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The Shadow From the Mud

One day, not long ago, I was careening like a kite on the winds of happiness twirling through spaces of days that shone through all dark clouds. Muddy puddles were beneath me, but they were far beneath. My Sunshiny days evaporated the puddles, yet always mud remains, and from the mud a shadow form took shape. It never seems to fail. . . I’ll have almost reached the summit of my bliss, a loopy kite somersaulting through blue sky when by and by. .. the shadow form I’ve managed to pretend I do not see has risen from the mud, awaiting me. Bad luck, like a thunder clap, attacked my happy sky. Joy’s buoyancy lost its grip on me. I slipped plunging to the frigid ground - again to be in disappointment’s shadow. Written 10/6/2015 By Andrea Dietrich For the Dancing with Description Poetry Contest of Casarah Nance

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/16/2018 1:54:00 PM
I like this clever metaphor--very creatively woven.
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Date: 11/18/2015 10:37:00 PM
Well congrats on this win, I should try something like this , hey I seen a poem of mine without your name on it . Called Hollow Bones :)
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Date: 11/14/2015 9:51:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Andrea...I am so behind and trying to catch up with all your posts now. Only have one day off...cheers, Connie
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Date: 11/12/2015 9:02:00 PM
I love your verse and relate to it, I was quite drawn in, Andrea - deep and very, very, good ... CayCay
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Date: 11/12/2015 9:21:00 AM
impressive take on the theme Andrea. It should be read with a musical score to highlight the ups and downs, joys and disappointments. The easy flow leads the reader in this dance.
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Date: 11/11/2015 4:49:00 PM
G'day Andrea... we just do not know what surprises await us around the corner - congrats Andrea - Lindsay
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Date: 11/11/2015 8:31:00 AM
Congratulations, dear Andie, on your win! Loved the great imagery that pulled me into this experience with you! Have a day radiating with sunshine! Pandita
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Date: 11/10/2015 11:35:00 AM
Andrea, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT
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Date: 11/10/2015 8:03:00 AM
Hi, Andrea. Seems that effervescent personality of yours was a bit down when you wrote this. Sorry to hear that but it did make for a wonderful poem.
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Date: 11/10/2015 2:21:00 AM
Andie, Congrats!!! =`) I enjoyed the read and unique imagery!~Olive Eloisa
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Date: 11/9/2015 10:16:00 PM
Yes, Andrea, it takes a lot of practise in life to become a puddle jumper. Love this write, so animated. Congrats! Viv x
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Date: 11/9/2015 7:41:00 PM
I keep saying 'muddy puddles.' Cute. Well done with this one, Andrea. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/9/2015 6:38:00 PM
I really enjoyed your winning write! Congratulations.
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Date: 11/9/2015 5:41:00 PM
Great imagery and metaphors, Andrea. A winner for me. Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/9/2015 4:59:00 PM
Love the symbolism of the kite, the sun, and the mud and congrats
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Date: 11/9/2015 3:02:00 PM
many congrats on your win Andrea :-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 11/8/2015 6:13:00 PM
Andrea, this is wonderfully penned for the contest, a winner for sure, 7 and my poem Christmas is complete now if you care to come back for a visit ~
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Date: 11/8/2015 5:00:00 PM
We'll just have to make sure the sun stays out longer for you...so you can smile and show those 2 sweet dimples you have. Well written.
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Date: 11/8/2015 3:36:00 PM
Good luck in the contest! Hope you have some good luck - I certainly could use some. Now back to watching the Giant game - let me know what you think of my latest. Best to all Matthew Anish
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Date: 11/8/2015 2:21:00 PM
I want to mirror Emiles comment. He perfectly described this write of yours. so clever Andrea love your association with the Kite. In my opinion a winning entry!
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Date: 11/8/2015 11:59:00 AM
This poem is about human feelings and it plays with words to hint at the pain in the author's heart. Your words paint the scene with descriptive images that bring the essence and power of your feelings to the forefront of our perception. Emile. #7
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Date: 11/8/2015 10:38:00 AM
That's called "down-and-dirty" Muddy shadows are the worst kind. Enjoyed. Love, daver
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Date: 11/8/2015 9:53:00 AM
A muddy and indeed most mirksome meddling muck casting mithering misfortunity 'as' it were dear poet.! or as it was even..' though the ground could not have been even; as there were puddles.' the moral is; do not go careening along like...Well like a dizzy kite, and send any bad shadows to me, as I will promptly write them off.'
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Date: 11/7/2015 6:48:00 PM
Smell a winner here! Andrea, so imaginative expression, great writing held me to the end.
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Date: 11/7/2015 1:39:00 PM
heart felt write, my friend. will read a few of yours at random - don't visit my page as I just posted one for your new contest
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