Redrawn Poems | Examples

Premium Member Problem Solved

I'm teasing my favorite commenter (you know who you are) - lol!

My friends told me I'm not quite right. 
So, I saw a doctor for some insight. 
The doctor, at first, could only doubt it,
"I don't know how you live without it. 
Medical science must be redrawn -
your personality is gone."

Part 2 Or In Other Words A Final Copy

Salt a gin and tonic,
It’s too dry. 
Assault my temple with sin, 
Be honest, 
You like the rye. 
Look me in my honest eye, 
Conversations with myself are the fondest, 
Because no one understands me better when I rhyme. 
Took a pen and across the paper it slides, 
Scribble out the oddest lines. 
Apply pressure to the page, 
Trickle out ink until the pen has died. 
Wet ink is promised to eventually dry, 
But tomorrow isn’t promised, 
For some reason I can’t help but question why?
After four portions of Moët fine wine,
I tend to think of life as if it’s all just a waste of time.
If tomorrow could be withdrawn then what’s the point of the “grand design”?
If tomorrow I wake up past dawn, 
Should I consider myself only one step closer to dying? 
Don’t overstep, 
The temple has redrawn the walls and implores you to walk within the lines. 

It’s not perfect, 
But nothing’s wrong with second best. 
When it stops hurting, 
In comes walking Sudden Death. 
We can’t always be our very best, 
Attempting perfect, 
It feels like burning, 
The scars left behind showcase regret.

Premium Member The Circle Redrawn

Bright summer flowers, wilt and die
Cold autumn rains, fall from the sky
My heart beats out a knowing sigh
The circle of life, the blink of an eye

One by one, I admired them all
The seasonal flowers, large and small
The beauty they brought is what I recall
As I look back to spring from fall

A lifetime in flowers, spring colors, sweet dew
The roses of summer, the thorns they accrue
Fall has the purples, the pinks and the blues
Now winter brings death to all but a few 

The days of summer have come and gone
The sun loses warmth and nature moves on
Should I fall asleep and not see the dawn
Life will continue, the circle redrawn


                     Daniel Turner
                      Sandra Weiss


This is what you're about to read

Of course it's being judged, why expect anything less.
Comes down to discernment between comfort and distress.
Biases are natural, otherwise we'd all be dead.
So logically you'll instantly judge everything you've read.
So read this and then think again, with new mind reborn.
As semblances of story surface, with plot lines redrawn.
Subtly steering focus from the objective given.
Then suddenly reminding you to judge what has been written.

Working the Land

The estate of my spreading life
has been plowed over many times.
Plantations have withered and been replanted,
grain fields have turned to dust,
have laid fallow for years
yet now the corn is high and golden again,
trees felled and burnt now grow tall.

Mind body and spirit maps
have had to be redrawn,
shorelines and boundaries moved.
However now I can walk my mind back into past times
and circle all the seasons of my existence
at once.
Barn doors are wide open to tomorrow lands,
My earth is still rich and good,
my store runneth over.

I am not the master here, just a worker following
a tilling, plowing, and seeding Owner;
I am charged only to oversee
this landscape of me.

When this soil I have worked
at last is blown away on the winds of time
a plantation of plenty
will be reflected in the mirror of eternity,
and I will be a servant of my most High Self
at home once more in my Master's mansion.

After the Funeral

The town lost its street maps,
new plots of land appeared, houses were built
where just yesterday there had been none.
Her world seemed relocated,
changed, as if it had been redrawn.

They had not shared their likes or interests
they had not even shared an equitable life,
and at times had pawned and reclaimed each other,
negotiations and currency
always a part of an unwritten deal.

Now she understood how landscapes can change
minds see from their own windows
through different lenses.

She recalled with late regret
that each of them had not surrendered,
they coexisted in the same place
but a locality riddled with mirages,
scenes they mind-painted
with unseeing eyes.


Premium Member Good Writing Sings

Good writing sings and always brings  
a sense of clarity and coherence, 
out of chaos, strife, and cloudy nights 
for those with perseverance. 

Good writing brings laughter, sends smiles to the rafters
and can take us to places unknown,
like Venus, Mars and innumerable stars
and give comfort when we're all alone.

Good writing makes a mind keep trying 
to figure out the next chapter,
around the bend where time suspends 
while pondering things that matter. 

But good writing doesn't always end 
where its author thought it should,
as oftentimes we lose ourselves
walking in the woods.

Good writing can save a sinking soul
from drowning in crashing waves,
and make a new start with a brand-new heart
redrawn, a new dawn, a new day.

And good writing wins again and again
when it lands on somebody's shore,
where they're lying around with their feet on the ground
and finally found
what they're looking for.

Premium Member Bliss Energisation

To enter silence, mind-body withdrawn,
awareness poised in the void of stillness,
we sense within, pranic gridlines redrawn,
manifest as rapture of blissfulness;
currents divine in dance of playfulness.
Heart’s the centre, where energies converge,
each node of form celebrating bliss surge,
resonation with cosmic vibration, 
melding head with heart, as with love we merge,
gripping presence in vibrant elation.

27-March-2022

In Theory of Memory I

Days are sharp as memories pass 
As the idle thunder attest 
to storms of unsettled wrath. 

They gather together on the opaque horizons.

The engines of the highway HUMM 
and 
the grind with the heaviness of an iron heart
…eons-long!

Full of oily thoughts and rusted parts,
in memorium when machines ran 
by our hand only in the theory of history, Grand!

