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Deborah Guzzi writes full time. Her third book, The Hurricane is available through Prolific Press. https://prolificpress.com/bookstore/prolific-books-c-12/the-hurricane-by-deborah-guzzi-p-151.html Her poetry appears in Allegro, Artificium, Shooter, & The Foxglove Journal in the UK, Subterranean Blue, Existere, The Ekphrastic Review, Scarlet Leaf Review & Subterranean Blue Poetry, Canada - Tincture, Australia - mgv2>publishing, France Cha: Asian Review, China - Vine Leaves Literary Journal, Australia - The Scarlet Leaf Review - Greece, Ribbons, pioneertown, Sounding Review, Bacopa Literary Review, The Aurorean, Liquid Imagination, The Tishman Review, Page & Spine & others in the USA. 


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Blog Posted:1/21/2014 8:50:00 PM
Crown of Sonnets, 7 will be picked to win in the contest, seven that fit the best together. 

It is a 7-sonnet sequence in which

the last line of each sonnet is repeated in the first line of the next.

The first line is repeated as the last line of the 7th. sonnet;
this gives the sequence its crown-like circularity.
 
These will be MODERN SONNETS, 14 lines, 10 syllables per line

 abab cdcd efef gg/ I want flow but strict meter is not necessary.




* means they said they'd try for us [we'll try 3 at a time & pick which one works best then move one] blend your writing style with Caleb's. REMEMBER big boy & girl pant
  1. Eileen Ghali * Sarah Kendrick*Dane Ann Smith Johnson* 7
  2. Carrie Richards *6 Joyce Johnson * 6 Andrea Dietrich* 6
  3. Caleb Smith * #1
  4. Craig Cornish *4 The Scribe *4 Mark Peterson *4
  5. Charles Henderson #2 David Williams * #2
  6. Catie Lindsey * #3 Nette Onclaud *#3 Jim Goff #3
  7. Isaiah Zerbst*5 Roy Jerden* 5 Ruben O*Kelly Deschler 5 * binibinig P. .iNk  

As you say YES you will be given a number, the poetry is to be read sequentially
ONLY 7 people will win and all of those 7 will get a first place.  

Stone in the Cold

By Caleb Smith


#1
 

 Through darkness I come with a stealthy hand,
who but a man shadowed could be so bold?
My eyes hunt take a reckoning of the land,
look into the hollows, constant and cold.

My companion solitude, still as stone,
I am the seeker of winds, and of scent.
By the trees yonder, I wait not  alone;
my aim is true, and my purpose unbent.

Yet, death does not bring a smile to my lips,
nor a lift unto this wayfaring heart;
in grief I am fed, from  silence I sip,
and from the old wood, I shall never part.

The hunt will remain for those who pursue,
a  life that no death could ever undo.

#2 selection C. H. 

A life that no death could ever undo,
for there are portals I've yet to find.
Hidden life in the green I wish to pursue,
oh, the secrets of life and death entwine.  

I search and search, I will know no defeat.
Each corner turned will find new paths to tread.
The deer or the bear, the fox that I meet
will reveal the secrets of life not death.

So, let the wood talk, hear what it reveals.
Riddle its meanings there to be understood.
The less armor worn, we brandish or wield,
higher truth follows our message of good.

Come into the woods as in days of youth,
we still face the test of absolute truth.

 #3 of 3 J. G.

We still face the test of absolute truth,
the nights coming fast, I travel unheard.
The reverence I feel, was born in youth,
tempered by sage, burnt offerings for birds.

Tormented by brambles whose thorns I collect
I come to remains of struggles long gone,
feathers and crushed bone, on these I reflect.
I'm hoping once more, my arms are still strong.

A pine marten scurries, close to my step,
the sweet scent of birch gum, his claws unearth.
My arrow's still sheathed, for creeks I have leapt.
I have grown cold, but my spirit rebirthed.

Tracks at the creek, the water I savor
the brush moves, my aim does not waver. 

