Revising Poems | Examples

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Premium Member "Deodorants of Silence"

Silence originated a scent-

But it fades up-tempo

When real strength walks in.

One move like victory  in rise and fall

Steps thumping  the ground like a warning, 

Revising the mandates with every swagger.

One spray courage like a crown-

Radiant, lucid powerful enough to shift the

Leeway.

Every inhale is affirming space, crisp enough 

To make the horizon rise with one.

Silence be funky sporadically-

Truth incarcerated too long in the lightness,

Soone step in, unshaken, untwisted, 

Unequivocal. 

One deodorize the Silence with one's voice-

Velvet thunder,  golden fragments and 

Triumphant enough to change the gust of air.

Premium Member A Life Revising Maigc 9

My temperature is rising,
the heat has stained my cheeks. 
The hue is bent on disguising 
anything below the surface. 
My secret is capsizing, 
I’m camouflaged by the Sun.
There is no compromising
pwhen the heart so loudly speaks
that your whole life it’s revising.

STAND FIRM

Stand firm and stay strong 
Don't do wrong 
Because you don't know
What tomorrow may bring 
Stay bold so you don't fold
Stay hold, on your ten toes 
Facing the foes, making them woes
Which are opposition to your goals.

Life is not all about applause
But a lifetime course 
The game is not to be liked 
But to stay alive 
So you can thrive and strive 
Surviving to pay the price 
For where you want to be or what you want.

Be proud of scars
They make you what you are
Walk with the smart and hardworking 
Let go of your pride
Stay with the wise
So you can rise
Only then you'll be surprised 
Because everything you lost starts revising.


Premium Member Voices of My Past

The crux of my jigsaw
is plastered on my face.
In scribbles of mine, I find-
a younger mind in my place.
Time's lapsed without define
as I read these words of mine.
Semi-confused and struggling,
Do I revise? -oh, this is puzzling.

What say you, my friend of mystery?
Do you rearrange the past,
or grant amnesty?
Post as is, or adjust its mast?
Touch the voice of the lost,
or leave her voice with a cost?
The past's sound disassociates
from present mind, to recalibrate.

Premium Member I wrote a poem that alleges

I wrote a poem that alleges
that I left her a little too rough around the edges,
and would I kindly try to rewrite.

So, all night long, I added and deleted,
moved around and repeated,
till she finally said, "Yeah, that feels just about right."

MAMA AFRICA

Mama Africa; beauty is oneness

So much love she have got to share, pure she's just like gold

Her glowing black skin so unique and alluring;

Attracting, healing, elevating,inspiring and vibrant

She don't wanna be save don't save her

She don't wanna be save because she's the savior herself

Saving and nurturing all she loves without hollering

The awakened one brimming with energy to awaken more

Dark in complexion pure in consciousness, light giver

Mighty and powerful whoever she touches, change is attained

She's fearless and he-artful, showering love and care 

Blesses whoever cross her path, generous deeds all she does

The walk she walks, shows her confidence, cat walk

Walking like a tigress She is, speaks life into the lifeless

Her wrath; enlightenment not punishment, without hesitating

Yelling the greatest inequality is trying to make

What is not equal to be equal, She revisionist

Revising every causes, breaking all chains

Pure and meek; All hail her holiness as she...

Wrestling all evil until the demons pants no more

Leaving every devil breathless.


Premium Member Rediscovering

Rediscovering on revising Myself, Myself and I.
One's  self-worth,  One's  real self on this
Rediscovery of this condition  of one's  ambition, 
objectives, how did one go astray?

Mislead on this road again, Rediscovery to torturous, 
numerous detours, different people's faces,
places, plots, and twists. 

One's faith, and patience are often tested, and optimistic
one will pull the correct card-faced down; The unknown 
of one's destiny,  A mystery often scattered remnants
repeatedly scattered,  and intertwined like a maze, is
Is it a recurring dream? that leads one to rediscover
this road called self-love, self-respect knowing you
are worthy of rediscoveries.

