in order to APPEAR... awful. Well Done! And great fun! Oh, no! That rhyme was forced...
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Date: 3/15/2019 1:18:00 AM
"like a bomb factory, it is full of bad devices"--Wow! such fun!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/19/2019 1:49:00 AM
Thanks PS!
Date: 3/14/2019 8:24:00 PM
There's a lit to loke here; I mean, a lat to luk; no, no -- a let to leek! ~ A lot to like here in Chicago. LOL ~ gw
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/19/2019 1:49:00 AM
There is a lit to Luke if you Luke’s it awful! Thanks Gershon!
Date: 3/14/2019 8:59:00 AM
I didn't go with clever and witty, what a great approach. I probably stayed 'sincere' because I have sponsor 'preferences' that I've never allowed myself to experience. This is great, certainly a hoot, it even has a 'toot.' I give you gold stars in abundance for creativity delivered most imaginatively. Loved enjoying this. All the best ... CayCay
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/14/2019 1:32:00 PM
Thank you fabulous! I originally wrote the “toot” line as “trumps in an elevator” and then edited it for an international audience. “Trump” is my favourite word for fart... or used to be!!
Date: 3/12/2019 7:45:00 PM
Crikey Nina … even your 'awful' poem brings on smiles - I enjoyed this one - Lindsay
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/13/2019 2:07:00 AM
Yeah but... it IS awful! Thank you Lindsay!
Date: 3/10/2019 1:16:00 PM
Ha. Mine is even worse and I'm gonna title it Rat poem or something. (anyway, you got some clever lines in about farting devices at least!)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/10/2019 1:25:00 PM
Look forward to reading something truly dreadful from you Andrea!
Date: 3/9/2019 8:50:00 AM
Love the ironic tongue-in-cheek quality of this very clever poem, Nina
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/10/2019 7:37:00 AM
Thank you LJ! :-)
Date: 3/9/2019 7:33:00 AM
Love your poem, and your high rating, my friend. Good luck in the contest.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/9/2019 7:43:00 AM
Haha, so you think eating myself “last” was aiming a bit high? Yeah you’re probably right!!
Date: 3/9/2019 7:12:00 AM
That was funny, Nina!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/9/2019 7:43:00 AM
Thank you Agnes!
Date: 3/8/2019 8:39:00 PM
Hahahaha!! Love it! And the ending (or lack thereof) was a brilliant touch! ;D
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/9/2019 1:28:00 AM
Thank you very much Rhona! I proudly declare it my worst ever (well with the exception of the teenage poetry I mentioned in the comments below! :-/ )
Date: 3/8/2019 12:16:00 PM
lol sure made me giggle Nina:-) you made writing badly look so easy lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/9/2019 1:26:00 AM
Thank you Jan, it came quite naturally lol!
Date: 3/8/2019 11:24:00 AM
You have an excellent sense of humor, Nina. Bravo.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/8/2019 11:51:00 AM
Thank you very much Line! :oD
Date: 3/8/2019 10:50:00 AM
this made me laugh...wont ever ride in an elevator with you! Smiling....BG
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/8/2019 11:46:00 AM
Ha, no I wouldn’t recommend it! ;-)
Date: 3/8/2019 9:16:00 AM
I suspect that was quite difficult to write, our brains have been wired to do it correctly, made me laugh.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/8/2019 11:48:00 AM
Oh, a friend had just sent me a photo of a poem I wrote when I was14 which apparently appeared in the school magazine. Man. That was enough to get my TRULY AWFUL poetry juices flow freely! Thank you nick!
Date: 3/8/2019 8:29:00 AM
I'm crying I'm laughing I'm faving...
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Maureen McGreavy
Date: 3/8/2019 4:24:00 PM
whoop whoop! ;D
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/8/2019 11:45:00 AM
I’m whooping...
Date: 3/8/2019 8:23:00 AM
Haha farts in an elevator, that alone should get you top spot lol
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/8/2019 11:44:00 AM
There is a parchment note tied to the quill inherited from my poetic great-great-grandfather. It reads: “Be ye in doubt? Then mention ye a farte.” Wise, my ancestors. Thank you Tom :-)