#4 Marlon

The brush moves, my aim does not waver
Exhaling calm's breath, which merge with the wind
Breeding bellow lures hunt in my favor
Striking gold adjacent to its front limb

My ears navigate towards death's language
The soul's soliloquies sung by the stag
Look into its eyes, buck-knives cure anguish
Table blessings spoil if hunters lag

Blood seasons the arrow for my taste buds
Delicacy offered by pure nature
Unaware of wolves pursuit to taste blood
My meal and I, are conjoined as flavor

Nature is the keeper of its wanted
When hunter is graced being hunted

 BUT the action/suspense must BE here- Sonnet 4 begins

BE VERY SENSORY STAY IN FIRST PERSON PRESENT TENSE

Line one verse 4

the brush moves, my aim does not waver. 

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Date: 1/30/2014 8:07:00 PM
I'll vote for the blizzard. Joyce
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Date: 1/29/2014 3:21:00 PM
marlin, line 2 first verse doesn't read exactly right. suggestion: the bow arches, death flies with the wind- - -It gets rid of a little "tontoism" in that line, also agrees with "arrow" in the last verse. Also making bellow plural (bellows) third line gets rid of tontoism there--------- (breeding bellows lure hunt in my favor) or you could just say "a breeding call lures hunt in my favor". hope this makes sense to you.
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Date: 1/28/2014 3:01:00 PM
Which is the numbered order we write in? The numbers before the names, or the ones after?
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Isaiah Zerbst
Date: 1/29/2014 12:30:00 AM
ok. Thanks.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 3:06:00 PM
you are writing the 5th jewel in the crown
Date: 1/28/2014 2:20:00 PM
Catie, Nette......love your sonnets! you both are amazing Women! Deb....if ya hike w/me....we identify wildflowers and document....also other wildlife and activity they are engaged in.....oh...we haiku! easy to do in the forest.....plants and animals (we never approach, let them come to us, or not) talk to us non-stop!....jimbo
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Date: 1/28/2014 1:19:00 PM
Debbie you should start another blog before this one disappears at the bottom....
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 3:21:00 PM
Roger thAT
Date: 1/28/2014 10:52:00 AM
Sorry that my post went missing about #3. This is a mystery. Have begun on #4, but I'm having a little trouble reconciling light and love with life and death night action and suspense. Comment?
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Mark Peterson
Date: 1/28/2014 12:09:00 PM
Ah, I see. In any event, I'm easily confused.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 11:37:00 AM
Light & Love is just my salutation it has nothing to do with the formation of your sonnet for #4 - sorry to have confused you
Date: 1/28/2014 10:40:00 AM
very much, my growth curve is cunningly accelerating, due to all you geniuses! seriously.....my eyes are opening wider with intricacies of this form....without looking or sounding.....fake....the right emotion and energy, balanced with brains......scary! jimbo
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/28/2014 1:03:00 PM
love the hint of agression in your sonnet, jimbo!.. amazing read!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 10:44:00 AM
aww you are a doll to take the emotional risk all of you, I have so often wished I was close to go into the wild walking with you
Date: 1/28/2014 8:46:00 AM
oh gosh, I guess I am too late. Came to vote on a third one. Maybe you could do a new blog each time you post the next three! So do the ones you are showing automatically have first place? Is that how it works?
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 8:52:00 AM
yes .. But everyone not chosen will get ranked separately - I think I will give one more 1 to the best sonnet in general not used in the crown then 2-5 no one so far has even done a sonnet I would rate less than 3!
Date: 1/28/2014 12:35:00 AM
they each have elements that together would be stunning but I realise they cannot be blended into one sonnet, so that said I would have to go for Jimbo's as an overall one....
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Painted Hunter
Date: 1/28/2014 7:25:00 AM
I agree with David. But I am loving all of them!...y'all are putting me right in my element here..haha. Hopefully I'll have some time today to be a little more active
Date: 1/27/2014 9:52:00 PM
