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Keola - Terza Rima

Robert Browning quote AH, when the season's cycle slows To BUT a fragile arid creek Where time becomes A waning glow When all a MAN'S last tears can seek A comfort he cannot quite REACH He SHOULD release his pride for meek Repentance to EXCEED his speech And listen with HIS softer ear To GRASP what skies and oceans teach A blank dawn - he must rise, OR fear WHAT'S hidden within wells of cold Heavy rain in A day too near HEAVEN is as close as the gold Light FOR souls crossing the threshold 1/22/22 Keola Secret contest Sponsor: William Kekaula

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Suzanne Delaney

Date: 8/5/2022 4:35:00 PM

Wonderful writing, Michelle: A pleasure to read. Best, SuZ

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/27/2022 1:25:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. An amazing write. Have a great/blessed day.......................

Eve Roper

Date: 7/26/2022 9:17:00 PM

When all a MAN'S last tears can seek A comfort he cannot quite REACH-To GRASP what skies and oceans teach-HEAVEN is as close as the gold Light FOR souls crossing the threshold; all beautiful phrase, Michelle. Congratulations on a well deserve win. May blessings my friend

Eric Cohen

Date: 7/26/2022 7:10:00 PM

Michelle, this is so well crafted and moving in a difficult form. Wonderful stuff. Congrats on your well-deserved win. ~Eric

John Watt

Date: 7/26/2022 2:26:00 PM

Wonderful to see this wise and thoughtful composition land in the top spot, my friend! This was the one that motivated and inspired me to try my hand at it, so thank you for the inspiration. I love the humility this teaches, especially the lines "And listen with his softer ear / To grasp what skies and oceans teach". Very well constructed, and worthy of the #1 placement. Hope you are enjoying your day ~ John

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/26/2022 2:56:00 PM

I am now! Your support as always makes me smile, I am flattered you were inspired to try the terza rima, and I love your entry also (by the way, you may want to check out another terza rima I wrote last year called Maidens of March) Hope you are keeping cool in San Diego, we are having a string of 90 degree plus days here in Oregon!

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/26/2022 6:42:00 AM

WOW, Michelle, I'm back here to congratulate you on a very well-deserved win. Blessings

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/26/2022 2:57:00 PM

Blessings to you as well, thank you very much

Valsa George

Date: 7/26/2022 2:25:00 AM

Wonderful ! With you I too celebrate your victory ! Congratulations, dear Michelle !

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/26/2022 2:57:00 PM

You are so kind, I appreciate your uplifting comment, thank you so much, Valsa!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/26/2022 1:55:00 AM

Wow Michelle, this is really impressive! Now that you have been given the Trophy I can understand the requirements of the contest. Congratulations on your fantastic win with this outstanding entry. Blessings xxoo

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/26/2022 2:59:00 PM

You are such a lovely soul, Connie, it always make me smile, I am very thankful for your encouraging comments, thank you again~

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/4/2022 7:42:00 PM

Tinged in that beautiful gold, your poem will never grow old Michelle, love you skillful ways, :)

Anil Deo

Date: 2/4/2022 6:25:00 PM

My gushing over your disciplined joy - what civilized countries need badly - was swallowed by cybergods. Ce est le vie

Anil Deo

Date: 2/4/2022 6:23:00 PM

Disciplined. Joyful. Michelle's craft. Shalom Paz Om

Valsa George

Date: 2/3/2022 5:21:00 AM

The lovely quote of Robert Browning you have strewn in logical sequence in an inspiring write asking all of us to learn from the signs nature gives. A great entry

Constance La France

Date: 2/2/2022 1:41:00 PM

Michelle, a lovely poem for the contest, very poetic indeed, best of luck ~ Constance

John Watt

Date: 1/31/2022 4:50:00 PM

Michelle, I had to go to the contest page to help me understand what the goal was of this form, but I am thrilled with your poetic response to the challenge. For one thing, you started with a great quote. I am impressed you were able to use exactly one word of the quote per poetic line. With your mind and poetic talent, I'm pretty sure I could give you 11 random words and you could come up with an 11-line gem. You make this seem easy. Having said that, your flow is carefully cadenced, your rhyme scheme is enticing, and your message of releasing pride and seeking wisdom from nature is rich. So delighted to read this today.

Anil Deo
Date: 2/4/2022 6:17:00 PM

John Thanx for the research & accolades for Michelle. Her poetry is always carefully crafted. What joy! Shalom, shalom. Anil Deo

Ann Peck

Date: 1/28/2022 8:33:00 AM

Ahhh, Michelle--your words so profound and beautiful, I see I must fav this one, too :) I tried to grasp what KeKaula wants for this contest, but too complex for my poetry-forms-limited mind :) I wish the best to you in the contest. Surely, it's a winner!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/31/2022 2:51:00 PM

Thank you for the compliment, Ann, don't know if it will place but am glad for your encouraging comments!

Anil Deo

Date: 1/26/2022 4:00:00 PM

So much to learn ... Such a conundrum with time and Nature's cycles. ThanX for all U do MF.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/24/2022 7:06:00 PM

You have found your 'James Joyce mojo,' methinks. ~ Leopold Bloom

Rico Leffanta

Date: 1/23/2022 10:50:00 AM

I'm good with, "Heaven is as close as the gold"! Enjoyed!

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/23/2022 8:34:00 AM

Michelle, you have used beautiful wording, a beautiful rhythm, and truth to weave together this brilliantly written poem. Best wishes and regards

P.S. Awtry

Date: 1/23/2022 7:29:00 AM

“To grasp what skies and oceans teach”— lovely phrasing, cadence and truth woven into this masterfully written piece.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/22/2022 8:24:00 PM

Oh my Michelle, this poem is absolutely beautiful. I am sure William will feel it honors his son. I love your phrasing and the form that is most impressive. Bravo! Blessings xxoo

L Milton Hankins

Date: 1/22/2022 2:40:00 PM

Well done, Michelle. I need to try this form.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/22/2022 2:48:00 PM

It is pretty easy to learn, thanks so much for your comment~

Bill Baker

Date: 1/22/2022 2:02:00 PM

Unique form of poetry, Michelle. I enjoyed the experience of reading (and decoding) the mixed in message. Write On! my friend, Bill

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/22/2022 2:31:00 PM

I am always glad to hear from you, Bill, am happy you enjoyed this! Have a great Saturday~

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/22/2022 1:28:00 PM

This is awesome poem, Michelle. I like how skillfully you weaved the inspirational concept from Browning. Meaningful indeed is your poem delivering your own message in this splendid form you wrote.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/22/2022 2:30:00 PM

I appreciate your kind words, thank you very much, Vijay~