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To Kill a Wild Rabbit - FICTION The small winding valley was cold and dank. Nothing stirred as darkness descended quickly. Dusk brought an ominous cloud of evil fog that, like a black shroud, spread itself over the valley. No one ever dared intrude in the mouldy meadows below, despite the wild rabbits that thrived there. None dared, because of Wiener. Every night he kept his solitary rendezvous in a fallow meadow. Every night he carried his hunting weapon well-kept, ready for use. Every night he would caress it as if it were a woman in the throes of an adventure. A lonely owl swooped, crying shrilly into the night. A mouse screeched faintly as deadly talons encircled its soft body. In the distance, a solitary coyote howled plaintively. Then all was quiet whilst Wiener bided his time. For a brief moment, the calm stillness was shattered. In a flash, a shot rang out; an unlucky rabbit hit the dust. Wiener left it where it lay, twitching in its death throes. It was immaterial to him how many he killed. It was not the rabbits he wanted to kill. It was a bigger game that he had in mind. Suddenly out of the swirling mist, a young woman appeared like a ghost of a horrid past. Her hair was black like the night, her body was full and shapely. For the past three years, he had hardly spoken to her, Rarely looked at her, never made love to her. She had flirted too much with that bastard. Who raped her mercilessly. “He’ll not dare come here, you know.” She whispered. He saw a pain crease on her face. One day the bastard will return. That is what Wiener wanted. Then Wiener would kill him like a wild scared rabbit. "Why do you harbour such hate?" she asked. Angrily he lifted his rifle and fired. The shot flew dangerously past her right ear leaving her petrified. Behind her another miserable rabbit died. He wondered if revenge would satisfy him. (Note: This is a stand-alone poem but in reality, it is a prologue to a Maltese TV play with which I won first prize ages ago. The Maltese TV station would not air it for their agenda. Eventually, I converted the play into a short novel in Maltese, now out of print. But the prologue always haunted me. As a prologue, it will not be continued in poetic form. Suffice it to say that Weiner, the main protagonist, got his revenge, but against the wrong person. Hate is a terrible vice. Not to be continued.)

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Date: 11/10/2023 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD!
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Date: 11/5/2023 4:02:00 AM
A chilling tale of ill feeling and revenge. You have been a master story teller since the very beginning. Enjoyed reading this hair raising adventure. Love the message you have tried to convey. Belated Congratulations on your well deseved POTD.
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Date: 11/1/2023 1:04:00 AM
I missed your POTD?! Congratulations on your amazing honor Victor! Chilling story you have written. Yes, hate is a terrible vice.
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Date: 10/31/2023 10:08:00 AM
I see this earned a POTD. Belated Congrats,Victor. What a powerful poem.
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Date: 10/31/2023 9:33:00 AM
Belated congratulations on your POTD Victor! Intriguing. Blessings ~Anaya
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Date: 10/31/2023 6:15:00 AM
Back with belated POTD congratulations, dear friend.
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Date: 10/31/2023 4:48:00 AM
What an amazing read, I was intrigued from beginning to end. You are an amazing story teller, dear Victor. I see it got POTD, sorry for the belated Congratulations. A well deserved win. Hugs
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Date: 10/31/2023 2:42:00 AM
Enjoyed this so much Victor such a captivating write! Congratulations on POTD! Cuddles….Debx
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Date: 10/30/2023 8:11:00 PM
You’re quite the raconteur, Victor! Eerie, as is meant to be, warmest congratulations on POTD
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Date: 10/30/2023 3:35:00 PM
Congratulations Victor, on POTD! The imagery in your writing is vivid, making for an enthralling read. I had to read it twice, in fact. Great storytelling, Victor. Warm Regards, William
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Date: 10/30/2023 3:26:00 PM
This was amazing to red the first time around even more so the second read Victor congrats on your POTD, way to go !
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Date: 10/30/2023 2:20:00 PM
Many congratulations Victor for POTD. Wonderfully written with great storytelling. In depth descriptions with such vivid, imagery makes it an enthralling read. Many congratulations for your win in Malta as well. I can see why. Blessings to you.
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Date: 10/30/2023 12:40:00 PM
Intrigued by the storyline as many of us are, Victor. Congratulations on this episode being chosen as poem of the day.
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Date: 10/30/2023 12:04:00 PM
- Back with congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 10/30/2023 11:30:00 AM
Congratulations on POTD, love your story telling abilities to captivate the mind
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Date: 10/30/2023 10:59:00 AM
A fascinating story Victor, congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Belle
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Date: 10/30/2023 10:43:00 AM
what a gripping tale, you are an outstanding story teller Victor, many congrats on POTD and also your win with this poem in Malta too.hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/30/2023 10:40:00 AM
"The shot flew dangerously past her right ear leaving her petrified. Behind her another miserable rabbit died. He wondered if revenge would satisfy him." A question asked time and time again by those wronged, and desperately seeking closure. Congratulations on POTD -- well deserved, Victor.
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Date: 10/30/2023 9:33:00 AM
Back with congratulations on POTD.
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Date: 10/30/2023 9:19:00 AM
An outstanding poem, Victor! Heartfelt congratulations on POTD. :)
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Date: 10/30/2023 8:40:00 AM
Great job Victor. Intriguing story. Congratulations! :)
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Date: 10/30/2023 7:24:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your POTD win. Have a great/wonderful day with your win...............
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Date: 10/30/2023 7:11:00 AM
Love the depth and prickly emotion coated in fear !! So much intrigue and hate . As you said hate is a terrible vice, one that roars until it’s ugly death . Amazing writing dear Victor ! Hugs and congratulations on your powerful POTD ! Susan :)
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Date: 10/30/2023 7:04:00 AM
Congratulations, Dear Victor, on this poem receiving honour of POTD. I am awestruck with your thrilling descriptions...it's an outstanding poem! Best wishes ~
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Date: 10/30/2023 6:25:00 AM
Victor, excellent writing and congratulations on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor.
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