I liked all three, but the one that seems to suit the subject best, the one that puts me in the bush, best shows me, is JG. Nette's original third verse is ART, perfect, have no idea why it was changed. My favourite for tone, language and flow is Catie's original. all fawn's come from a doe, so I don't get the change, why it was necessary? Now, JG, the edit, Line 2 needs a comma between fast and I. In line 11, I'd exchange the word "for" with "though" so as to drop one of the many commas. Line 13, could be altered to "The creek slakes thirst as water I savor," just an idea for purpose of flow. You guys are doing AWESOME. I'm still struggling with the subject, but loving the tone, loved
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 1/28/2014 9:33:00 AM
No explanation needed. I see why the changes were made, Bet.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/28/2014 7:25:00 AM
I'd explain the changes but we must push forward - The SUSPENSE is too low we must raise it.
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 1/27/2014 9:58:00 PM
seeing this develop. Good for you all! Awesome to see you co-writing, listening to each other... how cool are you guys, like the bards of ole, able to wax and wane with lines with no tankards slammed. xoxox to all
Date: 1/27/2014 3:15:00 PM
Ok Nette's second one, I like the content but it misses the flow here and there, but it is staying with the theme and the re-work is flowing much better but I prefer nette's 3rd stanza and last line, if they could be conjoined ????
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/27/2014 4:14:00 PM
great take on the 3rd stanza, david... be my guest!.. whooo, i don't want to compromise the mystery or reduce the tension before the climax unfolds... thanks!
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/27/2014 4:09:00 PM
yo!.. " hunger for prey claims my thirst harassed is figurative..".. the seeker has been hankering to hunt though he waits for the right time to aim at his game .." moose descends"--- from a high plane, it comes down and settles on grass... that's how in goes, folks... i had fun with this.. :)
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David Williams
Date: 1/27/2014 4:06:00 PM
as a new day dawns and refuse I seek... a silhouette rises its coat dew drenched... from behind a tree my prey takes a peek... a recoiling echo, my thirst is quenched
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David Williams
Date: 1/27/2014 4:02:00 PM
Nette's 3rd stanza.. as a new day dawns and refuse I seek a silhouette rises its coat dew drenched from behind a tree my prey takes a peek as a shot rings out and my thirst is quenched
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/27/2014 3:36:00 PM
hunger for prey claims my thirst harassed - its so unclear what she means ok he's hungry - what's a harassed thirst? & before that [range, a moose descends on grass] I see flying moose drifting down on parachutes? ;) give it a whack David show me?
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/27/2014 3:30:00 PM
I'll try?
Date: 1/27/2014 2:20:00 PM
Okies everyone you have 3 choses which have been mind melded into potential SONNET 3's PICK before Craig bites the bit into! Marlon may kick out the stall walls if we don't hurry up! LOL
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Date: 1/27/2014 1:00:00 AM
Outstanding job, Deb, to you and all of the writers. I can't wait to see the completed Crown of Sonnets.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/27/2014 8:53:00 AM
hey Carolyn! Nice to see you!
Date: 1/26/2014 9:14:00 PM
I'm sorry Debbie, maybe next time. For the record i was thrilled. Skat
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/27/2014 7:34:00 AM
no problem doesn't mean you can't give your opinions here, thanks for letting me know
Date: 1/26/2014 5:30:00 PM
I like your re-work, Deb!
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/27/2014 4:55:00 PM
i enjoyed your latest revision. jimbo...
Date: 1/26/2014 5:17:00 PM
just so this old redneck boy is not misunderstood, let me add. I am against hunting for anything unless the specie is endangered by overpopulation. Even if the specie is a pest, I feel it was made by a higher power than me and I have no right to completely irradicate. Unless we are talking abut fire ants, of course.
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Date: 1/26/2014 4:47:00 PM
JG- - -since is present tense you may need an "s" on rebirth.
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Date: 1/26/2014 4:35:00 PM
Nette: your question mark line 12-----you are right. The remark is not really practical- - -- -- -While horses lay on trees to yawn away - The horses would sleep standing up or simply lying on the ground-let’s change to- - - - - "While horses flick tails to keep flies away"- - - of course that would establish a season element into the poem and I don’t know whether that does or doesn’t make a difference to Deb
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/27/2014 1:44:00 PM
chas, lol... that was a real rough draft; can you imagine that horse!... i did 2nd one; hope it's better!... thanks!
