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This is my first attempt at writing a Villanelle and venture outside of my comfort zone - sonnets. I wrote my previous post, “A Tale of Darkened Dust”, a sonnet, with this Villanelle in mind and hence the similarities and same lines in both poems.

DEEPEST SENSES PLAY WITH EAGER LUST

My dreams became a tale of darkened dust
with sinful charms abused by woeful lies
as deepest senses play with eager lust.

The trust in love by endless fate encrust
with scars to heal through wails of silent cries
my dreams became a tale of darkened dust.

The stain of  false affections broke my trust
and cast a shadow on my downcast eyes
as deepest senses play with eager lust.

Though burning flames of raging love unjust
Adrift in hapless search of hidden why’s
my dreams became a tale of darkened dust.

Alone without a warm embrace I must
withstand the epic pain of secret sighs
as deepest senses play with eager lust.

As if a dagger through my heart is thrust
a dream so real is chained in loves demise.
My dreams became a tale of darkened dust
as deepest senses play with eager lust.


21st November, 2017
T.J Grén

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 8/1/2018 10:40:00 PM
So touching to the deep sadness write, Teppo! Best inspirations to you
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Date: 8/7/2018 8:03:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind comments, Valentina. T.J
Date: 6/27/2018 6:13:00 PM
A very poignant piece my friend. Being out of your comfort zone doesn't seem to be affecting your ability one bit. Impressive. God Bless, JB
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Date: 6/28/2018 1:27:00 AM
Thank you very much, Judy. Appreciated. T.J
Date: 6/25/2018 8:23:00 PM
So many emotions tangle through this, and I am in awe. It holds darkness beyond the light, yet love can break any chain. ~ Maia
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Date: 6/25/2018 11:43:00 PM
Thank you very much for your lovely comments, Maia. This was an interesting and diificult write. This my first poem in Villanelle form and I found it quite difficult. T.J
Date: 6/10/2018 4:03:00 PM
Out of your " comfort zone", you are outshining as ever amazing with words, imagery and genuine feelings! You are beautifying darkness, rage, lies, pain, cries, sighs.. A challenging write.. A great enjoyment to read.. Thank you for sharing.. Stay blessed Teppo.
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Date: 6/11/2018 2:18:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind words, Besma. I found the Villanelle form quite challenging. T.J
Date: 6/9/2018 9:00:00 PM
Each line is knitted together like a fine sweater leaving the reader warm and emotional. A great success!
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Date: 6/5/2018 6:37:00 PM
Excellent Villanelle, Teppo: My compliments indeed!
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Date: 6/6/2018 10:55:00 PM
Thank you very much, Ralph. Appreciated. T.J
Date: 6/5/2018 4:03:00 AM
Very interesting tale you've woven with this form, Teppo. One wonders and wants to know more...I don't write in this form that often, though it has its own charm. Thanks for your visit to my poem.
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Date: 6/6/2018 10:55:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind comments and visit, Eileen. T.J
Date: 6/4/2018 7:30:00 AM
Hello TJ, Superb Work!! I'm very glad I dropped by to take a read of your Villanelle. I've written some of these, to include some themes in the Terzanelle format, and plan to do more for my second book. You have executed this challenging format most excellently. I've found there are certain themes suited to formats like the Villanelle and Terzanelle, just like there are for Sonnets, Canzones, and other differing formats. I also really enjoyed the theme for this poem!! Marvelous!! A FAVE. Best, Gary
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Date: 6/5/2018 12:36:00 AM
Thank you very much for your visit and comments, Gary. I did find the Villanelle form quite challenging. T.J
Date: 4/20/2018 1:16:00 AM
Beautiful. New comfort zone in Villanelle? I am glad that you are back writing. Welcome again and many wishes to you, Kai
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Date: 4/8/2018 1:57:00 AM
Simply excellent. It touched my heart. best Wishes always.
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Date: 4/8/2018 6:20:00 AM
Thank you so much, Anisha. Much appreciated. T.J
Date: 3/6/2018 8:43:00 AM
Hi T'J', as always, it is an honour to read your poetry my friend. As always, you put before us songs so supreme. This is an exceptional Villanelle. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 2/24/2018 4:07:00 PM
Hi Teppo Gren, Wonderful poem, but I read it like a song. You are the poets poet!
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Date: 1/27/2018 8:50:00 PM
Teppo, I would never know this was your first poem in this form as it flows so smoothly with rhythm, rhyme and deep emotion. I love repetition in poetry if done well, and you my friend, have done this very well indeed. Beautiful melancholy! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/14/2018 4:26:00 PM
T.J., sometimes it takes the brightest of lights to burn away the lingering shadows laid by a lifetime of the many human relationships we fordge with others' unbeknownced underlying reasons. Your form is beautiful. Peace, Jill:)
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Date: 12/20/2017 7:29:00 AM
TJ, a beauty, well written and very expressive.
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Date: 12/21/2017 4:03:00 AM
Thank you, James. T.J
Date: 11/23/2017 1:46:00 AM
Hi TJ, I can't tell this is your first time writing a Villanelle. It is written so well and it compliment the sonnette you wrote very well. You expressed an eager "lust" well. I look forward to seeing more Villanelle's from you in the future:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/23/2017 4:31:00 AM
Thank you very much for your kind words and support, Alexis. Always greatly appreciated. T.J
Date: 11/22/2017 2:54:00 PM
This is a well done villanelle. Enjoyed the lines of raging lust.
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Date: 11/23/2017 4:29:00 AM
Thank you very much for your visit and comments, Janis. Appreciated. T.J
Date: 11/22/2017 9:20:00 AM
You have worked wonders with this your first attempt of this form, Teppo! I like the smooth flow of each line, and the emotions which seep out of it. Regards // paul
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Date: 11/22/2017 1:22:00 PM
Thank you very much for your words of support, Paul. Appreciated. T.J
Date: 11/22/2017 7:39:00 AM
Superbly done my friend...welcome back Teppo...you haven't lost your touch...and a villanelle too...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 11/22/2017 1:20:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind words and visit to read my poem, WW. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 11:01:00 PM
This Teppo is beautiful poetry, and a fav for me!
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Date: 11/22/2017 2:34:00 AM
Thank you very much, Arthur. Greatly appreciated. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 4:03:00 PM
Gorgeous piece that is very seductive.
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Date: 11/22/2017 2:34:00 AM
Thank you, Richard. Appreciated. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 12:34:00 PM
Wow!!! Magnificent write, Teppo.. enjoyed reading.. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 11/21/2017 12:37:00 PM
Thank you so much, Eve. Hugs. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 12:12:00 PM
Wow beautiful poem Teppo there is so much of pain in the words that you shared
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Date: 11/21/2017 12:20:00 PM
Thank you so much for your lovely comments and a visit to read my poem, Fatima. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 10:55:00 AM
Well-written, intensely emotional, and moving, Teppo! Janice
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Date: 11/21/2017 11:39:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments and visit, Janice. T.J
Date: 11/21/2017 10:29:00 AM
a path traveled by many a poet as if it needed to play out to satisfy the emotional turmoil from an artist's heart...glad to see you are posting again
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Date: 11/21/2017 10:38:00 AM
Thank you very much, Frederic. Your visit is always much appreciated. T.J
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