Best Critique Poems

By Elton Camp

Many times I’ve gotten this request
To politely refuse, I’ve learned is best

“Your honest opinion is what I ask”
Actual desire for praise does mask

Dare to say anything but “It’s great”
And your very guts they will hate

Any criticism will drive them wild
Almost as if you...

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When Dad died, I wrote a poem to read,
a tribute to the love he bestowed.
Tears fell as, at jet speed,
I scribed emotions that overflowed.

Before the funeral I showed it to you,
hoping you would allow me to share.
“Amateurish,” you said and I didn’t pursue.
For rhyme and...

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why is it I never in my life gave cadence as to critic another poets work
yet they find it perfectly acceptable to rate my own submissions
they aren't Jesus they don't walk on water so why should I bother with them
some are intellectualized wandering wizards others...

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Allow me a moment to deconstruct,,
Every wall characteristically set up.
And all the fabricated stories from corrupt
Individuals; Residuals of a past, 
I broke through and shattered like sugar-glass. 

Let me tell you; I'm not invincible. 
My personality is not intrinsical. 
My body nor mind isn't irresistible....

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The mafia is like a hemorrhoid:
   -Both absolutely no use
   -Both put the squeeze on their victim
   - and both are a pain in the anus!!...

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Young Guns is a movie about Billy the Kid,
but it is not at all historically accurate.
The movie makes the Kid look like a homicidal lunatic,
when in reality the Kid was very kind hearted.
To quote George Coe, a very close friend of his,
"He would have been...

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Well I don't want to even think about the world today
I'd rather take a little break and make a way to play
When end to ending has no end well then my friend retreat
To find a better time to mine the wisdom of defeat.

Today the life-size...

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Thanks for the average dinner last night
It wasn't exactly a culinary delight
It wasn't that nice but it wasn't that vile
That it made me so sick or bring up some bile
It just lacked flavour, finesse or shazam
The chops were bland, I think they were lamb
The mash...

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Critique On This New And Vague Form I See

I simply can not do this new, empty and vague poetry,
what in the living hell does it give?
Perhaps a glimpse at failure and insanity disguised
or utter stupidity that dares to live!

I long to see words that mean...

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errrr strings burst from sirens
lights strobe in our ears blinding us
i can hardly listen to speaking mumbles
a heavy bass resonates between us
down another drink upside down
countdown to rundown

ooppps punched in face by fist in face
blood falls out of face that has been punched by fist
blood...

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Louis Bayard
for all we know he didn't really have to try hard
some exquisite bon mots
then those searing synopses had us back in our throes....

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From where we’ve been, must be the truth,
That was sought in the hollowness of time.
Struggling to reach from the outside, 
To ratify oneself.
From the innermost fragment there flows a justice, 
That one greets from behind.
Leading against the vanishing compulsions of mystery,
Finishing those who follow....

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When finishing a project
That’s all yours and thus unique,
The last thing that you want to hear’s
A negative critique.

Yet when you’re going public
Anyone can have his say
Despite the fact the way he feels
May spoil your lovely day.

In giving an opinion
Sometimes holding something back
Is better than the...

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Let your words come like leeches
sucking bad blood from the body
of my work. Swell with pride
excising disturbing humors.
Ill, I have come, and arm-bare,
begging to be saved.
Open a vein, young apothecary.
There is plenty of humor to spare.
I do not mind the mending knife,
the fire of its...

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*Image of Freed Fountain Pen by Pixabay.


Coffee Crumb Cake Critique


Coffee, dawn's waker-upper, cause to rhyme,
The second cup broadens your eyes, sublime,

Noontime, pot perking as penning moves on,
Performing phrases ... possessed noumenon,

Evetime trance poured milk and Kahlua,
Like Jericho's walls, pen falls ... Joshua.


2022 June 04...

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