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The Whirlwind - Collaboration with Caren Krutsinger

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This was fun! Caren started the story, and I finished it. She built em up, and I... well you’ll see. And before all the Caren fans shout at me for being a meanie... we did have it planned that way from the start :-)

Thanks Caren, loved working on this!

I was completely, utterly, totally completely in love.
We met last Thursday, our eyes melted into each other’s souls before we spoke.
Together we were beyond sensual, beyond sexy, beyond anything I have experienced before.
There are no words to do our relationship justice.
 
I had fallen hard and fast, and it felt wonderful.
He was all about me, and I was all about us, and then he was too.
By Friday evening we were so in sync, we were finishing each other sentences.
I felt like I had been caught in a whirlwind, and I did not care.
We were nuts about each other, could not keep our hands off each other.
 
I could not wait to introduce him to my family and my friends
As he had become my world, and I had become his.
 
By Sunday, I knew him. 
I didn’t just know him, I KNEW him - possibly better than I knew myself.
It felt like, in the space of four days, we’d been together for - oh - about seven years.

Itch itch itch.

His stories became boring. I knew every ending.
His jokes became tedious. I knew every punchline.
And his body - oh how I had feasted on that body - every single pore....
It had nothing more to give.

On Monday morning, I looked at him and he looked at me.
“Shall we...” I said, “Call it a day?” he said.
So we split the chocolate we’d bought on Saturday but were too  lovesick to eat,
And we split the seedlings we’d bought to plant in the garden of our inevitable dream cottage...
And by Tuesday I was...
Over it.


23 July 2018

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Date: 7/29/2018 9:35:00 AM
Wonderful collaboration and story of infatuation that almost was love. Congratulations on your POTD. :)
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Date: 7/27/2018 4:05:00 PM
Infatuation often grows dim, but love shines on. I loved the contrast and how sugar turned to sand! A wonderful collaboration from both of you! Congratulations on having it deservedly honored with POTD!
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/28/2018 4:25:00 AM
Thank you Connie. We had a lot of fun with this one!
Date: 7/27/2018 12:48:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great p.o.t.d., Nina & Caren !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/28/2018 4:26:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise. Believe me, the pleasure was all mine.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/27/2018 1:32:00 AM
Thank you very much Anne-Lise!
Date: 7/26/2018 8:54:00 AM
Congratulations Nina and Caren on the POTD honor!! I enjoyed your humor here very much. Funny!! Cheers and Best, Gary
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/26/2018 12:35:00 PM
Thanks Gary ;-)
Date: 7/26/2018 3:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved POTD Nina and Caren with your well written and very funny poem. :))
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/26/2018 12:35:00 PM
Thank you Roy!
Date: 7/25/2018 11:04:00 PM
Congratulations on POTD, Nina & Caren. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/25/2018 4:48:00 PM
sure made me smile Nina and Caren and many congrats on POTD:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/25/2018 4:01:00 PM
Nina and Caren, I love this brilliant and so funny collaboration you put together. What a whirlwind courtship they experienced in four short days! But, these days...maybe not so unusual!! Very well-written, and big congrats on your POTD honor! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 7/25/2018 1:42:00 PM
Wonderful thrill ride, Nina and Caren! Caliente cool collab. Kudos on POTD. Ty for reminding us how the Whirlwind feels ... beginning to end. Pure aurora australis aurora borealis pole-to-pole poetry. Love and joy always.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:56:00 PM
Thank you Freddie, wow thanks, hope it didn’t make you nauseous!
Date: 7/25/2018 9:56:00 AM
Returning with congratulations for you both, Nina and Caren, on your excellent and well deserving POTD honors for your brilliant collaboration.. Warmest wishes my friends.. ~Susan
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:33:00 PM
Thank you loveliest Susan!
Date: 7/25/2018 9:26:00 AM
And round and round we go! Loved it. Congratulations!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:33:00 PM
Thanks so much Sunlite!
Date: 7/25/2018 8:36:00 AM
I'm with Karen, OMG and WoW! I loved everything about this piece. Let's see it was funny, entertaining and just brilliant! I wish the whirl wind romance would have ended differently. However if it did it would have changed the course of this well written write. Congratulations to you both on getting the poem of day. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:33:00 PM
Thank you so much Alexis! I feel humbly overloaded with OMGs and WOWs!
Date: 7/25/2018 8:16:00 AM
This is a really briliant collaboration by both of you, impressive and certainly a joy to read, many congratulations on your poem being chosen as POTD, good luck and have a really nice day
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:31:00 PM
Ah thank you Faraz!
Date: 7/25/2018 8:12:00 AM
Congratulations Nina and Caren on your POTD. Well done.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:31:00 PM
Thank you very much Warren!
Date: 7/25/2018 7:58:00 AM
Congrats!!! lovely ladies of the soup on your collab and POTD!...seems to be the norm now days as far as relationships go...MTV and the internet ruined everything lol...^WW^
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:30:00 PM
Thank you, and thanks for calling us lovely ladies! •blush• Can’t QUITE agree with you about the internet ruining everything - I did meet my husband there! And he’s worked out pretty well ;-) All the best to you Winged One!
Date: 7/25/2018 7:33:00 AM
Hilarious! Fabulous write you too! The falling's the best part, it's that landing... ;p Congrats on POTD! xomo x2 <3 <3
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:27:00 PM
Thank you Maureen! I’ll pass one of the xomos into Caren ;-)
Date: 7/25/2018 6:55:00 AM
Beware the long weekends ....at least it was a lawyer less split.....
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 4:19:00 PM
Or indeed lawless... Thanks John :-)
Date: 7/25/2018 5:18:00 AM
Congratulations Nina and Caren on your POTD...this was a very funny write...Well done! Charlie
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/25/2018 6:12:00 AM
Thank you. We had great fun with it, believe me.
Date: 7/25/2018 1:30:00 AM
Congratulations to you and Caren on POTD. Well done both. Tom
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/25/2018 2:26:00 AM
Ooh thanks Tom, that’s a very nice surprise for a Tuesday morning! :-)
Date: 7/23/2018 5:43:00 PM
i just commented on caren's post and i'll repeat the gist of what i said - this is funny and delightful and i thoroughly enjoyed it! great work, both of you...
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Date: 7/23/2018 2:32:00 PM
Brilliant collabaration Nina & Caren, well done both. Tom
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/23/2018 8:50:00 PM
Thank you Tom. We always have fun collaborating.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/23/2018 2:33:00 PM
Thank you Tom!
Date: 7/23/2018 12:28:00 PM
OMG and WOW! An instant fav! I love love love this fantastic, flowing and fun write. A superb collaboration Caren and Nina. Excellent and so enjoyed! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 7/23/2018 8:50:00 PM
We had a good time with it, Susan. Thank you for the lovely comment.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/23/2018 12:34:00 PM
Ah Susan, thank you so much! I’m thrilled that you enjoyed it so much!