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The Hollow

I’ve been down to The Hollow, and I’ll never be the same,
So many have been taken there, yet never speak its name,
It’s a place as cold as gravity - it grips, and you descend,
It’s featureless, it’s soulless, and you feel it has no end.

There, you will find longing that has lost the will to yearn,
There, you will find love that has forgotten how to burn,
There, you will find anger with no energy to fight,
There, you will find emptiness that claws away the light.

Many start to stumble down, yet find a path to climb,
Some are lifted safely clear by love and care and time,
But some, they journey further - they’re the ones who can’t come back,
For they’re lured into the neverending numbness of the black.

There, they seek a refuge from the mirror of their mind,
There, they seek out nothing, leaving nothingness behind,
There, they seek to quash their dreams, for dreaming brings no pleasure,
There, The Hollow chalks another victim to its ledger.   

Have you been to The Hollow? Could you break its hold, and tell?
Could you rip away the veil of shame which harbours it so well?
Could you show someone a pathway with a fragile map of words?
You may yet be the one who breaks the Hollow’s deadly curse.



12 June 2018
For “Hollow” Contest
Sponsor: Anthony Slausen 
1st Place (Premiere)
And “Pièce de Resistance” Contest
Sponsor: The Name Forsakes Me
3rd Place (Premiere)

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Date: 3/6/2020 5:03:00 AM
Love it! A Fav!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 3/6/2020 5:19:00 AM
Thank you Valerie! It’s nice when people read some of my older stuff :-) and thank you for the fav :-)
Date: 12/22/2019 3:22:00 PM
Wow this such an emotive amazing piece, brilliant.
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Date: 10/13/2019 3:49:00 PM
Sorry I missed this beauty Nina, great write, did you know it's on the soup all time top 100? Congrats for all the accolades that come your way!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 10/13/2019 4:06:00 PM
Thank you so much John! I actually made a couple of edits to this only this week. I do like this poem but just can’t quite get a couple of lines right...
Date: 7/24/2019 10:30:00 AM
Wow. Wonderful adventure to read. "can not come back". I sure get that... Hugs... Ann
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/24/2019 1:16:00 PM
Thank you very much Ann!
Date: 2/27/2019 4:36:00 PM
Nina, Thank you for this poem. It is evident that you have been to the Hollow. For this I am deeply sorry. Yours is a wonderful talent! Regards, Dean
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 2/27/2019 4:38:00 PM
Thank you Dean, that’s so lovely. I’m out of that now. It was postnatal depression so thankfully only lasted a year or so. Awful place to be though. Thank you for your kindness x
Date: 2/21/2019 2:58:00 PM
Hello Nina, no I have not been to the Hollows. It sounds creepy to me. I do not want any part of it. have a nice day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 2/21/2019 5:50:00 PM
Oh good.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 2/21/2019 4:26:00 PM
Darlene - I don’t blame you! Nina x
Date: 12/28/2018 7:01:00 PM
ahhh THIS gem is listed as the top one!! I did not see my favorite in the top seven. But another of yours was in my favorites. I'll go to it and let you know which it was. (this is in reference to the soupmail I just sent you)
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Date: 12/19/2018 10:37:00 AM
Nina, I recognize the hollow. This is a haunting warning yet encouraging. It sheds light on the hideousness of the hollow and speaks of hope. Your poem is beautiful and valuable. Congratulations on its many deserved honors. A fav of course.
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Date: 12/19/2018 1:05:00 PM
Thank you so much PS for your thoughtful words.
Date: 9/1/2018 7:48:00 AM
I've only heard about places like this but now that I know they exist...congrats on your podium placement.
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Date: 8/27/2018 12:25:00 AM
I love this Nina. It reads like a song. Enjoyed and congratulations on your trophy win.
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Date: 7/23/2018 7:35:00 PM
Nina, I am so happy to see your poem once again on a winner's list, and a very selective one at that! Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 7/21/2018 4:58:00 PM
Back to congratulate you again on your win again. As wonderful as before. Well done!
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Date: 7/21/2018 11:26:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this well deserved poem...truly enjoyed...Charlie :)
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Date: 7/21/2018 2:42:00 AM
A trophy win, and well-deserved, my friend! Fun to read, and wonderfully written, as usual.
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Date: 7/20/2018 6:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this edgy and dark write, Nina, I just love this and must fav! There was a hollow between my house and my best friend's house when I was a child and teen called "Spook Hollow", and many strange things happened there, including many sightings of a ghost dog and sounds that came straight from hell. I may write about it someday, though people will think I'm making it up, lol. Life is stranger than fiction, my Grampa always said! Great write!
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Date: 7/20/2018 3:04:00 PM
I absolutely love everything about this poem, Nina! How wonderful that you ended with hope. My new favorite! Congrats on your well-deserved win. Janice
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/20/2018 3:07:00 PM
Thank you so much Janice. Lovely to hear that from a fine poet such as yourself. :-)
Date: 7/20/2018 2:27:00 PM
Nina, love, love, love! This took me to a place that I had never been but knew that I had. Congratulations!!!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/20/2018 2:55:00 PM
Ah thank you Gabrielle. Don’t stay there, will you? x
Date: 7/20/2018 1:43:00 PM
Love this, Nina, especially the 'fragile map of words' line, congratulations!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/20/2018 2:26:00 PM
Thank you Michelle!
Date: 7/20/2018 11:03:00 AM
Love it, Nina. Congrats on your well deserved podium finish.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/20/2018 2:25:00 PM
Thank you Line x
Date: 7/12/2018 6:30:00 PM
Got it. :) I'm very pleased to know what chuffed means now. :)
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Date: 7/12/2018 9:01:00 AM
Enjoyed the detailed descriptions and the repetitive question and no thanks to a visit to your Hollow.
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Date: 7/11/2018 11:32:00 AM
The way you have described the "hollow" so well, it appears to be a place I do not want to visit. Nice work.
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Date: 7/9/2018 12:34:00 AM
Yes, I have been to the "hallow" many times. It's walls are very slippery. I live this poem everyday, some good, some no so good. Nina, This is explaining what is hard to explain to those who have not been there. It is Excellent!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/20/2018 2:24:00 PM
I am glad. Not that you have been, or still visit there, but that you feel I have explained it adequately. I took the task seriously. It is much misunderstood. Thank you Daniel x
Date: 7/7/2018 12:48:00 AM
This poems confirms my long held suspicion that you are extremely talented. I have so many questions: are you musically inclined (This turned to song as I read), have you written long? oh, I best stop, though as a momentary Chatty-Cathy there is much this DAMN good poem excited in me. A Wow and A POEM JOY. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/7/2018 2:31:00 PM
Ah thank you so so much CayCay for your generous and heartwarming comment. Nothing wrong with Chatty-Cathy. I like Chatty-Cathy :-) I have done a fair amount of musicy things in my time, yes. And have written poems on and off all my life, but only silly ones for my friends. I’d never tried anything serious, or any kind of form, til I joined Soup in January. I literally learnt all I know on Soup! :-)
Date: 7/1/2018 7:08:00 PM
Wow, Nina, this is an amazing poem takes us into the depth of the deepest of all 'hollows'. Congratulations on your so well-deserved Trophy win. Hugs, Sandra
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 7/2/2018 12:13:00 AM
Thank you very much Sandra. :-)
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