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Lu's Poem Switcha-roo

Contest Judged:  10/7/2019 5:55:00 AM
Sponsored by: Lu Loo | Send Soup Mail
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Contest Description

 

 


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Read my poem below and rewrite it using the same exact lines but switched up however you wish. Please write lines exactly as they are written, here is the link with a full example and original poem is written below:
https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/fairytale_come_true-_contest_example_1179045

*YOU CAN WRITE UP TO 5 LINES OF YOUR OWN IF YOU WISH (NOT A REQUIREMENT)*

Change the order of lines, switch them however you want, as long as you use all my lines in your poem. I will be making sure of that. It doesn't necessarily have to rhyme perfectly or rhyme at all. Switch them up however you wish as long as it MAKES SENSE (with good flow)


Original poem: 

"a million fairytales tremble at us,
   they know how our love does outshine with flickering light-
sounds of swift ivory doves cry out,
   fleeting into the ebon night; for our love loses not insight,
never cursed or full of deep blight;
I embrace you…you hold me tight

saturated in loneliness were you-
   I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease;
black ravens plague this existence,
   yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease,
descending onto my grateful knees-
I sense your essence in the breeze

the wind blows, and gusts prevail,
   intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains-
emerging from the dust I was found
   weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains;
as the tempest rages in warm rains,
your genuine adoration still sustains


for I am but a woman (*or man*) craving to be near you for all of eternity-
and I shall feel this pure affection or you, my beloved…eternally.

   and...

sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection,
my alleviation found in perfection-
bound by love and affection"

 

1.) DATE POEM- NO NAMES (I JUDGE BLIND)

2.) ADD UP TO 5 LINES OF YOUR OWN IF YOU WANT (NOT A REQUIREMENT)

3.) MAKE SURE YOU USE GOOD RHYTHM OR FLOW, IT HAS TO MAKE SENSE

4.) MY SOUPIEMAIL IS WORKING (LATELY) SO IF YOU HAVE ANY QUESTIONS I WILL GET BACK TO YOU AS SOON AS I CAN.  I DON'T CHECK IT EVERY DAY (FYI)

5.) GOOD LUCK AND CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT YOU COME UP WITH!

Be blessed,

-luloo


 

 


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