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Charles Henderson
Date: 1/26/2014 5:03:00 PM
Or perhaps she can suggest another remedy.
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Charles Henderson
Date: 1/26/2014 5:02:00 PM
Well, we can just change to what I suggested but I want Nette to be happy with the change.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 4:43:00 PM
I put the ? Chas, and yes the horse thing throws me off too
Date: 1/26/2014 4:11:00 PM
Corrected....thanks guys!
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/26/2014 5:43:00 PM
That dern "auto drop deal" whatchacallit...dropped "trembles" below...not me!
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/26/2014 5:41:00 PM
I like deer mice! Mickey Mouse was a deer mouse! Did you know?...if you spot a deer mouse on the forest floor trembles it's good luck!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 5:27:00 PM
well they are eating cats here! so they are scary!
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Charles Henderson
Date: 1/26/2014 5:08:00 PM
careful Deb, coyote is an ugly word these days in SC. They are killing of all the baby deer. I think coyote are always in season for hunters.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 4:51:00 PM
why are you calling a mouse hon cam we call something else a moose? a deer? can you playfully mimic a coyote
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 4:47:00 PM
Jimbo we need scary critters to build tension wolfs howling, coyotes, raging mooses? meesess?
Date: 1/26/2014 4:03:00 PM
Gosh, those are all good...gonna be hard to pick one, eh Debbie? I connect with parts of all of them, but more so with Jimbo's, I think. I don't know if that's because I DO hunt with a long bow...might have something to do with it. Anyway, great job all of you.
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Date: 1/26/2014 3:29:00 PM
LOOK at what one MAGAZINE says-Contributors receive two copies of the issue in which their work appears and as much exposure as we can tastefully give them.All others will be thanked profusely for submitting and wished well.Please note: Some work, if not selected, will be made into paper airplanes or erotic origami (reserved for only the best work.)
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Date: 1/26/2014 3:07:00 PM
Deb, David is right...few lines of mine are off the correct count! Want me to fix?
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/26/2014 3:46:00 PM
Ok!.... give me a few minutes...I'm at a zombie party for my 8yr old grand nephew...brought my REAL zombie killer sword!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 3:10:00 PM
you can .. I like the leggings off too because Caleb would wear jeans & the verses before do not feel like last of the Mohegans [grin] no matter how much I drooled over Daniel Day Lewis?
Date: 1/26/2014 2:40:00 PM
OK now, TALK to me which one should I try to blend with the first two, who stayed in character? who strayed from character why? WHICH BUILT TENSION [I REALLY THINK THERE'S LITTLE SUSPENSE BUILDING - the noise in nette's last couplet is the closest to getting us spooked?]
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/27/2014 4:53:00 PM
with intent, i slowly built some rattling created a different settig to provide suspense leading to the climactic part...
Date: 1/26/2014 12:25:00 PM
Posted! "New Poems" Deb....some end words drop a line down...I use my android! All I own! Easy for you to pull up a line on a laptop....jimbo
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David Williams
Date: 1/26/2014 2:31:00 PM
Jimbo great effort one of the best so far, I have left a comment....
Date: 1/26/2014 11:59:00 AM
Caleb has some good hunting stories I'm asking him to repost them to stimulate all of you & relate how scary the woods can be so you have some ideas of what might bring suspense to the sonnet.
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Date: 1/26/2014 11:03:00 AM
Will post soon!
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Date: 1/26/2014 10:30:00 AM
thanks all...i am getting it now, the whole picture.. i was thinking that caleb was the " keeper" of the woods... the word * mint describes the scent of air... will polish in haf a day, and send to debs,right?... congrats on your crown being acceoted!.. btw, catie, i like your version... wow!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 4:45:00 PM
I think we are all in first person nette I asked for 1st person- I'm speaking of getting into Caleb's head/voice/thought & speak patterns metaphorically
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 11:54:00 AM
I think we'll let our sonneteers have the volta end of 5 all of six
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/26/2014 10:51:00 AM
