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An Old, But New Despair

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Brooding clouds languished low, and were consoling the hills, 
where the sky rumbled softly, in reverie's call
By chance one small stumble, would shadow our moods
we found two shrouded headstones deep under the leaves

As the sky rumbled softly, in reverie's call
from a day blithe and buoyant, carefree and fun
we found two shrouded headstones deep under leaves
with names carved in granite in lone solitude

From a day blithe and buoyant, carefree and fun
I felt sudden anguish, arise from the past
with names carved in granite, in lone solitude
We resurrected despair, it was ours now to bear

I felt sudden anguish, arise from the graves
Who could they be, this mother and child?
We resurrected despair, it was ours now to bear
The sky rumbled softly, in reverie's call

Where the sky rumbled softly in reverie's call
Who could they be, this mother and child?
we found two shrouded headstones deep under leaves 
Brooding clouds languished low, and were consoling the hills 

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For Deb's Contest: "When the Going Gets Tough, The Tough Get Going"

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  1. Date: 5/19/2013 5:15:00 PM

    Beautiful poem Carrie. Just want to send birthday wishes for the 21st. Nice to share the day with you and Linda Marie. Happy Birthday Carrie. love phyl
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 3:04:00 PM

    - A unique poem from a lady who is very talented - no doubt this is a number one in the contest, Carrie! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 12:36:00 PM

    Carrie well done. It is visible and effective, putting thoughts in the mind of the reader. Deeply held view of life. I praise your originality. Warm S lies, Connie
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 10:33:00 AM

    This is very good. Best wishes. AO
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 9:46:00 AM

    i'm not crazy about this form of poetry (i know it's for a contest, though) but i think you've beautifully created a sad and powerful mood in your poem. i was able to picture it so perfectly and felt like i was there with you.
  1. Date: 5/19/2013 3:27:00 AM

    I think your poem is exquisite. The theme, descriptions and images make this absolutely stunning.
  1. Date: 5/18/2013 7:07:00 PM

    I just tried my first one of these. This is really good Carrie!

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