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The poem must begin with .. And the cemetery was then continue with your poem
And the cemetery was shrouded in a veil of early morning mist which rose eerily from the grey granite and marble graves. Desperately searching I crept silently from gravestone to gravestone. My breath came out in tiny white clouds as soft white snowflakes performed pirouettes, falling like a downy blanket over the cold marble. Eventually I came across your final resting place I recognised the two golden cherubs, carved on either side of your headstone Gently I brushed away the snow and traced your names with my fingertip It had only been a few weeks since you had fallen asleep forever How I longed to hold you and sing you both a lullaby But it was too late and you lay together in the arms of Jesus I placed two red roses on the snowy pillow Then lay down and waited for the sleeping pills to take effect So we could be reunited in death Submitted to Laura Loo's Best sad poem ever contest. Fictional write for ‘And the Cemetery Was’ contest sponsored by Broken Wings 05~17~16

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Date: 8/30/2016 3:45:00 AM
Your detail in expressing the little things brought this poem to life. Sad but wonderful Jan! Congratulations on your first placement!7 ; )
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Date: 8/30/2016 3:39:00 AM
Snow flakes' pirouettes, congratulations, Kai
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Date: 8/29/2016 1:18:00 PM
Hi Jan, Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis
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Date: 8/29/2016 11:20:00 AM
Beautiful imagery, so very sad, and there is so much left unsaid that the poem lingers in the mind. Congrats on your win, Jan.
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Date: 8/29/2016 10:06:00 AM
Oh Jan, you hit the nail with this one lady! You knew it would get to me! A winner right away...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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Date: 6/2/2016 5:49:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win!!!! Congratulations again on your owl poem it makes me feel like I was there with you when you wrote it . I'm so proud of you :-)
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Date: 6/2/2016 6:20:00 PM
Oh Eve if it hadn't been for your contest inspiring me it would never have got written so I have YOU to thank:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 4:31:00 PM
Jan, congratulations on first place in my contest, oh my what an incredible write so beautifully written and so heartbreaking, that ending was a shock, well done , Constance
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Date: 6/2/2016 5:30:00 PM
Thanks so much Constance I am so pleased you liked my sad poem I am delighted with the high placement:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 10:03:00 AM
Woah, the emotion is raw here... Love it! Congrats Jan
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:11:00 PM
Thanks so much Lukas:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 8:27:00 AM
Congratulations, Jan. ...Fran
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Date: 6/2/2016 8:41:00 AM
Thanks so much Fran:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 3:48:00 AM
I knew this would win:) A big congratulations, Jan:)
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Date: 6/2/2016 4:02:00 AM
Thanks so much Jo I was delighted that Constance liked my poem so much - I do like to write with humour but do suprise people with a more serious poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/2/2016 12:00:00 AM
Tragic, poignant. The imagery is very powerful. The desolation of the landscape and that of the mind comes through powerfully. I could feel a finger tracing out names on my heart. Congrats for such a powerful poem and terrific win. ~karam~
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:34:00 AM
Thanks so much Karam I was delighted to place so well in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/1/2016 9:59:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Jan!
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:35:00 AM
Thanks Meenakshi:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/1/2016 8:46:00 PM
Wow! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:35:00 AM
Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/1/2016 8:35:00 PM
Back to congratulate your on your First Place win, Jan! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:36:00 AM
Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/1/2016 6:42:00 PM
Congrats on your win Jan
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:37:00 AM
Thanks so much Jospeh:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/1/2016 6:36:00 PM
Congratulations Jan. I just found this finished contest. Well done. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/2/2016 3:37:00 AM
Thanks Joyce I've yet to read the winning poems I'm dleighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/29/2016 7:24:00 AM
Jan, this is a superb construction! I feel transported on the wings of imagery to that nameless cemetery. But I would flee for dear life if I saw mist rise from a grave as though wafted by an unseen hand below the marble.
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Date: 5/29/2016 12:02:00 PM
Thanks Agona I was so delighted to get POTD I'd been struggling with my creativity and my muse was on holiday :-( this gave me the boost I needed:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/24/2016 6:31:00 AM
Very sad Jan, you truly captured the despair and the pain of a tragic loss, well done! Congrats on POTD
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Date: 5/24/2016 3:03:00 PM
Thanks so much John I was so delighted to get POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/20/2016 6:43:00 AM
Awesome and refreshing. A jaw breaking 7.
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Date: 5/20/2016 12:32:00 PM
Thanks Funom:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/20/2016 6:04:00 AM
Hi Jan, Congrats on getting the poem of the day. It was well deserved. Enjoy the honor- Alexis
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Date: 5/20/2016 12:32:00 PM
Thanks Alexis I was delighted:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/20/2016 2:29:00 AM
I'm a day late, still Congrats on the Poem of the Day:)
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Date: 5/20/2016 5:27:00 AM
Thanks Jo I'm really delighted:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/20/2016 2:28:00 AM
Haunting but Excellent:) loved the line - "But it was too late and you lay together in the arms of Jesus":) All the best in the contest:)
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Date: 5/20/2016 5:27:00 AM
Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xxx
Date: 5/20/2016 1:02:00 AM
Haunting and captivating write. Great share.
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Date: 5/20/2016 1:31:00 AM
Thanks you:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/19/2016 10:16:00 PM
Wow!!! Great write, Jan, an outstanding piece. Congratulations on Poem of the Day!!! Good luck in the contest!
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Date: 5/20/2016 1:31:00 AM
Thanks Eve I'm so delighted to get POTD been struggling with my creativity and not been around as much - am so glad to have my muse back:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/19/2016 9:50:00 PM
Your write is sadly poignant and visually effective at the same time! The last two lines speak volumes!! The best to you in this contest Jan! :-)
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Date: 5/20/2016 1:29:00 AM
Thanks Walter:-) hugs Jan xx
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