Premium Member Each Day Is A Test

Each Day Is A Test
Miracle Man
4/19/2024

Each time I view the morning sun rising,
I ready myself for an unknown surprising,
sometimes its a test,
That requires my best.
At times God thinks my plans need revising.

Premium Member Transitioning

Revising my life 
seeking what really matters 
letting small things go

Premium Member Changing Weather

Changing Weather
(Get Used To It)
Miracle Man
January 2024


Today begins with the sky smooth gray,
and a morning mist appears here to stay.

A precursor for days that soon will come,
those house bound days engulfed in glum.

If the sun comes later it will be surprising,
My outdoor plans will likely need revising.

The visual I have is of a north wind biting,
maybe I’ll do more weather induced writing,

The Scattered

Inside a library of things uncountable,
clippings, extracts, jottings, and snippets
gather words out of nothing.
Mind dust wafts.

A woman approaches with an armful
of my early, roughly cobbled poems.
behind her, unwritten books
begin to fall off bookless shelve.
“Don’t worry” she says,
she is Scottish and actually says:
“dinna fash yersel.”
An old Celtic grandma peeps out of her eyes.
The enormity of everything
overcomes the moment.

She places the fragmented scribblings
in an untidy pile upon a small reading table.
The thought of a ‘reading table’
amuses me;
she smiles while the rest of her vanishes.

After reading all the table had to offer,
I leave the building empty-handed.

Outside, a mackerel sky
begins to rewrite some passing clouds,

Like myself,
it is constantly editing and revising
its reality
the way a bowl fish does
                 when it swims full circle.

Silver Light

SILVER LIGHT

I once knew a man
who thought he was free
then looked in the screen
to see he was me

existing within a
square cage of silver light
watching ones and zeros
form black herrings on white

making instant choices
from what is seen in there
for goods and services 
or victims begging care

watching vague images
upon a cave wall screen 
real on the outside
unreal when inside seen

experiencing a life
whenever now or past
algorithm programmed
from the beginning to last

revising for myself
life-long identity
with beautiful people
appearing to be me

seeking virtual truth
from the assured appeal
of accepting all seen
as being really real.

Premium Member Autumn Cleaning Cleanse Part One

AUTUMN CLEANING CLEANSE Part One.
It’s time for fall cleaning, a cleansing;
And in this the autumn of my life.
I’m retaking my vessel God has loaned me;
I’m cleaning His house renewing, rejuvenation, revising throwing out;
All things not of Him, Rejoicing in the joys of Him;
Following Him I shall be cleansed and remade new in Him;
This vessel shall be cleanse to house is a glorious autumn;
Autumn Cleaning cleanse 

10/17/22
Written words by James Edward Lee Sr. 2022©

Premium Member Summertime

Just a moment, time does fly
We’ll be in the classroom, 
Beyond Mother’s eye…

Just a moment, soon we’ll try
Breathing secrets – into the ear
Expectant friends shall hear
All of our riddles and wishes
Dreams that arise from summer
When our hearts did forsake
All the reading and writing
The endless studying – revising
Cramming our minds with facts
That don’t claim to be pleasing
Yet they give us degrees, victory

Just a moment and we’ll find
Hidden away, beneath the smiles
Hearts who long for the summer sun
The kindness of laughter, the hugs
From such an abundance of joy
Hearts seem to echo with satisfaction
Feelings so intense they inspire us
To bring back to school with us…
	The highlights of our summertime
Adventures in life that delight and inspire us






Back to School Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Francine Roberts 
August 21, 2022

Climate Change

Polar bears dying,
Governments lying,
There's plastic in oceans,
Its like were drinking these blinding potions,
We seem to think it will all be ok but;
When will we come to our senses,
When will we remove these blinding fences,
Sea levels are rising,
Trees are dying,
but instead we're wasting our paper revising,
What kind of world have we made,
We're sitting back watching it fade,
When will we come to our senses,
When will we remove these blinding fences,

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