The city reeks of oblivion and abstract thoughts…

Infinities' echos were sharp redrawn imagery…

Antiquated days nestled in idol thunder!

of tomorrow’s memories…ALL
In the theory of memory

Now all color is 
…is the color of embers 
As we rust like echos that pass 
into the wasted days, abstract!

In theory of memory…
               Only the bitter last!

Valentine's Day Always Found Me Aquiver 2nd Heartfelt Hug

at the growing flock
including male friends relatives,
minus yours truly, whose presence,
would merely generate a yawn,
though even a distinct black swan
received royal carpet treatment
particularly one named Shawn
encompassing another honorable guest

with illustrious surname Rawn
guests underwritten by Cupid,
whose presence surreptitiously withdrawn
(invitations distributed widely explained,
just beak cuz gerrymandering redrawn)
even provoking deer interest
of stray doe eyed fawn
hence lacking bravado and brawn

this bird den some seedy,
yet dove out crow kissing Avocet
trundled off to parts unknown you bet
far from boys stir russ, raw cuss, diss cuss
ting clacking clique, and thus this solitary fret
full ostracized, rejected, unwanted egret,
who heron there experienced many a let

down, not simply because of stork disparity
with the Aves and havenots, 
but I never met
any other species so set
in their ways, hence off
on a wing and prayer
in search of other buoys and gulls,
whom this dodo bird they will coe vet!

Premium Member The New Year Angel

She walks in the forest with crumbs in her hand 
he swoops in for food and things,  "contraband " 
its a New Year of love a New Year of Hope 
and all the pines trees are trying to cope... 
Weighed down by the snow a snowman on gin   
wants  confetti for lunch with a mouthful of tin 

She douses the light on the darkness so tragic 
and all of a sudden we are clothed in magic 
no quandary nights all past demons are gone 
the Angel of Hope has designed and redrawn 
The weather is lovely from her to down under 
the brook gurgles softly with silence as thunder 

When the ball drops in town we all clap in cheer  
we're healthy once more like the Arlington deer 
She walks from the vineyard all full of pure joy  
the C words have died, thanks to Helen of Troy
Confetti is falling from a snowflake blue sky 
we're healthy once more and we're ready to fly

Premium Member Cyborgs of the Corn

Tapping into our neurons 
       where only brain cells should go 
       Past dreams mean nothing now 
        unconscious thoughts just flow 

          An abstract realm of reason
         touchpad signals unbeknown 
      Fires up, post-human imagination 
        our intelligence genes regrown 

          And so it's all written in code
          old commandments redrawn
          Binary replaces ancient Latin
          age of replicants has dawned 

         Interfaced with artificial reality
            and engaged to usb clones 
          We marry terabyte processors
          reproducing ten billion drones

       Reprogrammed ancient scriptures 
           floods overwhelm our homes
          Heaven and hell's using robots 
          I-God now accedes the throne 

  
By
David Kavanagh

Premium Member The Image In My Heart

The Image in My Heart

My specs are in my pocket, 
folded for now and safe.
My best…
perfect glasses. 
With four eyes, 
I can see…
just like a kid, again! 
Miracles are real. 

I can view the rainbow in the distance, 
God’s wonderful promise to All. 
I can gaze near as well, 
to view and truly see,
your face…
your kind face.

Yet,
every wrinkle, they are missing. 
every flaw; they are not there. 
I can only see the lines,
and soft touches, 
brushes with destiny, 
colored by faith. 

Time has drawn…
and redrawn every part, 
over all the years, 
that connect us, 
and keep us…
near to each other, 
and even closer to Him. 

You are truly beautiful to me!

Premium Member Conversation With My Soul

Dwell not, O soul, on yesterday, 
  on sorrows past and gone -
the sketch you drew so long ago, 
  today may be redrawn.
Dwell not upon tomorrow's wars, 
  nor borrow from their pain -
that energy you need today 
  let not your worries drain.

Dwell not, O heart, on failures past 
  though each one left its scar -
rich lessons you have learned have forged 
  the person you now are.
Dwell not upon your victories, 
  for those shall also pass -
let not your pride construct a shrine 
  to trophies made of glass.

Dwell not, O soul, on others' gain 
  nor envy those with much -
contentment, paired with gratitude, 
  brings peace no wealth can touch.
Dwell not on anyone's downfall 
  as though it lifted up
your own estate; we're siblings all 
  and drink from the same cup.

So what is left, O soul - where does
  the prudent soul pay heed?
Become less of a taker
  always give to those in need.
Which seeds are we to plant
   upon this plot of ground we plow?
Sow seeds of love, be brave, and dwell 
  in the eternal now.


Written 6 Dec 2020

The Blot

His ribcage rushed to fill a new birthed space.
The night had been a barrel of dark dreams,
yet despite this other demanding cosmos of himself,
the daylight brought hope.

Riding unhindered by personal perspective
he relaxed as the bus took him
to a world where lovers
wrote themselves into a fantasy
that bloomed into existence once imagined.
 
Marveling as one silent, yet singing page 
turned another, marveling at the land
that flowered with the voices of a redrawn past,
(for all days now were turning perfectly).                                             Almost…
for he now noticed a blot, a small imperfect blot 
in the far corner of a blue sky.

At that instant all the riders,
all the watchers, and all the watched
noticed the blemish.

The bus screeched to a halt.
People hurried to get off the vehicle
as if terrified of staying, 
and yet terrified of leaving.

His heart thudded deeply.
His ribcage began to shrink
as he found himself rolling
over and over again inside the ribcage 
of a dreaming whale.

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