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Tell her you saw me ... Tell her I was out on the bluff at the Cape During a gale, much too close to the rocks. Tell her the surf was tormenting the ledges, Its roar far too loud for me to hear you call, The salt-spray too heavy to see you waving, But nonetheless I turned and looked at you, And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... You were in the highlands of Rwanda in June, There to do your outreach work for "the cause". You had stepped into a clearing on a hill crest, And you glanced across the valley's expanse Just in time to see me slip into the jungle mist. You were certain I had waved my Akubra at you, The way I used to across the quad at Cambridge, And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... You were on a mission for the Megalakes Project, Camping with a British-supplied band of Bedouin. It was a perfect Moroccan evening, save for chill. You had finished supper and were smoking with The tribal leaders in the sheikh's tent, conversing, A Jeep went past and you glanced up just in time To see me ride by with an envoy ... I smiled at you, And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... You were servicing sonar buoys for the U.S. Navy In the South Pacific, stationed in Tutuila, Samoa, But were enjoying a long weekend with friends, Scuba diving and spear-fishing along the reef ... You poked your head above water to check on Your mates, and an outrigger went past just off The breakwater, me and two Polynesian women. I Yelled but you couldn't hear, so you waved at me, And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... Tell her I was above base camp, at around 18K ... You were flying up with the company to take pics Of the Khumbu Icefalls, and I was alone, headed up To Camp One ... I had stopped to take photos of the Glacier myself, and you recognized the scarf I had Wrapped around my outer down suit, as it was the Same one she had given me at the Running of the Bulls ... you fired a flare in my direction and I was Just close enough to see your platinum hair through The copter's bubble. A squall came up as I waved, And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... Tell her I was at the Essence Festival in Durban, but I was too far to hear your call and was lost in the crowd. Tell her you saw me in the gondola in Rio, during Carnaval, I was going down as you were headed up to Sugarloaf ... You tried to get my attention, but I was busy talking ... Tell her you saw me in Mexico City at Día de los Muertos, or Tell her I was at Deepavaali in Bangalore, dancing among The lanterns with an Indian girl ... Tell her you saw me ... Tell her you saw me at La Tomatina in Buñol, covered in Tomatoes and laughing ... tell her I was at Mardi Gras, Or the America's Cup, or in the throng at Antigua during Semana Santa ... tell her I was living it up in Kawasaki At Kanamara Matsuri, or that you saw me land-diving On Vanuatu, or free-climbing the Burj Khalifa in Dubai, Or hang-gliding off the Dover Cliffs with an Irish beauty ... And then ... I was gone. Tell her you saw me ... Tell her you saw me ... ANYwhere but here, sad ... alone ... Tell her any lie or story or concoction you care to dream up, Just don't tell her the truth, or the sorry fact that I have yet To even kiss another pair of lips, or fit my hand to another's, Or dive deep the inky substance of another woman's eyes ... Or even care to hear another voice whisper, warm, my name ... Tell her anything you wish, ANYthing but that ... anything ... At all.

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Date: 7/13/2017 6:33:00 AM
Hey Greg I was just thinking this would be perfect for the exotic contest, I know Debbie would love this one!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/15/2017 1:49:00 AM
Thank you, Buddy, you've always got my back ... I appreciate it so very much! Hope I can return the favor some day! ;-)
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John Hamilton
Date: 7/14/2017 12:07:00 PM
Just read desert blossom again, probably your best bet after all!
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John Hamilton
Date: 7/14/2017 12:02:00 PM
Yes it's allowed, go to your manage contest entries go to contest entered, click delete poem, go back and re-enter with another. Your desert rose is good too, I didn't know you entered one, just an idea, go with your gut!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/13/2017 9:34:00 PM
Thanks, my friend, but I already entered "Desert Blossom" in that contest ... do you think this would be better - should I change it out?? (I think that's allowed, isn't it?)
Date: 7/12/2017 9:50:00 AM
Excellent and profound. You have that unique skill of beating the peak. This is a wonderful stuff, always beating our expectation. Can wait to jump to your next page.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Funom, very much appreciated! :-)
Date: 7/11/2017 10:22:00 AM
Wow Greg, that's an amazing poem.... Captivating from the very first verse to the last one. It ended in such a sad way, that I wished I'd read them all but the last stanza... Beautiful my friend, stunning.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:20:00 PM
Thanks so much, Dear Friend, I am extremely happy that you liked this one ... I felt like it required too much effort, (that it didn't "flow" like some do), but I think that's just the way it goes sometimes, and we have to stay open to wherever the energy takes us. Appreciate it, Buddy!
Date: 7/11/2017 9:45:00 AM
Oh wow, swept me away this one. Incredible write! xomo
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:18:00 PM
Thank you so very kindly, Maureen - your opinion is one I value highly, my friend! :-)
Date: 7/11/2017 9:35:00 AM
Wow Greg, and I thought I knew the world, either you are also a globetrotter, or you do a lot of research for your poems, either way this is stunning and captivating!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:17:00 PM
Thanks, John, very much ... I sometimes work for the Emir of Dubai, and it affords me some rather amazing experiences, (and travel on a private jet, haha!). I am blessed and humbled by his vision and kindness. I'll tell you more about it sometime ... glad you enjoyed this!
Date: 7/11/2017 7:37:00 AM
Woohoo, Greg, what a sad poem in such a light vein! You're amazing:)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:15:00 PM
That's very kind of you to say, Jo - very glad you liked this one! :-)
Date: 7/11/2017 4:23:00 AM
Great poem!
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:14:00 PM
Thank you so very much - greatly appreciated!
Date: 7/11/2017 3:48:00 AM
Best hat out the Akubras! This was a wonderful write, Greg! I thoroughly enjoyed the read! A great display of global knowledge! Nicely done
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 7/12/2017 8:14:00 PM
Thank you, W2, I greatly appreciate that ... this was a lot of work. Some poems flow, some poems grind, (as you know), and this was a grind. Not saying that's a bad thing, just that it required a lot more investment, for whatever reasons. :-)