honestly, the 3rd sonnet is the hardest because it has to be strong to lead us to the pount of clmax before the denouement... yayy!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 10:37:00 AM
we are getting some fantastic sonnets out of this challenge EVERY KEEP YOUR ORIGINALS!
Date: 1/26/2014 10:13:00 AM
some one kick Tim, Yassie & Kash I have already sent personal emails?
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Date: 1/26/2014 10:01:00 AM
Hi, Nette and Catie just my two cents, Nette's 5+8th lines lose syll count, and some lines jar a little ( not sure what a "mint" of air is ) but some very good content, Catie 10th line 9syll and 12line 11syll (years is two to me ) but I think it flows better and is more to the theme...I actually changed mine 5 times...Good going ladies...
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Charles Henderson
Date: 1/26/2014 11:17:00 AM
years, 1 syll David, tears, sears, beers. Had a teacher once told me to wastch mouth position. Each time the position changes is a new syllable. But not pay attention to changes due to double consonants like tw in tweet. Sounds like two sys but is only one.
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/26/2014 10:56:00 AM
right, david.. i just wrote it raw and sent it to debs for perusal... will work on the final one tomorow... raring to go!
Date: 1/26/2014 9:08:00 AM
YES!!! A BIG yes and thank you for inviting me. I will love working with everyone on this poem. What a great idea, Debbie. Big Smiles! Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/26/2014 8:27:00 AM
So that more people get a chance I am going to have 3 people not 2 work on each sonnet - OK this is IMPORTANT - the MAIN CHARACTER is Caleb we are speaking in the first person as if you are him & he is a HUNTER [Who=Caleb, What=Hunter, Where=the woods WHY=for food & peace/quiet, WHEN=?, HOW=
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/26/2014 10:43:00 AM
seems like thease are the elements of theater or a novel: plot, setting, theme, characters, etc, lol.. but those are trhe basics... got the perpective now, debs.. will soupie you..
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 8:34:00 AM
nette please take another pass at it pretending you are Caleb & a hunter we can't change the 'voice'- don't worry David & Chas did 4 revisions & then to blend I had to revise the finished product again
Date: 1/25/2014 10:55:00 PM
debbie, first draft done.. i'll soupie you... need i post it on my page?...
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Date: 1/25/2014 10:35:00 PM
Am I too late? Skat, if so it is ok.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/26/2014 8:20:00 AM
nope not too late Skat
Date: 1/25/2014 8:43:00 PM
Debbie this is an amazing idea, and to all involved what an awesome piece of collective art. I'll just get out of the way. Well done to you all.
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 1/26/2014 9:12:00 AM
I love the idea , too!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 9:47:00 PM
don't get out of the way stay and give your ideas & question if you like, we don't bite ;)
Date: 1/25/2014 6:19:00 PM
waiiit for just while, debbs.. will post real soon as i just saw this now.... okay , will start with said line.. huggs
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 6:22:00 PM
great nette!
Date: 1/25/2014 4:01:00 PM
Hi Debbie I prefer Chas's as well...it fits in much better than mine....David
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 1/26/2014 10:47:00 AM
where's yours, david?
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David Williams
Date: 1/25/2014 5:24:00 PM
Don't worry I will still give critique...and help as much as possible...when needed....
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 4:57:00 PM
Okies , you still wrote one heck of a good sonnet & it does stand alone very well & you are going to enter it into the contest WHEN its posted
Date: 1/25/2014 12:14:00 PM
So 3 for the Chas rework [Isiah, Catie & Roy] 2, Marlon & I would work with David's. I'll BBS I'll give the rest of you a couple more hours to speak up - then I'll let you know & do the suggested rewriting of bringing it all into the PRESENT in first person - PHEW this is a lot of work! BUT FUN!
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Date: 1/25/2014 11:11:00 AM
I am in favour of #2 by C. H. The reworking helped me understand the poem, as it is somewhat abstract and ambiguous, but it also takes away from the spark and originality of the poem. Most of the reworking in the second quatrain I am in favour of.
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Date: 1/25/2014 10:53:00 AM
You are right Dave, I had rather have line 2 "I have" instead of the contraction.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 12:08:00 PM
