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Constance La France's Heartbroken Contest...17Jul 2025 ' perhaps the most unforgettable moment of young adulthood is the bittersweet taste of first love fading away...' by poet

 

I feel your unrehearsed pauses-- the rustle of a blue shirt in leaving a tangy ache your firm lips make, holding back cold, collected words. This rendezvous ... a slow-fire quiver an ending which has it's own interment; and outside, night wrestles with time brittle dew against my eyes, dry mouth licking an estranged bite that reminds me of your frivolity . Until sighs become hollow and stuttering like a thirst from a weltering breakwall. So it is with discovery, the trails of affection are never mine as I call you grimly,' 0 heart-breaker' while banging shells litter on the dunes as this heart shrinks from tangled lies: There is still much to learn about young passion... needles upon my chest losing you from sight like a migrant breeze... for a woman , fragile at eighteen.

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Date: 7/19/2025 8:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. What a wonderful write. Love the ending... To be 18 again. I have been off the computer for a few days. Have a blessed day with your wonderful win...................
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Date: 7/19/2025 7:50:00 AM
WOW, now this is poetry, causing me to pause, to feel and taste the bite of passion's first growl l....MAGNIFICENT...IMNSHO
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Date: 7/19/2025 6:57:00 AM
Dear Nette, Eighteen is so young, and yet I believe you carry the weight of love’s disappointments like a seasoned soul. This is such a fragile, brave part of you. Congrats on POTD. Summer Blessings, My Dear Nette, Daniel
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Date: 7/19/2025 5:34:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your beautiful poem receiving POTD! Enjoy your day xxoo
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Date: 7/19/2025 5:14:00 AM
Awww how nice to see this in the spotlight. Enjoy
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Date: 7/19/2025 4:47:00 AM
returning to congratulate you on a well-deserved POTD...your words are poignant and beautiful
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Date: 7/19/2025 3:55:00 AM
Poignant, painful, piercing, superbly penned as always, Nette, warmest congratulations on POTD
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Date: 7/19/2025 2:41:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on a passionate potd!
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Date: 7/19/2025 12:38:00 AM
Dear Nette,your imagery stirs such a quiet ache — the “rustle of a blue shirt in leaving,” and “needles upon my chest” carry such emotional precision. There's a delicate tension in every line between longing and letting go, like the lingering warmth of someone who's already vanished. This poem moves like memory —Congratulations on this being awarded POTD...Hugs
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Date: 7/18/2025 5:13:00 PM
absolutely beautiful and flowing lines! Yes, first love is bittersweet and you've capture the feelings quite well. Best wishes with the contest, Sara PS Faving
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Date: 7/18/2025 6:16:00 AM
How I remember my first taste of love (from the song Strawberry Wine). Bittersweet and sure to crash. The song you chose- I remember it well. Such a powerful lyric and delivery
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Date: 7/17/2025 8:29:00 PM
Wow, your memories are haunting - in my favs, surely
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