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A Dab of Secrecy

Would we survive if you could hear
Me thinking? Maybe not, I fear
For what we lock away
Is as important as the things we say
And pure, relentless honesty
Is not a panacea. 
We are we because the secret glue
Of things I do not say to you
Holds tightly all the things I choose
To share. And should we ever lose
That blissful dab of secrecy
That sprinkle of duplicity, 
That keeps your inner world from me,
And mine from you - one blink 
And we‘d be through I swear,
Or worse, we’d sink...
Weighed down by things we dare not think.
 


28 September 2018
Written for Brian Strand’s Contest No 500

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 9/28/2018 11:25:00 PM
So flowing, so insightful, so alluring, so provocative, so simply unforgettable, especially that haunting last line-
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/29/2018 12:56:00 AM
Thank you Michelle. Yes, just imagine if people could hear everything you thought... aaaagh!
Date: 9/28/2018 9:45:00 PM
by the way, where is your 123 321 stuff? Is it under haiku?? I did not see recent haiku written by you. I was surprised you never heard of whippoorwill!
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/29/2018 12:56:00 AM
I haven’t posted it yet (or may not ever because I’m not happy with it as it is!) but thank you for looking! Just checked and the whippoorwill is a purely North American birdie!
Date: 9/28/2018 9:44:00 PM
Nina, this is SO good and it's so true (how do you think I stayed married 43 years. hahaha)
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/29/2018 12:52:00 AM
Wow, I’ve only done 9 years so far so there’s a whole load of lip-buttoning still to come! Thanks Andrea!
Date: 9/28/2018 3:41:00 PM
Superbly done, Nina. A wonderful tribute to that special thing called FILTER. This is such a fundamentally unacknowledged truth that I have to FAVE it.
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/28/2018 3:49:00 PM
Thank you so much Line and thank you for the fave! I get very annoyed by people who praise the virtue of their own honesty when actually... they’re just being rude!
Date: 9/28/2018 3:04:00 PM
This is incredible, Nina! So deep, insightful, and frighteningly TRUE! (I have a hard enough time living in my head- I can't imagine how my husband, friends, etc... would react to the crazy mess of my everyday thoughts)... Wonderful work on this piece, definitely a winner in my book (and a FAV)!
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Rhona McFerran
Date: 9/28/2018 8:11:00 PM
Hahaha! That's the ticket, girl- keep 'em guessing! ;D
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/28/2018 3:11:00 PM
Ah, thank you so much Rhona! Maybe there are super sensible and logical people out there who wouldn’t mind other people (their partner even) knowing their thoughts but obviously it’s neither you nor me! That’s why poetry’s great - Sometimes i write about things I only imagine I’m thinking/feeling which I guess throws people off the scent of the weird stuff I’m actually thinking!!
Date: 9/28/2018 2:00:00 PM
Love this one Nina, in our world within we can think and do as we please. We are never wrong, we can put on an outward smile but within we can tell people what we really think, and the best of it is they'll never know. The day they read peoples minds is the day we shut up lol. Tom
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/28/2018 3:02:00 PM
Very true! Thank God most of us (with many notable exceptions!) have learnt to hold what we say in check! Thanks Tom :-)
Date: 9/28/2018 1:16:00 PM
Very wise words, Nina!!! What a great write. I really enjoyed Happy Friday xxoo
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Nina Parmenter
Date: 9/28/2018 3:03:00 PM
Thank you Mike! Happy Friday to you too!