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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

For John Heck's contest: Love - It Heals & It Hurts

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  1. Date: 4/24/2015 9:41:00 AM
    Wonderful, great job!

  1. Date: 4/21/2015 10:01:00 AM
    captavating poem . Just beautiful

  1. Date: 4/9/2015 9:12:00 PM
    A beautifully written poem.I enjoy everything you write ....a pleasure to read indeed.

  1. Date: 4/8/2015 11:24:00 PM
    Spontaneous, lucid and beautifully rhymed. This is how heart must speak. :)

  1. Date: 4/8/2015 7:29:00 AM
    Oh my goodness, this is amazing! Beautiful and perfect in every way! You've outdone yourself on this one, Andrea! By the way, I am in Utah now (Zion Nat'l Park). No way you live anywhere close by, is there? Just thought I'd check. (Can't figure out how to Soupmail from my phone - sorry!)

  1. Date: 4/7/2015 10:16:00 AM
    Incredible. I am in love with this... There is so much feeling in this and also very relatable.

  1. Date: 3/28/2015 5:26:00 PM
    I really like this win, thank you for reading my Echos of A Coyote's Heart. Have a fab day ;)

  1. Date: 3/25/2015 6:09:00 AM
    an emphatic

  1. Date: 2/27/2015 9:32:00 PM
    Nice work, Andrea!

  1. Date: 2/23/2015 1:14:00 PM
    I really like this one! very inspiring! If you want even more people to see this, you might wanna check out ^^ my account there is Parraloco. You can read and write poetry there ;D Make sure to send me your account name so i can keep track of what you post have a nice day!

  1. Date: 2/21/2015 12:06:00 PM
    Very nicely done Andrea, hope u wright when your happy also.

    Dietrich Avatar Andrea Dietrich
    Date: 2/21/2015 4:14:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Don't worry, Edward. This was fiction anyway. AT least half of what i write is not really about me!! And a lot of what i write is happy material. thanks for your comment!
  1. Date: 2/17/2015 3:44:00 AM
    Painful..I feel your pain in your words Andrea....good write...thanks...Peter

  1. Date: 2/16/2015 2:33:00 AM
    I was intrigued what constituted winning poetry, and indeed, this is excellent!

  1. Date: 2/2/2015 8:50:00 PM
    Very nice. A thoughtfully developed piece with distinct imagery. I love your transition and perceptions. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

  1. Date: 1/19/2015 9:35:00 PM
    Flames of passion , I can feel its warmth on my face this one ! Awesome write ......Bev

  1. Date: 1/18/2015 9:20:00 PM
    It is a sweet poem despite the ember burning dim. A coming of age poem I think. Fear often sets in where taking a chance becomes a job. Nice visions of love and fellowship in the imagination.

  1. Date: 1/15/2015 1:36:00 AM
    Extremely touching..........

  1. Date: 1/6/2015 10:52:00 AM
    Andrea, Your feelings and passion shine brightly in Cinder Girl. I love it! ernandes

  1. Date: 1/4/2015 12:30:00 PM
    I've been there before and your poem describes and joy and heartache SO perfectly - wonderful poem!!!

  1. Date: 12/20/2014 6:25:00 AM
    The cream always rises to the top , A D , and rightly so ! May your gifted pen never run dry . Wishing you and yours a Happy Christmas and an inspired 2015 . Sean .