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The Legend of Raven

It is cold here, in this waiting place...this place where tears belong Behind the gates, the iron locks...where sinking headstones dwell Where names that time erases, etched so deep with grief and pain She walks here in the dim, gray light... where the ravens weave their spell There is a legend, spoken in whispers...with trembling, foreboding breath... In whispered tongues, they wonder, ..."Is she an angel disguised as death?" They call her Raven. Is she real?....Is she a symbol?.....Or just a myth? Some claim to have witnessed her, the swish of her ebony hair the sheen of her porcelain skin, and the gossomer, flowing dress... ~ She is the legend that haunts them, she appears in their dreams Is she real? Do their eyes speak the truth? Is she all that they claim?.... Do the stories have merit...or only apparitions they've seen and heard? She walks among gravestones, kneeling down at each word She carries a weapon...in the dim light of the dawn The gun has turned cold now....as if long ago inflamed It held unspeakable heartache...such sorrow....and blame.... ~ The moss covered headstones, with etchings that crumble She touches and fondles, as memory tumbles She hears voices of anguish rising from out of the mist Calling..."Raven.....dear Raven.....do you remember the kiss?" Her heart and the shame....she's like a moth to the flame She cries out in despair, ..."How great was the cost!!" She knows how it is to walk with the dead The fog is her velvet, her home and her bed Dew is the blanket, stone pillows for her head The lilies and the laurel...in tangled design now entwined over markers...have withered on the vine ~ She walks alone among rocks.... she is yet, never knowing So bitter the truth, that stalks close beside her For she too died that day,...now her destiny is keeping Forever to wander....in searching and weeping... As lonely as the mist...alone in the fog....weeping forever... the girl of raven locks

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/24/2011 11:24:00 AM
I had only read a couple of the poems and wanted so badly to enter but...too many things were going on and didn't get to. I knew Constance would have a time selecting her winners. There is a long list of winners here. You should be so proud of your winning poem congratulations Carrie. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/19/2011 7:05:00 AM
Many congratulations Carrie on your fine win in Constance's wonderful contest....:)
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Date: 2/18/2011 7:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this wonderful write. Caryl
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:27:00 PM
a great write from you Carrie.Congrats on your 1st place win.
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Date: 2/18/2011 4:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 2/18/2011 10:15:00 AM
Awesome picture you represent, I can almost see her tears! Loved it, Congrat's Carrie, on your win!~Tirzah~
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:56:00 AM
So happy to see your first take the top prize, Carrie. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:27:00 AM
riveting details of a story with vivid touches, carrie!! big CHEERS for the win.. :) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:07:00 AM
You've build a great atmosphere into your poem, I really enjoyed reading it, Congrats on you first place!
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Date: 2/18/2011 12:09:00 AM
I knew this was a winner the first time I read it dear Carrie. Many Congrat's on your FIRST PLACE WIN. Lainie
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Date: 2/17/2011 8:21:00 PM
Your girl of raven locks is beautiful. many congratulations.
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Date: 2/17/2011 6:32:00 PM
Congrats on your win great job
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:45:00 PM
Beautiful writing Carrie. I am so proud to share no. 1 with you. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:41:00 PM
Beautiful Narrative Carrie, congratulations on your first place honor. Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:24:00 PM
There's always a place at the top for you! RAY
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:22:00 PM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Constance
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Date: 2/17/2011 5:13:00 PM
Vividly descriptive write. Congratulations on capturing a number one spot in the contest with this remarkable entry.
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Date: 2/17/2011 4:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your super Ist Place win dear Carrie! So well deserved! Exceptional story. Love, Annalise
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Date: 2/17/2011 4:35:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your first place win in Among the Dead contest with this exceptional entry ... enjoy with luv..
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Date: 2/17/2011 4:05:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie, on first place in my contest with this breathtaking poem. Could you send me by soupmail your address so I can forward your Certificate of Acheivement in Poetry~~
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Date: 2/7/2011 8:01:00 PM
This one will surely be hard to beat! It reads like a winner for sure. Good luck, Carrie.
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Date: 1/18/2011 4:46:00 AM
Good morning and thank you for sharing your poetry Carrie. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today and I hope you will continue to write and write and write. The best to you in your writing endeavors whatever they may be in 2011. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/17/2011 9:26:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest.
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Date: 1/17/2011 5:08:00 PM
The story behind your poem is positively gripping, Carrie. To think that this dead girl is doomed to wander among the graves. Fact or fiction? Doesn't matter! You've woven incredible images into your poem and I hope to see it in the winners' circle. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/17/2011 3:12:00 PM
WOW, all these Raven poems are great, but Carrie this stands out in my mind as one of the best,... wishing you the best..luv Michael
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