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If I Close My Eyes

In twenty years I see a tranquil place, where I am still and breezes are gentle; and I can reflect, and the past- embrace, I want to be deeply transcendental. To get to this place I journey far, through uncertainty and corridors curved; and frozen emotions that leave a scar, where this savaged life lived- can be observed. I listen to the murmuring of the dead, face immovable mountains and unfairness; hit rock bottom hanging on by a thread, and fight raging storms to find awareness. My goal is to dwell in tranquility, oh yes, that is a possibility! ___________________ April 22, 2017 Sonnet/If I Close My Eyes Copyright Protected, ID 894596 Written for the contest, You, 20 years From Now sponsor, Brenda Chiri First Place

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Date: 5/31/2017 7:26:00 AM
When you open your eyes may your world be beyond all you can imagine and your heart be bursting with contentment. Great poem, congrats on your win.
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Date: 5/10/2017 2:26:00 PM
Well done, Constance, and congratulations. It's much more than a possibility for those who believe.
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Date: 5/7/2017 6:50:00 PM
Constance, so beautifully written and very optimistic despite all the heartache that has gone before. Congratulations on your First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/5/2017 3:42:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Broken Wings
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Date: 5/5/2017 2:20:00 PM
Such a well earned placement, with a poem I can relate to. I sometimes write poems about this subject, it gives me peace, even though sometimes it scares my friends :)
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Date: 4/25/2017 3:15:00 AM
You are correct. It is possible. This poem speaks straight to my heart this morning, when like most mornings, inertia has taken me over and everything seems like a long, hard slog. Then comes you poem and I am reminded of gratitude and the tranquility that come with it for a while. Great poem, great message and wonderful rhyme. Kai
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Constance La France
Date: 4/25/2017 7:28:00 AM
Kai, I try to keep tranquility on my lips and serenity in my heart although difficult at times, thanks for visiting and for the nice comment and compliment
Date: 4/23/2017 4:09:00 PM
May you win Beautifully_healed Wings. PS offers poems for every moment, daily ... and even more often than that. Glad you are a poet ...just read about your Victorian House. My wife once told me I am an old-fashioned Victorian gent. (I took her to be complimentary, then).Ok #7
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:58:00 AM
Anil, thanks for visiting my poem and for that nice comment. My grandma used to say, that girl has an old soul. I have an affinity for all things old even if not perfect.
Date: 4/23/2017 9:59:00 AM
Hi BW, best of luck in your quest. I'm afraid in 20 years I'll be lucky to still be around, lol.
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:55:00 AM
James, thanks for visiting my poem and for the forever support. Your comment is funny, yes twenty years depending on a person's age could be eternity !
Date: 4/23/2017 9:23:00 AM
Lovely sonnet, Constance:) I have found such peace and tranquillity in God, yes, as your last line says, in all pain His peace prevails:)
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:52:00 AM
Jo, thanks for visiting my poem and for the lovely. So happy that you have found that tranquil place!
Date: 4/22/2017 8:40:00 PM
Another great example of your work! An awesome sonnet! Best of luck to you, Constance!
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:50:00 AM
Wolf, thanks for visiting my poem and for the awesome!
Date: 4/22/2017 6:58:00 PM
You are dependably a wonderful writer.
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:50:00 AM
Sun, thanks for visiting my poem and for the compliment too!
Date: 4/22/2017 5:51:00 PM
You are already further along on the path of being able to look back upon your life than most. You have a beautiful way of looking at things and of wrapping them with delicious words that are completely from the heart.
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:49:00 AM
Duke, thanks for visiting my poem and for the compliment!
Date: 4/22/2017 5:14:00 PM
I wish you the best, dear. May you find that tranquility you seek...your ending line proves that you will! :) Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:48:00 AM
Eileen, thanks for visiting my poem and for the nice comment.
Date: 4/22/2017 4:26:00 PM
Hi Broken Wings, beautiful and interesting write , good luck in contest :)) hugs from Ireland
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:46:00 AM
Niall, thanks for visiting my poem and for the beautiful!
Date: 4/22/2017 12:06:00 PM
Gorgeous :) 7 xomo! & good luck in the contest!
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Date: 4/24/2017 9:45:00 AM
Maureen, thanks for visiting my poem. And for the "gorgeous"!

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