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Fatal Critique

When Dad died, I wrote a poem to read, a tribute to the love he bestowed. Tears fell as, at jet speed, I scribed emotions that overflowed. Before the funeral I showed it to you, hoping you would allow me to share. “Amateurish,” you said and I didn’t pursue. For rhyme and meter, you didn’t care. Just three months later I’d compiled a book; a publisher said she was impressed. How I loved that expression, that look you gave me when with it was published.
*For Michael’s “I’m More Than What You Thought” contest by Carolyn Devonshire

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Date: 3/23/2012 11:10:00 AM
Great write and congratulations in the win.
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Date: 3/20/2012 4:33:00 PM
Wonderful write Carolyn.....congrats on a well deserved win!
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Date: 3/20/2012 5:55:00 AM
Congrats on your first place win, Carolyn! I'm happy to see your name at the top. I love this poem. Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 3/20/2012 5:44:00 AM
Hey Carolyn, congratulations on your win in Michael's contest, love you Wilma
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Date: 3/19/2012 11:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in Michael's contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/18/2012 11:10:00 AM
congrats on your win with this magnificent piece cory
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Date: 3/18/2012 9:41:00 AM
Such a wonderful turn around, and how someone we love can not see who we really are, and of what we are capable...even though they are standing there so close. A wonderful entry, Carolyn!
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Date: 3/18/2012 7:36:00 AM
Congtats to your smashing poem, Carolyn...Yes, YOU ARE MORE than he could of ever dreamed of AND MORE!! You are a diamond in the rough!! Love, Gwendolen
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Date: 3/18/2012 7:17:00 AM
Congrats on the win Carolyn, a very touching poem.
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Date: 3/17/2012 12:48:00 PM
I knew this would win. Congratulations on your first place, dear Carolyn. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/17/2012 11:37:00 AM
congratulations on oyur first p[lace. a good tribute to all writers who have struggled.
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Date: 3/17/2012 11:13:00 AM
congrats Carolyn on a super first place win for this exqiuisite write luv..
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Date: 3/6/2012 5:47:00 PM
seven up
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Date: 3/6/2012 5:46:00 PM
a new FAVE for me! Carolyn, we all experience this kind of rubbish once and a while...but I feel horrible for you if this is a true story! Some people have a lotta nerve. I can say with all honesty that I have read a TON of your poetry and NOT a WINK of it is AMATEURish! I rarely pay attention to such drivel. In the world of poet trees....YOU are a REDWOOD to me! A spiritual GIanT in a world of so few Sequoia! I can count the poets I look up to on two hand...You are the middle finger (in a good way... meaning .TaLLer than the rest:) U know what I mean Ha!
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Date: 3/5/2012 3:01:00 PM
Yes, I can just imagine your sister's smug expression changing to one of shock! Good for you, my friend. I felt so mad at Beth that I emailed Sketchbook and forwarded the proof it was a co write - the ed just emailed to say she did claim it was all her own work and he's removed it from the site.
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Date: 3/4/2012 11:42:00 AM
A heartfelt write Carolyn, I know this has been on your mind ever since it happened, I am glad the contest of Michael gave you an opportunity to put pen to paper. I somehow believe that once we put the emotions out there we have a chance to grow and move beyond things that held us captive. All the best for the contest, love Wilma
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Date: 3/4/2012 6:45:00 AM
I don't know Carolyn,, i find it a mystery how people can be so at odds; 'specially siblings ) and so on,, maybe one day she will return to you.. just can't understand negativity.? though i've seen enough..! anyway heres thinking of you..) and well wishes for the contest..!
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Date: 3/3/2012 4:26:00 PM
This poem is perfect for the contest Carolyn! What a great way to tell a story of how you were denied a chance to read the poem at your fathers funeral and hurt by your sisters crude comments! She was never apologetic to you was she? I hate it when people think they know so much but in reality know so little! But you raised yourself well above the bar and got yourself published, congratulations, I'm proud of you! I wish I could get one of those books! I'd love to support your talent! Great Work!
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Date: 3/3/2012 4:06:00 PM
This will surely be a winner. And it is so sad dear Carolyn. Love, Joyce
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