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Picture is of The Groudle Glen Water Wheel on the Isle of Man

The mill wheel wouldn’t turn until the Spring when the ice melts perhaps they'll find my ring It was tossed into the freezing water when I caught my beau kissing my daughter They both swore blind that this was the first time but I pushed them into that icy slime perhaps I acted rashly, with disgust but I’d very good reason not to trust ... Whispers ran through the town from door to door friends told me details that I just abhor - They’d meet in secret in a lover’s tryst both acting like I just did not exist their lust led them down a slippery slope they planned to leave and secretly elope Two bodies won’t be found for many weeks ice melts, revealing secrets - the wheel creaks No one will suspect me, they’ll think they fell and met their maker in an ice cold hell! One, nine, sixteen v3 contest Sponsored by Viv Wigley 6/27/18

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Sandra Haight

Date: 7/30/2018 8:38:00 AM

Wow, what great imagination led to such a dark poem for this theme, Jan! Very intriguing and most enjoyed! Congrats on your nice placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Elaine George

Date: 7/28/2018 7:49:00 AM

Great writing, Jan. many congrats on your win. Elaine

Jan Allison
Date: 7/28/2018 8:23:00 AM

Thanks Elaine:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/25/2018 7:11:00 PM

Oh my! This is perfect! Congratulations on your win. Great story, rhyme and rhythm perfect! I really enjoyed. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2018 7:14:00 PM

Thanks Susan I am determined I will have to add a little humour to the next contest as I seem to be writing deep sad ones for Mr Viv lately lol:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 7/24/2018 4:14:00 AM

Jan, congrats on your win for this dark little tale, nicely done. John

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 6:00:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 7/24/2018 2:21:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your win. Great story flowing with the poem.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 6:00:00 PM

Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/24/2018 1:26:00 AM

Gone all dark again, eh, Jan? I thought the murderer could have at least farted. Congrats on your win and thanks for entering my humble contest. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2018 6:00:00 PM

lol Mr Viv I will give myself away if i do too many farty poems lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 7/16/2018 11:42:00 AM

What a linking of events and emotions! Jan, I was enthralled with every new line. Wonderful read and may the force be with you as you write the next chapter in your sordid life. "Ice-cold hell" - my favorite phrase.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/16/2018 12:09:00 PM

Thanks Reason, I seem to go to the dark side for Mr Viv's contests lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/1/2018 10:03:00 PM

You are so good at these lust/love/revenge stories, Jan. Just another in a line of fabulous JA writes. A real winner, for sure. :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 2:33:00 AM

I do worry about my muse GW I seem obsessed with murder in poems for Mr Viv lol:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/28/2018 10:46:00 PM

Oh my oh my oh my....WOW! This was an excellent write, Jan. :) Scary...but stupendous. You are a master at words. Love ya.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2018 1:17:00 AM

aww thanks my sweet friend - I've come a long way since I joined soup and first started writing and you've always been so supportive:-) hugs Jan xx

Warren Doll

Date: 6/28/2018 8:19:00 AM

Jan, very creative and dark. I loved it. // Warren:)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/28/2018 12:08:00 PM

Thanks Warren:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/28/2018 3:46:00 AM

WoW! Jan, You're good at these murder and suspenseful writes. It was a great story with a good plot. I could just picture the whole scene. You used the given words really well. I wish you the best of luck - Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/28/2018 4:55:00 AM

I am getting worried about my muse she has turned to the dark side lately:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 6/28/2018 12:20:00 AM

This is fabulous, Jan. I love how you used the given lines to spin a story.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/28/2018 1:16:00 AM

Thanks so much Agnes I love Mr Viv's line prompts but they do seem to inspire me to write dark tales:-( hugs Jan xx

Lyric Man

Date: 6/27/2018 2:13:00 PM

Jan.. I love how you can just pull up a murder without notice. I respect a person that has available, interesting, murder stories on demand. No wonder we are buds!!! Also, important to note.. don't mess with Jan!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 2:15:00 PM

aww thanks so much my lovely friend. i do worry about my muse I have no control over what she will come up with next as i've written several murder poems recently:-(:-) hugs jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 6/27/2018 1:02:00 PM

Jan, a chilling murder....getting the shakes.. Hope the cops will find the ring. GL in the contest. Hugs.> rajat.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 1:32:00 PM

I hope they never find the ring - cos they could pin the blame on me!:-( hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/27/2018 10:33:00 AM

Great write Jan, beginning to sound like the Manx summer murders lol. Good luck. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 11:59:00 AM

lol Tom I do love watching the detective programmes, much prefer John Nettles as Inspector Barnaby though!:-) hope you are coping with the heat:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 6/27/2018 10:06:00 AM

Perhaps you acted rashly? Ya think? lol You'd better hope your ring is stuck in the muck cuz that's evidence that you were there. That was your reaction to their betrayal. I might suggest you take an extended trip long before Spring. Good one, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 11:58:00 AM

I need to get silly fun muse back and playing but I think she was last seen sunbathing as we are having a heatwave:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/27/2018 10:34:00 AM

I guess I'll take part of the blame for opening the door to your 'dark side' with the last one I posted. Your muse is easily swayed. hahaha just kidding. Go back to the light!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 10:12:00 AM

Shhhh and no one will know it was mine Lin I think they will be more interested in the two bodies lol:-) Oh heck I've been reading too many of Art's poems and passed on to the dark side lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/27/2018 9:01:00 AM

Ice cold hell...right where they belong

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 9:52:00 AM

It sure is Tim:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/27/2018 9:01:00 AM

Wow, so dark Jan!!! Loved it xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2018 9:52:00 AM

I am getting worried Mike I seem to be getting murder in mind for many of Mr Viv's contests lol:-) hugs jan xx