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Jolted by Twilight

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We sat cosy on the veranda, Watching the sun dipping on the horizon, Deep red twilight that suddenly turned dark granite. The sea grew stormy like a tsunami, and fear: It gripped us both; what a jolt by twilight. Sea waves reached our veranda, and we got wet. Fear! But then the twilight returned to red. So, it did not last long. And all was serene once more. NOT FOR ANY CONTEST

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Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/9/2024 8:48:00 AM

Positive ending, I like that:)

Paige Hind

Date: 11/8/2024 5:19:00 PM

An end that ended beautifully- that's good :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 11/8/2024 8:12:00 AM

What a scary feeling as waves reached your veranda, but glad all went back to normal. When the deep red twilight turned to granite, your fear grew but you relaxed as the twilight turned to red once more. Very cool write, cosy, then scary then cosy all over again. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Karen Jones

Date: 11/8/2024 7:35:00 AM

This was an engaging write that wrapped me in the verses! Well done!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/7/2024 11:16:00 PM

All is well that ends well! Loved this piece

Yann Rolland

Date: 11/7/2024 11:09:00 PM

gracious poetry, privileged reading, thanks this is beautiful

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 11/7/2024 9:59:00 PM

A brush with death! Superbly, so vividly depicted Victor, good luck for the contest

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 11/7/2024 6:36:00 PM

This is an exciting story. I like the dangerous climax in the middle with a calming relief at the ending. Your poems always intrigue me.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 11/7/2024 11:16:00 AM

Dear Victor, I love that you are such a great romantic poet. You can tell that your words are true emotions and love. What a delight to read! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 11/6/2024 8:21:00 PM

What a romantic tale, of beautiful twilight reaching out to touch a couple! Much enjoyed! It's a fave for me.

Valsa George

Date: 11/6/2024 7:40:00 PM

The serene evening was suddenly destroyed by the sea turning stormy. Things can change in an instant. But things returned to normal and twilight returned to red. Beautiful entry for the contest. All the best dear Victor.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/6/2024 3:43:00 PM

Well. I really like this. Put it in the contest!

Michael Tor

Date: 11/6/2024 6:03:00 AM

Victor this was so real to me when I read it. I could picture myself out there and be calm relaxing and suddenly a change of weather and ocean current taking me by surprise after looking at a surreal Horizon. The raw emotion you make the reader feel Victor is your ability to create a scene and bring the reader in to feel and see through your words this act of mother nature.

Michael Tor
Date: 11/6/2024 6:05:00 AM

The good news Victor is the ending going back to being calm. Your picture is beautiful my friend. This one is a favorite for me Victor got your Soupmail and I was on my way over was up all night watching Polls and election. Have a nice day and I am off to read your other one...

Deb M

Date: 11/6/2024 5:15:00 AM

Excellent imagery and poem Victor….a poem with romance, beauty and Fear! Cuddles…Debx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/6/2024 4:37:00 AM

Wow!! Nice scene paint minus the scare. I like the colors in the picture. Thanks for sharing. I just noted a contest being offered using this theme so back with saying reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K

Mike Gentile

Date: 11/6/2024 3:52:00 AM

Indeed Victor, your rich and vivid imagery, painted a perfect picture of the beautiful subject of twilight! Happy Wednesday!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/6/2024 3:24:00 AM

- The forces of nature amaze us ... with both joy and fear - Great poem, my friend :) - hugs

Ink Empress

Date: 11/5/2024 9:46:00 PM

Dear Victor, this is stunning how you’ve painted imagery in such a vivid and creative manner, and the ending is truly soul stirring. Theres always a serene dawn after every dimmed dusk and greying horizon. Pleasure reading you today. Sending you light always~

I Am Anaya

Date: 11/5/2024 12:54:00 PM

A reminder, Victor, everything can change extremities from one moment to another. Contentment in the end is good, cherish!~

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/5/2024 8:57:00 AM

Emotions can change in an instant!

Joseph May

Date: 11/5/2024 8:53:00 AM

Very nicely penned Victor, best wishes

Mike Bayles

Date: 11/5/2024 6:49:00 AM

Nice depiction of a storm with a touch of romance.

Tom Woody

Date: 11/5/2024 5:36:00 AM

Awesome photo and poem Victor. They say the sky is most calm and serene after a tornado

Tom Cunningham

Date: 11/5/2024 3:07:00 AM

Amazing how the weather can change in the blink of an eye,like we’re seeing in Spain right now. Tom

Maria Williams

Date: 11/5/2024 1:45:00 AM

Dear Victor, your poem vividly captures the intensity of nature's sudden shift, transforming a peaceful evening into a moment of fear and awe. The contrast between the tranquil sunset and the stormy surge of waves mirrors the unexpected turbulence in life, where calm can swiftly give way to chaos. Nicely done...Hugs