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When Sky Turned Nonchalant

Not ones to ever be ascetic, we lay bronzed and brazen on the beach that day, our legs sprayed by the shallow tide of sea as we engaged in passionate love play. The sun, which shared our ardor at the start, turned humble suddenly, and then the sky seemed nonchalant, as if it had no heart. No brightness would the furtive sun belie. Although the shore had grown a little cold, my love decided to take one last swim. He jumped the waves, so filled with joy - so bold! Then one huge wave rolled in and swallowed him! Recalling it, I stand now by this tide. How gray the sky had turned when my love died. Written Jan. 26, 2018 For John Hamilton's "English Sonnet Lost Love" Contest Using words: 1. Furtive 2. Nonchalant 3. Humble 4. Shallow 5. Ascetic

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Date: 5/5/2018 8:45:00 PM
Congratulations, Andrea! Used the words so well, didn't expect that ending. :)
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Date: 5/5/2018 8:44:00 PM
CONGRATS on your win with this skillfully-written, poignant piece, Andrea! Janice
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Date: 5/5/2018 8:07:00 PM
YEAH! Congratulations - congratulations, dear Andy! What an amazing sonnet brilliantly incorporating 5 challenging words! Best wishes and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 5/5/2018 7:19:00 PM
Back with more congrats, Andrea. Well done.
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Date: 2/12/2018 6:44:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your win, Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 2/12/2018 4:30:00 PM
A compelling and beautifully sad sonnet Andrea. I didn't see the fatal twist coming.. nicely done! Congratulations on your excellent win! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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Date: 2/12/2018 2:22:00 PM
Back with well deserved congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 2/12/2018 8:15:00 AM
Congrats Andrea for a fine placement in my contest!
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Date: 1/31/2018 5:59:00 PM
A sudden twist at the end that I wasn't expecting!!! Oh my!!!! Great sonnet Andrea. Best of luck in the contest! ~Judy
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Date: 1/28/2018 8:01:00 PM
Sonnets are not so easy to compose. This is a read that reminds me how fickle nature and life can be. It's fun to read several times and to examine the rhymes.
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Date: 1/28/2018 6:54:00 AM
Trump turned tide into nonchalant; And had become familiar old haunt; Were on brink; Started to sink; What from us now will Trump want? Huge rolls are always had to swallow. Read my bite off more than chew poem.
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Date: 1/27/2018 5:33:00 PM
Such a sad sad sonnet Andrea, you wove the words in so well:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/27/2018 9:48:00 AM
I think you used the 5 words very well, I did an example for this contest, but did not enter it.. you describe loss very well, I feel it is an emotive sonnet... Good luck in the contest..
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Date: 1/27/2018 9:41:00 AM
Sure to top the winner list, Andrea. Elaine
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Date: 1/27/2018 7:25:00 AM
Nicely done, Andrea, the required words are woven in very well. Best of luck. John
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Date: 1/27/2018 6:25:00 AM
A well articulated sad poem...apt given the theme of lost love..best for a win, Andrea.
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Date: 1/27/2018 5:32:00 AM
Are when's, where's, now's and how's, Of God's that everyone He does arouse, And us amaze; Him do praise; We may have been with herds of cows. Wrote this after reading your poem. This is how other poets should respond to your poems.
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Date: 1/26/2018 10:43:00 PM
I love it, Andrea. Superbly done.
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Date: 1/26/2018 10:00:00 PM
Just like Eve, I start with - 'Oh', was this ever worth an hour! So passionate, so sad and so yummy of a sonnet because it has all the emotional ingredients to stir a person. Great write, dear, truly it is. Thanks for all you do, and for this wonderful read. I love you ... CayCay
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Date: 1/26/2018 9:27:00 PM
Oh, my, you made me cry here.. just seeing the person being swallowed away :(
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