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This is an attempt to write a sonnet using Iambic Pentameter. I welcome all constructive critique and corrections regarding the meter and the content of the poem in general.

SONNET – SEASONS GRACE

The hem of nature floats as seasons blend
with winter’s lasting days now lost and spent,
as endless summer frozen shadows mend
without the youthful feelings of lament.
In distant land where future dreams ascend
beneath the southern sky of golden light,
by heaven‘s gift a love of life transcends
on landscapes tranquil beauty’s kind delight.
As graceful night unfolds its cast on day
with morning dew of many coloured hues,
and sunrise magic cuddles shoreline's bay,
the warmth of life another love renews.

With fervor I adore the seasons grace,
as nature's peaceful fairness I embrace.


T.J Grén
18th June, 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/25/2018 11:24:00 AM
Beautiful!
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Date: 7/26/2018 12:51:00 PM
Thank you very much, Alycia. T.J
Date: 11/30/2017 7:28:00 PM
I am not an expert on Iambic Pentameter, but I want to say that this poem is excellent and very well written. The imagery is beautiful and graceful; the transitions between lines are smooth and exact. Excellent!
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Date: 11/30/2017 11:59:00 PM
Thank you very much for kind and uplifting comments, Gracie. Much appreciated. T.J
Date: 3/18/2017 7:58:00 PM
Hi T.J. How serene your sonnet of nature my friend. An excellent write as always. I love getting lost within the words and the images. As always, i come here expecting excellence and that is what i behold. I find peace within this write T.J. This has to be a seven and a fave. Your friend....Mike.
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Date: 3/20/2017 12:20:00 PM
Thank you again for your support and kindness, Mike. Very much appreciated. T.J
Date: 3/9/2017 6:57:00 PM
Wonderful verse Teppo. Beautiful flow and balance. An excellent read. Bravo. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/22/2016 12:17:00 AM
A MASTERPIECE!!! I am adding this to my favorite list. Elaine
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Date: 9/30/2016 5:55:00 PM
I enjoy the change of earth myself...nice.
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Date: 9/6/2016 9:05:00 PM
beautiful sonnet, T.J., love the read and the imagery Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/6/2016 1:29:00 PM
Tranquility and peacefulness at the waters edge. Ty for bringing me there TJ.
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Date: 9/6/2016 9:34:00 AM
Hey, this one slipped by me and my kayak. Nicely done. I pictured the loons on the lake at daybreak....beautiful write TJ
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Date: 8/31/2016 11:48:00 AM
Beautiful descriptive lines - particularly "As graceful night unfolds its case on day". Nicely done.
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Teppo Gren
Date: 9/1/2016 7:06:00 AM
Thank you very much, Beverly. I appreciate your visits and support. T.J
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Date: 8/31/2016 11:48:00 AM
cast - sorry for the typo.
Date: 8/3/2016 8:12:00 AM
SO beautiful! This is how I imagine the feeling of summer and the nature of countries far away... that's beautiful, I'll have to read it again when I'm on vacation to relive the magic of it xx Julie
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Date: 8/3/2016 11:19:00 PM
Thank you very much, Julie. This sonnet reflects my vision of nature as we migrated from Finland to Australia in 1968 when I was 12 years old. The picture is of a beach nearby a town named Wollongong in New South Wales, Australia, where we lived in a migrant hostel for our first 10 months in the country. Enjoy your vacation, Julie. T.J
Date: 7/27/2016 8:48:00 AM
Oh, Teppo - Two things: I adore this poem's content and am wowed by the imagery, just gorgeous and, second - how did you get the name Teppo? Is there a story? Is Tep pronounced like 'rep'? and po like 'go'? I will come back and see if you tell me! This is going into my favorites for it captured imagery I have struggled to express and I love the read ... CayCay 7
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/27/2016 11:23:00 AM
Thank you very much for your lovely comments, CayCay. Teppo is my given name at birth. It is a Finnish name. Not all that common even here in Finland. It is pronounced they way you said. Rep and go. T.J
Date: 7/25/2016 12:40:00 PM
This sonnet is beautifully composed Teppo. My favorite subject to extol...nature and the seasons. 7 ; )
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Date: 7/25/2016 12:52:00 PM
