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Losing You (29-Word Contest)

Losing you Losing your smile Losing your love Losing your very presence in life Heading home But sensing loss A void to fill Weight to bear Goodbyes conveyed loss Recovery may be found Heading home Family aids the recovery 1-losing, 2-you, 3-your, 4-smile, 5-love 6-very, 7-presence 8-in 9-life, 10-heading, 11- home, 12-but, 13-sensing, 14-loss,15-a, 16-void, 17-to, 18-fill, 19-weight, 20-bear, 21-Goodbyes, 22-conveyed, 23-recovery, 24-may, 25-be, 26-found, 27-family, 28- aids, 29-the

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Jack Horne

Date: 4/17/2011 9:46:00 AM

Very touching poem - and it was another win, I see. Hope you have a great time. You return on my birthday - I'll be an old man of 42 on 4th May. Have a great Easter and good luck for the test, if I don't hear from you before 5th May. I hope the Plymouth odds'n' sods that I sent will be waiting for you when you get home. Hope this trip rekindles that flame for you both : ) Love Jack.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/29/2010 8:44:00 PM

Congratulations, CArolyn . A great topic you did with the limited words. LUv, Andrea

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/25/2010 11:57:00 AM

lovely entry Carolyn, congrats on your win

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/24/2010 11:28:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Carolyn in Nikko Palmario's contest "29 Words". Have a wonderful weekend. Love, Carol

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 9/23/2010 5:24:00 PM

Congratulations to you Carolyn on this winning write!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/23/2010 12:47:00 PM

Congratulations on this fine win in the contest, Carolyn

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/23/2010 11:02:00 AM

This sure is a sad write, Carolyn but quite moving-- wonderful take on the challenge :) Congrats on your win with this heart wrenching piece --nikko :)

David Smalling

Date: 9/17/2010 3:42:00 AM

No loss of things can match the loss of people. Bravo, Carolyn, well done for this contest

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/16/2010 7:36:00 PM

I like this. I am seeing really amazing things in this contest of Nikko's. I had no idea it could produce so many great free verse from people!!

Lynette Chachere

Date: 9/16/2010 5:00:00 PM

one word, it's beautiful. sending my wishes to you and everyone connected. .your words deserve the very best. ~Always&Forever Lynette

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 9/16/2010 6:00:00 AM

Yea! Well done, I love these kinds of challenges they bring about some great poetic thooughts... but can offer stiff competiion too! There is always avoid when someone we love has to leave for whatever the reason and you capture this perfectly, and yes good family help bring you along... know exactly where your mind is at right now...;D Thanks for all those beautiful comments today, is good to be posting again, apprecaite you, kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.

Sidney Hall Mad Poet

Date: 9/15/2010 4:18:00 PM

I got to try one of these. never written one before. It's good Carolyn. you made me feel sad now. I think i'll go write something funny now. By the way good luck in the contest :-)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/13/2010 11:42:00 AM

Good luck in the contest with this interesting write..Reads like a real winner to me..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..Sara

Gordon Hickman

Date: 9/13/2010 1:31:00 AM

Dear Carolyn, Many thanks indeed for your lovely comments. Your name suggests that you (or your husband's) family had some connection with my home County of Devonshire in UK at some time, and if so, you sure are connected to a beautiful County. Your poem is very moving in so few words. Gordon

Joyce Johnson

Date: 9/12/2010 9:42:00 PM

Great work Carolyn. Nice to be able to make sense and keep it to 29 different words. Love, Joyce

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 9/12/2010 1:40:00 PM

These were very heartfelt words that made a great poem.Thank you Carolyn for the chance to have my work regonized and the congrats on my win.Teresa

Daver Austin

Date: 9/12/2010 8:20:00 AM

Hi, Carolyn. Hope your health problem has been totally resolved for the good. "Family aids the recovery" How necessary. Love, Dave

Susan Palli

Date: 9/12/2010 8:00:00 AM

Another excellent write!

James Peranteau

Date: 9/12/2010 5:34:00 AM

A sad exit that makes a great entry. Hello dear Carolyn ! Awesome entry ! I could feel this poem Carolyn. much love, james

Charles Henderson

Date: 9/12/2010 2:22:00 AM

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/11/2010 6:14:00 PM

Very creative and touchy write for the contest, Carolyn. Good luck in the contest

James Fraser

Date: 9/11/2010 5:10:00 PM

Another heart packed piece from an amazing writer. Good luck in the contest Carolyn >> James

Constance La France

Date: 9/11/2010 12:43:00 PM

Thanks so much for commenting on my blog. I think you did a great job writing this poem and using 29 words, I still have to give it a try, best of luck in the contest.. Love Constance

Diane Locksley

Date: 9/11/2010 9:24:00 AM

Hope you are able to overcome this loss and find comfort from your family. And thanks for making me feel welcome. Take care, Diane

Wilma Neels

Date: 9/11/2010 9:12:00 AM

Heartfelt write Carolyn, the lost felt through your words.. Best of luck with this beauty for Nikko's contest.. Hope your weekend is a good one, love Wilma