Valsa George Poet Free verse

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Sept.8.2024

Future Self Poetry Contest

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~ PLACED SECOND~

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My Future Self

Line of inquiry: 

“looking back, I’m ashamed of what I was
I’m different now, though not without flaws
Each crest becomes a trough, as we move on
God slowly steers soul towards a new dawn”


Looking back, I saw my ignominious past,
Reflected as on the surface of a plain mirror.
Seeing my hideous image, I felt the need to change, 
Change into a new being… that’s what I so desired.

With a heart aflame and a conscience revived,
I vowed to rise and leave my past behind.
I fought hard to cut down the chains of habit,
That held me tight and kept me a prisoner.

Determined I was to claim my ground at every step,
And turn my back on the shadows that creep. 
No more to be ruled by exaggerated notions of my worth,
Nor be a captive to my own ego, but be kind and loving.

Thus, God helped me discover my golden pathway,
To inner peace and happiness of a sublime kind..
I let compassion, the guiding light under my feet,
And love, a golden thread that links one and all.

Now, I see each dawn as a new lease of life,
And thank God for granting one more day to improve
To look at everything fresh with a new insight,
And fare ahead in life, moving steadily from better to best.

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Thompson Emate September 21, 2024 at 2:53 AM Congratulations, Valsa. This is a beautiful writing that stirs a deep reflective thought. Thank you for pouring out your soul into this.

Sara Kendrick September 19, 2024 at 7:19 AM God is always working on us if we let Him. Good direction to go with this contest. Congratulations on your winner. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

Crystol Woods September 17, 2024 at 10:12 AM Woohoo! So happy this placed so high! Well deserved! I love your ideas and message about how to be better... through love and compassion. Yes! Way to go! Xo

thriveni c mysore September 16, 2024 at 3:38 AM so creative, congratulations on your win dear poet.

Silent One September 11, 2024 at 12:49 PM Hey Valsa, your poem is a moving reflection on personal growth and redemption, chronicling the speaker's journey from a painful past to a state of inner peace. The opening lines create a vivid image of self-awareness, with the speaker confronting their "ignominious past" as though seeing it in the clarity of a "plain mirror." This mirror serves as a symbol of unflinching truth, showing the speaker their "hideous image"—a powerful metaphor for past mistakes or shameful behaviours. The desire for change is immediate and urgent, setting the tone for the rest of the poem.

Ink Empress September 9, 2024 at 9:49 PM Dear sweet valsa, where do i begin? It takes alot of discipline and focus to revive and thrive and change perspectives and more. With faith in your heart youv definitely learned how to, i love the sincerity of your words woven here, especially these lines stood out for me “ I vowed to rise and leave my past behind. I fought hard to cut down the chains of habit, That held me tight and kept me a prisoner.” its never easy breaking free from habits, only a strong soul like you can do! I also love “ Now, I see each dawn as a new lease of life, And thank God for granting one more day to improve” yes! Soul warming and inspiring, reminds me and others to do the same also! This is a fave for me! Best wishes! Sending you light always

Hilda Greenhough September 9, 2024 at 4:44 PM I enjoy this poem with it's lofty goals. It is a poem of wisdom.

Joseph P. DiMino September 9, 2024 at 10:20 AM "Each crest becomes a trough, as we move on God slowly steers soul towards a new dawn”" Brilliant! Truth! "I fought hard to cut down the chains of habit, That held me tight and kept me a prisoner." Ain't that the sad truth for most of us! Great poem!

Daniel Henry Rodgers September 9, 2024 at 6:48 AM Dear Valsa, I often wonder who that child was way back when I was not the best example of godly living. I Love this Line "each crest becomes a trough, as we move on God slowly steers soul towards a new dawn” . What a wonderful devotion of discovery and finding God and turning to him to guide our path. You have inked this so well to the point it is a FAV for saying so many of the thoughts that I have had. - Blessings, MY Dear Friend, Daniel

Victor Buhagiar September 9, 2024 at 3:23 AM Dear Valsa, this is a marvellous poem. I'm sure you are not that bad. You captured the essence of the line of inquiry. After all, we are all sinners and need repentance. God is compassionate and loving. May all sinners learn that even at death, they can be saved by a declaration of repentance. Good luck with your contest.

Tom Cunningham September 8, 2024 at 11:46 AM Every day we strive to do better, as we go through life we aim for perfection. An enjoyable read Valsa, good luck in the contest. Tom