Thank you very much, Connie. I love nature and seasons. T.J
Date: 7/22/2016 4:55:00 PM
Teppo, Very outstanding write. Total poem is enriched with literature. Loved it..........//:) hugs
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Date: 7/23/2016 1:39:00 PM
Thank you very much, Manmath. T.J
Date: 7/21/2016 6:35:00 AM
Very beautiful, Teppo; you are an outstanding poet!
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Date: 7/22/2016 1:53:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind and encouraging comment, Joe. T.J
Date: 7/20/2016 7:56:00 AM
wonderful poem...words are just dancing on the floor of amazing thoughts ..loved the art of writing.
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:17:00 AM
Thank you very much for your visit and kind comments, Nilima. T.J
Date: 7/20/2016 5:40:00 AM
Hi Teppo. I like the first half of the poem more but it is fully restored by the last two lines. The tone is what struck me most.lovely tranquil uplifting certainly. The success is that you embraced nature's essence and worded it with such grace
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:17:00 AM
Thank you so much for your lovely comments, Jannie. Very much appreciated. T.J
Date: 7/19/2016 8:25:00 AM
It has good flow and rhyme..I do not see a turn though but I could be missing it..My thought process is not as good as it once was..Enjoyed reading it..It helps me for a sonnet to be divided into the stanzas so it is easier for me to read but of course most are not done that way..Thanks for the visits to my page...Sara
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:16:00 AM
Thank you very much for your feedback, Sara. Much appreciated. Originally I did split my sonnets into stanzas - it does make it easier to read. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 9:42:00 PM
Lovely writing. Truly beautiful work!
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Date: 7/21/2016 2:14:00 AM
Thank you very much, Joe. I appreciate your visit and comment. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 9:02:00 PM
Really beautiful my friend. I love a good sonnet and you have become a real master at this. Loved it. God Bless, JB
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Date: 7/21/2016 2:13:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind and supportive comments, Judy. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 8:56:00 PM
I truly enjoyed this soft flowing and charming poetry xoxoxo peace and love
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Date: 7/21/2016 2:12:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Aurore. Hugs. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 2:20:00 PM
TJ, lovely poem for a first attempt.. i was wondering if you want to put an action word in line 1...' the hem of nature floats'.. just my two cents... otherwise, wow!..huggs
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:11:00 AM
Thank you very much for your feedback, Nette. Your suggestion is great- a made the change to line one. Thanks and hugs. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 11:16:00 AM
You have done a very good job, Teppo; a beautiful sonnet in which imagery plays an important part. [If I were to nitpick I would mention the word 'heal' in 4th line...the way the accent falls, it sounds like 'hill'.] Apart from that a 7+ goes your way! Regards // paul
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:09:00 AM
Thank you very much for your feedback, Paul. I did make couple of changes - changed line 4 to read "without" instead of "to heal", and line one according to Nette's suggestion. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 9:41:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful and enchanting, Teppo. Your paintbrush of words presented a lovely painting right before my eyes. Good to see you back after your holiday. 7 Sandra
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Teppo Gren
Date: 7/21/2016 2:07:00 AM
Thank you very much, Sandra. It's great to be back after a wonderful holiday. T.J
Date: 7/18/2016 2:29:00 AM
I so agree with Nette Onclaud below this is quite a delightful read to one's mind and eyes. You use to know a friend of mine; Melody Thomas, she actually told me to give poetry soup a try so here I am for a little while I hope... E.L.
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Date: 7/18/2016 3:25:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Elizabeth. Convey my best wishes to Melody. I thoroughly enjoyed reading her wonderful poetry. I hope you will stay with us a lot longer than a little while. This is a wonderful site. T.J
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