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“Trauma is personal. It does not disappear if it is not validated. When it is ignored or invalidated the silent screams continue internally heard only by the one held captive.” ~ Danielle Bernock, For long, a captive to stark loneliness He had only dark shadows for company Wandering aimless from place to place With the burden of years on his back He has come seeking to have an escape, From the damp tunnels and hollows of solitude. Now he is lost faceless in a faceless crowd. A driftwood thrown aside on a crowded beach. The sea of people who pass roaring by, Never pause to look at this man, Who came trudging miles, To find a commiserative soul. None cared to look into his eyes or read his heart. A sailor in a lifeboat without oars! A rolling stone kicked off by every passing wave! At last, he saw his world slowly falling apart. All he could do was stare vacant into the void. Still rises a faint cry from his heart, ‘Had I got another soul to cling to’! He lived a captive to loneliness. Now pulling on with silent screams, with their echoes Battering the walls of his captive heart! Feb.4. 2023 ~ Placed First~ Writing Challenge, C words- Poetry Contest Sponsor- Constance La France

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Date: 2/8/2023 4:05:00 PM
I can see why this one won the contest. Excellent poem filled with kindness and a gentle reminder to care for others in need when we can. A FAV for me. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 2/8/2023 8:05:00 AM
Valsa, loneliness beautifully penned and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - C Words, well done, I like the image and the quote also, Constance
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Date: 2/7/2023 9:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a powerful write/picture. Have a blessed day..............
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Date: 2/6/2023 10:38:00 AM
Ah, Valsa--another beautiful poem from your kind heart. Homelessness seems incurable in a country so rich with ideas. Or is it true that no one cares. Thank you for writing about it. And, congratulations on your win!
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Date: 2/6/2023 6:00:00 AM
A soulful and sorrowful write Valsa. I like it! Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 2/5/2023 10:50:00 PM
great write always; congrats for 1st placement
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Date: 2/5/2023 4:18:00 PM
This is an absolutely stunning piece, Valsa. Please accept my heartfelt congratulations on your win.
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Date: 2/5/2023 12:34:00 PM
Congrats on your top win. Victor
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Date: 2/4/2023 8:37:00 AM
Thankfully God showed me I was being held captive in this world in chains then Jesus came within and sent my old self fleeing : )
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Date: 2/4/2023 6:22:00 AM
Your poem gives voice to his loneliness. There are many out there. I enjoyed the metaphors throughout this poem. Best to you, Valsa.
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Date: 2/4/2023 4:24:00 AM
Reads like a good contender for the Constance's contest to me. Way to go. I can't imagine what a person like this must be going through. Thanks for sharing this emotive and expressive work and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 2/4/2023 3:19:00 AM
- A great poem, Valsa ... which hurts deep into the soul ... best wishes in the contest - hugs
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Date: 2/3/2023 11:27:00 PM
Powerful verse Valsa, how often we read of this especially in older people who have no one but themselves. It's as if society shuns them, Enjoy your weekend. Tom
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Date: 2/3/2023 10:40:00 PM
There is nothing worse than being a captive to loneliness. You can see it even in large cities when everyone is afraid of each other. Great emotions. Best for a win.
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