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Cinder Girl

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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

For John Heck's contest: Love - It Heals & It Hurts

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  1. Date: 3/28/2015 5:26:00 PM
    I really like this win, thank you for reading my Echos of A Coyote's Heart. Have a fab day ;)

  1. Date: 3/25/2015 6:09:00 AM
    an emphatic win..lol

  1. Date: 2/27/2015 9:32:00 PM
    Nice work, Andrea!

  1. Date: 2/23/2015 1:14:00 PM
    I really like this one! very inspiring! If you want even more people to see this, you might wanna check out www.talevault.com ^^ my account there is Parraloco. You can read and write poetry there ;D Make sure to send me your account name so i can keep track of what you post have a nice day!

  1. Date: 2/21/2015 12:06:00 PM
    Very nicely done Andrea, hope u wright when your happy also.

    Dietrich Avatar Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 2/21/2015 4:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Don't worry, Edward. This was fiction anyway. AT least half of what i write is not really about me!! And a lot of what i write is happy material. thanks for your comment!
  1. Date: 2/17/2015 3:44:00 AM
    Painful..I feel your pain in your words Andrea....good write...thanks...Peter

  1. Date: 2/16/2015 2:33:00 AM
    I was intrigued what constituted winning poetry, and indeed, this is excellent!

  1. Date: 2/2/2015 8:50:00 PM
    Very nice. A thoughtfully developed piece with distinct imagery. I love your transition and perceptions. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

  1. Date: 1/19/2015 9:35:00 PM
    Flames of passion , I can feel its warmth on my face ....love this one ! Awesome write ......Bev

  1. Date: 1/18/2015 9:20:00 PM
    It is a sweet poem despite the ember burning dim. A coming of age poem I think. Fear often sets in where taking a chance becomes a job. Nice visions of love and fellowship in the imagination.

  1. Date: 1/15/2015 1:36:00 AM
    Extremely touching..........

  1. Date: 1/6/2015 10:52:00 AM
    Andrea, Your feelings and passion shine brightly in Cinder Girl. I love it! ernandes

  1. Date: 1/4/2015 12:30:00 PM
    I've been there before and your poem describes and joy and heartache SO perfectly - wonderful poem!!!

  1. Date: 12/20/2014 6:25:00 AM
    The cream always rises to the top , A D , and rightly so ! May your gifted pen never run dry . Wishing you and yours a Happy Christmas and an inspired 2015 . Sean .

  1. Date: 12/20/2014 12:47:00 AM
    Remarkable writing. You inspire me.

  1. Date: 12/8/2014 6:23:00 PM
    nice

  1. Date: 11/23/2014 8:27:00 PM
    You have quite the way with words. I feel the relationship reaching up, up, up... then it starts forming an arch in the sky as it plummets down to Earth. I like how this transition from the 'good' to the 'bad' of the romance is not jarring; like said before, the reader is lead through a smooth, round arch. Much applause.

  1. Date: 11/20/2014 2:20:00 PM
    You really do write some powerful pieces of poetry. You undoubtedly have a natural talent.

  1. Date: 11/12/2014 8:01:00 PM
    I dropped in to read this poem once again. If I had written this poem I could retire knowing I had done my part to seed the tableau of artistic inspiration.

  1. Date: 11/2/2014 7:51:00 PM
    i can see a phoenix rising from the ashes of lost love ...... fire is often used a s symbol for love's intensity..... ring of fire, burning love, etc. Nice one!

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