which sonnet, which verse?
Date: 1/25/2014 9:45:00 AM
I like the rework of Chas's #2. My feeling is that a crown of sonnets should be somewhat like a sonnet. You need a "volta" sonnet, but not until about #5 or #6. Too soon in the 2nd sonnet.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 12:05:00 PM
yes that was the problem I was try to correct for we need the hunter ALIVE
Date: 1/25/2014 9:16:00 AM
Personally I don't want the sonnet to go INSIDE because we have to write 7 and it will be much easier to SEE things [SHOW/not TELL] if we are in reality & NOT in the MIND - we don't have to show animals getting killed, we can show the joy of tracking the animals, we can show how the animals themselves can instill fear in the man at night in the dark of the COLD STONES he sits beside sleeps on how death can come to him by natures hand [sensory VISERAL! you have to pull the reader through 7 sonnets]
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Date: 1/25/2014 9:06:00 AM
Hi Debbie ok my two cents...the rework I quite like and, I understand why, but last line 1st stanza 10th line...doesn't quite flow and I think caleb's 12th line would flow better if it read "he never shall part" Chas's rework 2nd line 9syll and 3rd and 10th have 11syll, to my tongue maybe it's the way I pronounce them....
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 9:12:00 AM
Okies David .. once we decide & get nette & catie working we can tweak more on rhythm & count-going to gym BBS
Date: 1/24/2014 10:56:00 PM
Thanks Debbie. I will be glad to give it a try. I am like Andrea I will have to read it over to see just how this will be done.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 6:08:00 PM
as we go Joyce I will meld it, they know they are to mimic Caleb's voice
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Joyce Johnson
Date: 1/25/2014 10:51:00 AM
It's not the form I am worried about . It is making sense of words coming from seven minds with intangible subject matter. Joyce
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/25/2014 7:18:00 AM
Thanks Joyce Cyndi has a Crown Sonnet posted & I can send you mine, there must me a few on line too. Basically as Cyndi said it's a story told in 7 sonnets - where the last line of the sonnet before is the first line of the next & in sonnet 7 the first line of the poem is also the last line of sonnet 7.
Date: 1/24/2014 9:47:00 PM
and are we supposed to be voting like Drake just did? why can't the person doing the next part just pick his own favorite? sorry again, I don't understand it.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/24/2014 9:57:00 PM
well they do have a vote Caleb can say which one he likes
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 1/24/2014 9:48:00 PM
and I should not even be here because I already spent too much time here tonight. hahaha. I can't focus. Talk to me later, gator.
Date: 1/24/2014 9:45:00 PM
Deb, I am sorry but this is so over my head what you are wanting us to do. I just want whatever number will give me a good starting line. hahaha. I just don't get this process. Sorry. please tell me when you are ready for me to do something and I will try my best.
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Date: 1/24/2014 9:43:00 PM
Thanks Marlon everyone who was asked ..was asked because I felt they were able to & wanted to grow through interaction with friends, it will be a dream come true if we can all stay friends & not get upset & finish the Crown- 1 vote for D. W. PLEASE PICK YOUR FAV for verse 2
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/24/2014 9:48:00 PM
Main Character is a hunter, setting is the woods NOW we need some action some suspense, remember by the end of 5 beginning of 6 we have to go toward conclusion-so 3 & 4 are the build up to a climax
Date: 1/24/2014 3:10:00 PM
okay, debbie.. i'll do mine after the next entry.. shall i mail the sonnet to you and/ or post it on my personal page?... thanks and huggs
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Date: 1/24/2014 1:58:00 PM
Darn, and I just love that last line..."stitching a heart that was ripped at the seams"...COOL! And thanks for the help on mine, Debbie...I couldn't seem to pin it down...lol
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Date: 1/24/2014 1:52:00 PM
I'm back. Got busy yesterday afternoon and couldn't check back in...okay that's a lie. I was fishing. Had a meeting out of town this morning and just got back. I like what you've done there, David. Lookin' good!
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Date: 1/24/2014 1:44:00 PM
Maybe instead of 'in a deathly push it broke a strong bond,' 'in moribund push it broke a strong bond.' Stronger word and better flow.
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