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This is fiction.  We have no bears in Malta.

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Beneath the high cliff, a river flowed, Just near a bridge across a wide road. On the other side of the river A sandy beach stretched wide forever. A canoe appeared just you and me, We dragged the canoe on pebbles-free. We saw a willow that gave us shade. Just you and I in bathing suits stayed. We talked and planned our prospective life. Suddenly we found a bit of strife. A bear came nosing in our canoe In search of food, most birds away flew. Bear went away, the canoe useless. Killing the bear I would be ruthless. We dressed just me and you, called the guard. Soon he came and gave him a reward. Next day we met, you and I, alone. But in a garden in a soft tone So we talked a lot, just you and I, I gave her a ring and did she cry! That's the story of just you and I Placed 1

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Date: 10/15/2023 1:45:00 PM
a story written in poetic form...not many folks can do that...so congrats on having that skill. I loved the love in the last four lines...have a pleasant day, Sara
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Date: 9/5/2023 3:05:00 AM
Good Afternoon Victor. Hi. Yes, you know how to tell a story and turn it into a poetic fashion. This story is lovely with moments and imagery. And yes, I adore the ending. Beautiful... May today be a good day. Love Peace and Blessings always. Truly. (smiles)
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Date: 7/21/2023 10:00:00 AM
Victor, wonderful write and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge J Words !
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Date: 7/11/2023 11:14:00 PM
Congratulations on a great story and win:)
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Date: 7/11/2023 10:12:00 PM
Back to your beautiful poem with Congratulations on your first place win dear Victor !
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Date: 7/11/2023 2:25:00 PM
- Back with a congratulations, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 7/11/2023 9:37:00 AM
I enjoyed your story "just you and I" always makes for a good write and great song--"Just The Two Of Us" Congratulations!
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Date: 7/11/2023 3:27:00 AM
Indeed, a very interesting write. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/9/2023 3:33:00 PM
Nice little story for the J contest I assume?
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Date: 7/9/2023 7:00:00 AM
Your poems have such great romantic twists.
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Date: 7/9/2023 4:26:00 AM
Charming bed time story :)
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Date: 7/8/2023 11:18:00 AM
Hi, Victor! You are a natural writing story narratives! I antcipated the canoe would be destroyed, but still groaned when coming upon its actually happening! Then worried you 2 couldn’t return. Glad the cells worked! Look at the range of emotions in me from this poem! A most delightful read. Bravo! sally /Hugs!
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Date: 7/8/2023 9:55:00 AM
Nothing more important than sharing love. Everything else in life is illusion -- but love is real and immortal. Lovely story. Well done!
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Date: 7/8/2023 6:46:00 AM
Victor, such a sweet and soulful love story you have penned! A pleasure to read this morning!
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Date: 7/8/2023 6:13:00 AM
Interesting story line there.
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Date: 7/8/2023 5:58:00 AM
With a remarkable display of astute observation and profound contemplation, dear Victor, your literary prowess unveils itself in the most unexpected and captivating manner. Your imaginative faculties operate with unparalleled brilliance, enchanting readers with a tapestry of emotions and sentiments. The denouement of your tale, adorned with exquisite sweetness, leaves an indelible impression upon the depths of one's soul. Truly, the narrative of romance you have woven is an exquisite delight to behold.
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Date: 7/8/2023 5:41:00 AM
Your imagination works in unexpected ways. If she cried when you gave her the ring, it must have been the tears of joy. Have a great weekend.
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Date: 7/8/2023 12:26:00 AM
Thanks for sharing your Bear story Victor enjoyed reading my friend...
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Date: 7/7/2023 9:33:00 PM
Safer place to be, away from bears.. Great story. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/7/2023 4:41:00 PM
glad it had a happy ending Victor, I love joyful meetings and good vibes, :)
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Date: 7/7/2023 4:05:00 PM
I was in a tour boat in Alaska. Our boat was slightly close to shore. There a bear waited licking his lips and looking at the menu…us! That’s the realities in bear country..lol! Love your bear! :)
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Date: 7/7/2023 3:10:00 PM
A sweet ending, Victor. Enjoyed your story of romance.
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Date: 7/7/2023 1:34:00 PM
A scary encounter, and a sweet romance, along with gorgeous natural scenes, make this an entertaining story, Victor. Love it! :)
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Date: 7/7/2023 12:39:00 PM
- A sweet story, Victor ... just you and I ... but, I haven't forgotten the bear :))) - Good luck in the contest :) - Wishing you a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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Date: 7/7/2023 12:33:00 PM
aww what a charming poem and I love the romantic happy ending:-) hugs Jan xx
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