On the Edge

On the edge of darkness you lie not alone anymore where recurrent chills melt along with the emptiness of the night Biggest stars sit at the foot of comfort gazing towards heightened heartbeats as a serene calmness fills the air Sweet innocence surrenders slowly moving her way nearer tomorrow and freshness blooms another day

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Akkina Downing

Date: 6/30/2017 8:05:00 PM

I have to add this to my fave collections. I'm just in love with this piece. Absolutely beautiful, Tim :)

Sara Ella

Date: 6/30/2017 1:21:00 PM

Your words are so powerful Tim. I had to come back and read again :) I love how you choose just the right words that each one says so much <3

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/30/2017 8:14:00 AM

You seem to always say so much in very few lines. A true testament to your talent, Tim. "Freshness blooms another day"

Niall Fulham

Date: 6/30/2017 7:25:00 AM

Hi Tim, beautiful write , very enjoyable read :)))

John Lawless

Date: 6/30/2017 7:20:00 AM

Great job tim, this is one of those that makes me slow down to allow the meter and line breaks to wash over my mind and stir my soul

Seren Roberts

Date: 6/30/2017 5:53:00 AM

excellent Tim.....loved it....Seren

Lin Lane

Date: 6/30/2017 5:22:00 AM

Sweet innocence surrenders slowly...winning words, Tim. FiFi says "ello" and she's glad she knows your name. ;-)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/30/2017 5:00:00 AM

:) beautiful piece, Tim. Serenity breathes in every line...there is hope for better tomorrows.

Darren White

Date: 6/30/2017 3:50:00 AM

Love the enjambment, it makes for pauses in sentences on places where it is needed. Not alone.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/30/2017 3:14:00 AM

Very beautiful Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/29/2017 9:25:00 PM

Your standing at the edge of a great verse my friend...very well done Timmy...^WW^

Eve Roper

Date: 6/29/2017 8:17:00 PM

The imagery is beautiful, Tim. I enjoy everyday being as beautiful as the next. ~*

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/29/2017 8:16:00 PM

This is amazing Tim, I can feel the words, and can even imagine this poem growing, or being continued!

White Wolf

Date: 6/29/2017 8:14:00 PM

Man, I love this, Tim!