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When I Close My Eyes

"recently scenes of early life have stolen into my mind, like breezes blown ..." Quote by _Samuel Taylor Coleridge (from his writings) wrapped in a plaintive trance, when I close my eyes, surreal abode appears in my faint dream, encompassed by stunning garden..mesmerize all around charming wildflower bushes gleam blushing damsel in a pretty dainty cloak, on a swing, reveling in, beside a stream. fluttering, twirling, swaying... lovely lass spoke frolicking with the dahlias, beaming rose butterflies kissed flowers around soaring oak . doting warmth of precious friends gleefully close tranquil village-path, starlit sky, the moon shines murmuring river flows...jubilation shows . tender love bloomed, witnessed by silver tall pines hamlet in memory encircled by vines ! October 2, 2022 Writing Challenge - Past Memories - ''T'' Forms Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France syllables (11 each line)checked by HMS.com rhymes checked by rhyme zone.com FIRST PLACE

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Constance La France

Date: 11/12/2022 12:46:00 AM

Mala, you have penned a beautiful Terza Rima, nature poem and congratulations on your placement in my contest, Writing Challenge - Past Memories- "T" Forms, and of course I like the quote, well done !

Ann Peck

Date: 11/2/2022 10:03:00 AM

Dear Mala, Your terza rima is so lovely and charming! Congratulations on First Place!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/10/2022 3:37:00 PM

Dear Ann, thank you so much for your delightful visit and kind comment. Childhood memory is a beautiful theme to write a poem on. Love ~ Mala

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 11/1/2022 8:24:00 PM

Your verse is so vivid and expressive, I especially like 'butterflies kissed flowers around soaring oak" - many congratulations on your win~

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/10/2022 3:35:00 PM

Thank you, Dear Michelle, for your visit and kind comment. So delighted to know you enjoyed the images.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/1/2022 11:32:00 AM

Beautiful Mala! Well deserved congratulations! What an enchanted garden with a "lovely lass" frolicking through beauty! I, too, had an enchanted garden when I was a child. If was filled with so many lovely flowers that filled our home and places to daydream while watching cloud ships in the sky! Just lovely dear friend! Blessings, hugs and much love!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/10/2022 3:34:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dear Sam. I can never forget the childhood home in a natural setting, I lived for few years. It comes back in my writings again and again! Glad to know you had a similar experience. Love and warm wishes ~ Mala

Valsa George

Date: 11/1/2022 6:24:00 AM

Beautifully penned ! I see a lovely lass frolicking with flowers and friends. I am enamoured by your description of the lovely setting in which you grew up. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win, dear Mala

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/1/2022 6:32:00 AM

Thank you, Dear Valsa. Your visit and your comments always inspire me. True...I had an opportunity of spending some time in my childhood in an exquisite rural environment in laps of Nature. Love ~ Mala

Christuraj Alex

Date: 11/1/2022 3:03:00 AM

Hamlet of scenic beauty and magnificence is picturesquely illustrated. Congratulations!

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/1/2022 6:30:00 AM

Dear Christuraj, Thank you for inspiring comments. Your poem could win a trophy!

Bill Baker

Date: 10/8/2022 10:40:00 PM

Lovely lurring poetry, Mala. Your imagery and flow are exquisite. A great entry for the contest, my friend. This poem should fare well. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Malabika Ray Choudhury
Date: 11/1/2022 6:29:00 AM

Thank you, Dear Bill. Childhood memories often steal in our mind! BW ~ Mala