Best Critique Poems

I have deleted the 2 poems I posted earlier today, and instead I offer what will be my final write.  I have read the...

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Absolute truth, both mystery… and paradox. 
“You make me wonder if you exist or not?”

The Greeks glimpsed you in circles and squares,
The medievals revered you...

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"Aurora Spills"


Aurora spills like a waterfall
light from the eyes 
saltwater tears
crocodilian
scaled in the weight of worth
a drop in the ocean of fate
breaks the seaweed fields...

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A repost of “Unattainable” with special thanks, sincere recognition and due veneration to our fellow poet and friend, Pashang Salehi, for his constructive critique.. valuable...

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Dedicate to Lorie Jean Though She'll Never Know


Asleep, I cannot escape my love’s depth for you.
Awake, I cannot deny my loathing towards you.
Confusion and missing...

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The other day, I was visiting the home page at Poetry Soup
and noticed a picture of a guy named Willie Shakespeare
His poems are okay but...

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If food for finer thoughts we did not crave,
If sense of purpose we did not apply,
If we did not critique how we behave, 
If dormant...

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DESERVE

Deserve- that in which we use to critique our life's ways
a way to hold back our existence 
to project a negative
and cease the positive intake

Deserve...

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#2 Rumi Quote:
If you are irritated by every rub,
How will your mirror be polished?
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Be not perturbed when life presents hurdles,
Nothing worthwhile comes sans struggle;
Do not...

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Part 1

One summer in our youth group was a boy
I met.  How I would love to understand
if what he’d felt was equal to the...

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Archetypes flash straight from a pack of Tarot cards
anti-terror Jing Jang synthesis with neuro-spiritual precision
implants explosive animation from the deep unknown
like a taro rootstock growing...

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Your style is unique
Each word very sleek

The poems never meek
Yet no bad critique

Humorous mystique
You never misspeak

Such lovely technique
All your rhyme so chic

Always tongue in cheek
Poetic...

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Drifting beyond the lightest cloud.
Pastel clowns in postmortem rain parade.
Cascading in the cold moon dust
to shed this latest mascaraed.

Wounded memories hang loosely from the mind.
Autumn...

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The night takers come when the sun goes down
When there's no one around to hear the quiet loud
They are the shadowed clouds feared by the...

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I would deny its existence and favor the second place
prediction of Tuesday; 
For the beginning is never subtle, and it tends to hunt
my off-beat verse....

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