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The Day The Stranger Came

The day the stranger came, we bade goodbye to our mad sanity, Our high hopes for humanity traipsed off in treachery’s parade. He took our trust and trussed us up with it; a prison in our heads, We gave him shelter, gave him bread, and with our souls, he filled his cup. The stranger came, and to our shame, our minds were fooled, our hearts were bent by lies, ugly and fraudulent - So was it us who were to blame? A thief may take, but truly, it’s the take that thieves, that steals the most, Like cancer, leeching from its host, it festers from within... we break. How fast our salty structures fell and smashed, the day that stranger came, In gutting us, like doe-eyed game for cash... he crushed our will as well. 27 August 2018 For A Litany of Poetic Devices Contest Sponsored by Line Gauthier Each line illustrates a different poetic device. Devices used 1 - Assonance (also enjambment) 2 - Oxymoron 3 - Alliteration (also enjambment) 4 - Personification (also alliteration) 5 - Homophones (also metaphor, alliteration, and enjambment) 6 - Metaphor 7 - Synecdoche (also parallelism) 8 - Inversion (also metaphor) 9 - Internal rhyme 10 - Parallelism (also enjambment) 11 - Dissonance 12 - Rhetorical question 13 - Antithesis (also alliteration and enjambment) 14 - Superlative 15 - Simile 16 - Ellipsis 17 - Ambiguity (also alliteration and enjambment) 18 - Onomatopoeia 19 - Enjambment (also simile) 20 - Consonance

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Date: 10/18/2019 11:26:00 AM
Incredible,... every word... Ann
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Date: 9/14/2018 5:32:00 AM
oh wow, and you had amazing rhythm and rhyme too! I can se why you took top notch, it is awesome to see how everyone wrote their in their own way and each way still creates something memorable. Congrats sweet Nina! :)-luloo
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/14/2018 8:55:00 AM
Yes I haven’t read them all yet but so far they’ve been extremely diverse given the restrictions! Thank you Luloo :-)
Date: 9/14/2018 12:33:00 AM
BIG CONGRATS TO WIN TO TOP. HUGS
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/14/2018 8:54:00 AM
Thank you Anisha :-)
Date: 9/13/2018 2:30:00 PM
Congrats on your well penned top winning poem, Nina. I love the way you wove an fascinating intrigue. Your poem will be a welcome addition to the planned anthology providing much appreciated examples of poetic devices presented in a cohesive and fun manner. Well done.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/13/2018 4:03:00 PM
Ooh that’s very exciting to hear Line! It was a great challenge and I’m thrilled you’re planning to include this! :)
Date: 9/13/2018 1:42:00 PM
The devices flowed so seemingly effortessly into your 'storyline' Nina. I'm highly impressed and feel ashamed at being such a coward!!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/13/2018 4:01:00 PM
Thank you very much Wendy! Why do you feel a coward?! Did you give the contest a miss? You can’t do em all and this one took me about three days! (Not solidly, obviously!!) Anyway I see you’re having a fab contest run at the moment. Well deserved :)
Date: 9/2/2018 10:16:00 AM
If locating them all were a test, I'd cussing words fail. I don't have TIME to stare at this achievement any longer. I'm filling in the captcha, then not scrolling up again. Did you have pages of notes? And a hard time finding them all?
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 9/2/2018 12:42:00 PM
While I would never bark at my son when he interrupts my writing, my muse is quick to upset because lines she holds often vaporize when she's interrupted. Well, My Tim and brother have met her bark. Mother who frequently calls for - oh, I gotta go, Kyle is talking to me.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/2/2018 12:13:00 PM
I hope that when Line puts some of these in her book she finds a way to lay out the poems side by side with the names of the devices as - yes - they’re hard to read with the devices at the bottom aren’t they! I read someone else’s and had to give up half way through!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/2/2018 12:08:00 PM
Yes I spent an evening finding definitions - I just cut and pasted them into a list but I had a job to find credible/understandable definitions for them all! But I thought it was a good opportunity to learn a bit more about this new craft I’ve started dabbling in. Then I spent a couple of days chipping away at the poem (in the tiny spaces around the rest of my life!)
Date: 9/2/2018 10:12:00 AM
Where'd you get the time? That you carved out such is almost as impressive as the smooth weave of all the assigned devices. I don't even have time to see if they're all there much less learn and conquer them as you so effectively and impressively did. Wow - I know this took time - don't you need to go shopping instead of conquering poem challenges? They are so rewarding - those challenges. Applause ... CayCay
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/2/2018 12:11:00 PM
Ah thank you very much lovely CayCay! Don’t worry I stocked up on age 10 pyjamas and ordered in a truck load of food before I embarked on this! And I did really enjoy doing it :)
Date: 8/31/2018 3:40:00 PM
Impressed beyond words with this, I'm sure Line will use it!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 8/31/2018 7:21:00 PM
Thank you Michelle!
Date: 8/30/2018 3:00:00 PM
Hello Nina this must be hard to write a poem like this. A great poem.I like this poem. Have a nice day my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/31/2018 5:08:00 PM
It was hard but you nailed it.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 8/30/2018 3:02:00 PM
Thank you Darlene - yes it was a very tricky challenge!
Date: 8/29/2018 1:45:00 PM
Wow, I know that wasn't easy to do but you sure made it look that way. Bravo. You did a fantastic job with this. Much luck in the contest
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 8/29/2018 2:57:00 PM
Thank you very much Chris, yes I won’t lie, it was really hard!! But fun! I want to do it again! (When I’ve had a lie down)