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Splattered

"Oh, how you splinter me...." Looking, through your looking glass Portraits, of your present And images, of your past You say you see You say you know You say you do But really.... You don't! You sprinkle your sugar You sputter your spatter For all of those as yourself To whom, it doesn't even matter.... Wrapped in your paper And wrapped in your chatter These monuments and pyramids Of your self, absorbing...."Splatter" Your purposeless, and your pointless Pitter patter.... Your lines, they are divine Your words, they are immense But unto me, they do all seem Void....And teetering Upon the pretense! Standing in front of you now Staring, into your eye's.... You tell me that you do But I do, wonder why? Peering through your window Looking through your glass Your visions, for tomorrow Should your yesterdays....They pass! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~ Splattered ~ {Repost}

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 8/26/2010 4:23:00 PM
your words here in this write 'splatter' with honesty. it makes it wonderful.(: I ADORE STORIES TOO. . ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 8/26/2010 4:22:00 PM
John, this almost sounds like a friendship that has been distant on one side, but not the other. . i can relate.& what a very truthful write. "i'll Never Forget" was written by the very deep pain in my heart at one time. when i didn't know as much. .then.in the end,i learned the love could never go away. im glad you found it very precious. yes, not only was the man lucky to have such a profound woman as she.but she was also blessed to have him. ~Always&Forever
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Date: 12/15/2008 7:12:00 PM
I love this one! Incredible work. P.S Thank you for your continual kind comments. I really do appreciate them. Memories cannot breathe you are right. Thank you for that. It has helped me, in way words just cannot describe.
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Date: 12/11/2008 4:58:00 PM
Ok John...dear you are rhyming..this is rhyme..so now you know instead of do not know LOL..loved the above. On abyss...a journey without end say as in a bottomless hole or abyss, might be relaxing? interesting, no fear of a splat! wonderous? not black..perhaps a rainbow of prismatic colors..all light added together does translate to white light..only all pigments together become black..grin
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Date: 12/9/2008 1:39:00 PM
Hi John, I've gotten so busy lately I barely have time to read them let alone write my own. Please continue praying for Michael because he's heartbroken.
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Date: 12/9/2008 12:25:00 PM
tettering on greatness? NO! you've found it or created it here. this is masterful to say the least. i like it when good thought goes hand in hand with good rhymes. you did it brother you did it! John H. Loving III
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Date: 12/8/2008 9:05:00 AM
Great emotion in this one! Very strong feelings! I love the lines "you sprinkle your sugar/you sputter your spatter". Excellent alliteration! ~Juliane
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Date: 12/3/2008 5:46:00 AM
Neat alliteration and powerful emotion... some brilliant phrasing and exceptional imagery. Well done my friend! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 12/2/2008 12:40:00 AM
John, A great poem that flows well. I like the alliteration and the sing-song that appears in some of the lines. The language in down-to-earth and the poem benefits enormously as a result. it is a good one to read aloud (always a good test, I think)
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Date: 12/1/2008 8:08:00 AM
Hello again John, thank you for your words, I like this poem, the title is very fitting (smile), and in response to friendship I would be honored remain a close friend with you, God Bless you and take very good care of youself xx until next time julie
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Date: 12/1/2008 7:31:00 AM
Good Morning John how are you today - Very deep and insightful write - I almost missed it - There are some folk on this sight who are nothing as they claim - I reckon that goes for most people - thats one of the things I respect most about you - You are who you are always - God Bless you John, MJ
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Date: 11/30/2008 8:50:00 PM
Wow John. This is a very pwerful write. But then your pieces are usually thought provoking, strong pieces and always well done. Thank you for kind thoughts and words and for reading my poems. God bless you always. Love Robin (Matt. 13:15)
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Date: 11/30/2008 8:04:00 PM
They don't offend me at all, well maybe the perfect part, because no human is perfect, if they were, we wouldn't need to follow Christ. But I love your comments, please never stop :) You are an amazing poet and very spiritual, stay that way :) Blessings, ~Michaela~
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Date: 11/30/2008 7:02:00 PM
Hey to you, John! This is amazing...truly! An out-pouring of thought and emotion. I think that many might feel at some time or another, they've been 'splatterd', and it takes a strong will and courage to turn around and walk away. In return one will acquire a sense of peace and well being. It's good to write from one's heart and soul..sometimes it can fill in a void, and make one feel complete.:) I'm wishing you and yours the best, John! God bless...Mikki
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Date: 11/30/2008 6:59:00 PM
I absolutly love this poem of yours. . . If you write to me at all write your comments on the third poem. . . *.* Love Alexz
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Date: 11/30/2008 6:57:00 PM
Hi, this is deep, very deep, I loved it though. You flatter me in your last comment, for I am far from perfect, and I may seem precious, but I am far from both, at least that's my view. Thanks for your continuous praise, this was an amazing piece. ~Michaela~
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Date: 11/30/2008 5:48:00 PM
John this is full of truth. I trust your wisdom. I found this to be very real and touching John because there is so much deph in your thought's and so much meaning alway's in everything youwrite you write with honesty and conviction. Your a man of honor and if you say it, I believe it. I missed your writing's youtook a little break but family and friends are more important. God bless you my brother and your entire family. Love Michael
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Date: 11/30/2008 3:25:00 PM
Hi there, a very deep write. Maybe its about being hurt by someone you cared for once. This is a horrible feeling coz we cant forget yesterdays and can't invite tomorrows to guide us. Sometimes are better than not having any times at all. A great piece. Your heart shines in each write. Always, Chitra
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