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Cinder Girl

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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

For John Heck's contest: Love - It Heals & It Hurts

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  1. Date: 1/19/2015 9:35:00 PM
    Flames of passion , I can feel its warmth on my face this one ! Awesome write ......Bev

  1. Date: 1/18/2015 9:20:00 PM
    It is a sweet poem despite the ember burning dim. A coming of age poem I think. Fear often sets in where taking a chance becomes a job. Nice visions of love and fellowship in the imagination.

  1. Date: 1/15/2015 1:36:00 AM
    Extremely touching..........

  1. Date: 1/6/2015 10:52:00 AM
    Andrea, Your feelings and passion shine brightly in Cinder Girl. I love it! ernandes

  1. Date: 1/4/2015 12:30:00 PM
    I've been there before and your poem describes and joy and heartache SO perfectly - wonderful poem!!!

  1. Date: 12/20/2014 6:25:00 AM
    The cream always rises to the top , A D , and rightly so ! May your gifted pen never run dry . Wishing you and yours a Happy Christmas and an inspired 2015 . Sean .

  1. Date: 12/20/2014 12:47:00 AM
    Remarkable writing. You inspire me.

  1. Date: 12/8/2014 6:23:00 PM

  1. Date: 11/23/2014 8:27:00 PM
    You have quite the way with words. I feel the relationship reaching up, up, up... then it starts forming an arch in the sky as it plummets down to Earth. I like how this transition from the 'good' to the 'bad' of the romance is not jarring; like said before, the reader is lead through a smooth, round arch. Much applause.

  1. Date: 11/20/2014 2:20:00 PM
    You really do write some powerful pieces of poetry. You undoubtedly have a natural talent.

  1. Date: 11/12/2014 8:01:00 PM
    I dropped in to read this poem once again. If I had written this poem I could retire knowing I had done my part to seed the tableau of artistic inspiration.

  1. Date: 11/2/2014 7:51:00 PM
    i can see a phoenix rising from the ashes of lost love ...... fire is often used a s symbol for love's intensity..... ring of fire, burning love, etc. Nice one!

  1. Date: 10/18/2014 12:19:00 PM
    You are amazing. . . .this was so richly colored you make the reader feel each emotion. . . . Thank you for this touching write

  1. Date: 9/23/2014 3:13:00 PM
    I just had to read this one again. I hope people realize that when they love a poem they should fav the poem. It is on the links above the poem just push + Fave Poem.

  1. Date: 9/23/2014 7:11:00 AM
    this is brilliant.

  1. Date: 9/21/2014 9:27:00 PM
    Back at the top! Horray! 7rating to help keep it flying high!

  1. Date: 7/29/2014 2:45:00 AM
    Absolutely beautifully realized composition from a gifted writer. I felt I must read it twice, save and read again. Bravo, Andrea...Your PS friend,...Gene

  1. Date: 7/27/2014 7:32:00 AM
    I adore this piece! Thank you for sharing, i feel like my past abuse fits in here so well. Connected beautifully.

  1. Date: 7/8/2014 10:50:00 AM
    Keep coming back to this.

  1. Date: 7/7/2014 2:10:00 PM
    A very well written poem. Perfect rhyme and meter. The imagery is quite vivid as well. The only critique I have is your use of the word "and" to start several of your lines. If you'd replace it with a more vivid words like then,now or so I think it would be even better but that's just my opinion.

    Dietrich Avatar Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 7/7/2014 3:44:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    thanks, Charles, never even thought of that before.